Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be improved by separating ideas into clearer sentences and avoiding run-on sentences. Also, adding linking words would make your response more coherent.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style. I usually buy new shoes every few months to keep my collection updated.

Suggestion: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and linking words to clarify your points. Also, avoid repetition and be more specific about why you prefer online shopping.

Example: Yes, to be honest, I have bought most of my shoes online because I find a wider variety of styles and better prices compared to offline stores.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by reducing filler words and expanding your explanation with linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

Example: I usually spend about ¥500 on shoes. Although this might be a bit expensive, I believe it's worth it because the shoes are durable and last a long time.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and linking words to express your opinion more naturally.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because comfort is my top priority. However, fashion is also important, so I try to find a balance between the two.

× Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style and usually buy new shoes every few months.

✓ Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they allow me to express my personal style, and I usually buy new shoes every few months.

The original sentence lacks a subject in the second clause before 'usually buy new shoes every few months'. Adding 'I' clarifies the subject and corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, to be honest most of the shoes I have bought on the Internet because I find it more style and and cheaper shoes on the Internet rather than offline.

✓ Yes, to be honest, most of the shoes I have bought are on the Internet because I find more stylish and cheaper shoes online rather than offline.

The original sentence is missing the verb 'are' after 'most of the shoes I have bought', causing a sentence structure error. Also, 'more style and and cheaper shoes' is awkward; it should be 'more stylish and cheaper shoes'. Additionally, 'on the Internet' is better replaced with 'online' for naturalness.

× Yes, to be honest most of the shoes I have bought on the Internet because I find it more style and and cheaper shoes on the Internet rather than offline.

✓ Yes, to be honest, most of the shoes I have bought are on the Internet because I find more stylish and cheaper shoes online rather than offline.

The phrase 'most of the shoes I have bought on the Internet' lacks the verb 'are', causing subject-verb agreement issues. Adding 'are' after 'bought' corrects this.

× Yes, to be honest most of the shoes I have bought on the Internet because I find it more style and and cheaper shoes on the Internet rather than offline.

✓ Yes, to be honest, most of the shoes I have bought are on the Internet because I find more stylish and cheaper shoes online rather than offline.

The phrase 'more style and and cheaper shoes' is incorrect; 'style' should be the adjective 'stylish' to modify 'shoes'. Also, the repeated 'and' is a typographical error.

× Yes, to be honest most of the shoes I have bought on the Internet because I find it more style and and cheaper shoes on the Internet rather than offline.

✓ Yes, to be honest, most of the shoes I have bought are on the Internet because I find more stylish and cheaper shoes online rather than offline.

Using 'on the Internet' repeatedly is less natural than 'online'. Also, 'rather than offline' is acceptable but 'offline' is better as an adverb without 'the'.

× Uh, it's about ¥500. Um, it's a bit expensive, but they are all durable and I think it's worth it to buy them.

✓ Uh, it's about ¥500. Um, it's a bit expensive, but they are all durable and I think it's worth buying them.

The phrase 'it's worth it to buy them' is awkward. The correct expression is 'it's worth buying them' to indicate the value of the purchase.

× Though is the best to take a balance.

✓ Though it is best to strike a balance.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb agreement, making it unclear. Adding 'it is' and changing 'take a balance' to 'strike a balance' corrects the sentence structure and uses the correct idiomatic expression.