Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần trực tiếp hơn, sửa ngữ pháp và lặp từ. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bằng lý do cụ thể và tần suất (ví dụ: once or twice a year). Tránh lặp từ như “limited budget to my limited budget to” và dùng thì phù hợp (‘I’m’ → ‘I’m not keen on’ hoặc ‘I don’t often buy’).

Example: I don't often buy shoes; I only buy them when I need to, usually once or twice a year. As a secondary school student, I prefer to save my limited pocket money for essentials and school supplies.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nội dung rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa lỗi phát âm/chi tiết và cấu trúc câu. Tránh lặp từ (‘However, However’) và sai chữ (shows → shoes). Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc và nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về trang web hoặc trải nghiệm trả hàng.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I find it convenient because I can quickly compare prices across many stores, and online shops often offer better discounts. However, I always check the return policy in case the shoes don't fit.

Suggestion: Cần nêu rõ đơn vị tiền tệ và sửa ngữ pháp (old one → old ones; a year → per year). Nên đưa con số cụ thể với đơn vị và giải thích sơ bộ (ví dụ: 30–50 dollars/pounds). Dùng câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm chi tiết với linking words như 'because' hoặc 'so'.

Example: I don't spend much on shoes because I'm a secondary school student. I usually save my pocket money and only replace shoes when my old ones are worn out, so I spend about $30–$50 a year.

Suggestion: Ý tưởng rõ ràng và có ví dụ, nhưng cần sửa vài lỗi nhỏ và làm câu mạch lạc hơn (remove redundant words like 'it they have they are'). Thêm một liên kết ngắn để giải thích hậu quả hoặc so sánh với giày thời trang để tăng cụ thể. Giữ độ dài dưới 5 câu.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are more practical and support my feet when I'm active. For example, I usually wear sneakers to school and casual events since they keep me comfortable and allow me to move around easily, unlike fashionable shoes which can be restrictive.

× No, I'm not willing to buy shoes.

✓ No, I'm not willing to buy shoes at the moment.

The original sentence is grammatical but sounds unnatural in context. Adding 'at the moment' clarifies temporary willingness. Use of modal verb 'willing' is fine; improve clarity by including time reference.

× I'm only purchase it when it's necessary.

✓ I only purchase them when it's necessary.

The verb form was incorrect: after 'I' use the base form with appropriate subject-verb agreement. Also 'shoes' is plural so use 'them' not 'it'. Change 'I'm only purchase' to 'I only purchase' or 'I only buy'.

× As a secondary school students, I prefer to spend my limited budget to my limited budget to.

✓ As a secondary school student, I prefer to spend my limited budget carefully.

Subject is singular so use 'student' not 'students'. The phrase was repeated and awkward; simplify to 'spend my limited budget carefully'. This fixes number agreement and removes repetition.

× Yes, I have bought shows online several times.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online several times.

Spelling error: 'shows' should be 'shoes'. The present perfect 'have bought' is correct for past experiences; only the noun needed correction.

× I find it convenient because I can compare sales and prices across many store quickly and often there are better discount many in than in physical shops.

✓ I find it convenient because I can compare sales and prices across many stores quickly, and often there are better discounts online than in physical shops.

Multiple issues: 'store' should be plural 'stores'; adverb placement 'quickly' placed after noun is acceptable but comma improves clarity; 'discount' should be plural 'discounts'; word order 'many in than in' is wrong — correct to 'online than in'. Replaced 'many in' with 'online' for intended meaning.

× However, However, I always check return policies.

✓ However, I always check return policies.

Repeated 'However' is redundant. Remove the duplicate to correct sentence structure.

× I usually save my pocket money and only buy new shoes when my old one are worn out.

✓ I usually save my pocket money and only buy new shoes when my old ones are worn out.

Number agreement: 'one' should be 'ones' to match plural 'shoes'. 'Are' is correct with plural 'ones'.

× So I spend about 30 to 50 a year.

✓ So I spend about 30 to 50 dollars a year.

Missing unit 'dollars' makes sentence unclear. Also include currency unit to be precise; plural 'dollars' matches numeric range.

× From my perspective, I prefer comfortable shoes because it they have they are more practical for every use and support my feet when I work a lot.

✓ From my perspective, I prefer comfortable shoes because they are more practical for everyday use and support my feet when I do a lot of walking.

Pronoun errors: remove extraneous 'it' and duplicate 'they'. 'Every use' is unnatural; use 'everyday use'. 'Work a lot' is unclear for feet — change to 'do a lot of walking' for clarity.

× For example, I usually wear sneakers to school and to casual events because they keep me comfortable and let me move around easily.

✓ For example, I usually wear sneakers to school and to casual events because they keep me comfortable and let me move around easily.

This sentence is correct. No grammatical correction needed; prepositions and structure are appropriate.