Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your response more concise and natural by removing filler phrases, fixing grammar, and limiting to a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition (e.g., don’t repeat 'I really like it'). Also correct small errors like 'or or' and informal phrases such as 'super cute.'

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually go shopping every few months. I prefer flats or running shoes because I like to try them on to ensure they fit well and are comfortable when I walk.

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate and fluent: avoid fillers like 'uh', use correct comparisons, and shorten the answer to one topic sentence plus supporting details. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' correctly. Replace vague terms like 'online website' with 'online stores' and correct comparative forms.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes from online stores such as Tokopedia because they offer a wider selection and lower prices than physical shops, so I can find good deals more easily.

Suggestion: Be specific and grammatically correct: state the currency, use consistent tense, and avoid redundancy. Limit to a clear topic sentence with one supporting example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' appropriately and correct plural/singular and word order errors.

Example: I usually spend about 300 to 500 rupiahs/dollars (specify currency) on a pair of shoes because I buy affordable but good-quality items online; for example, yesterday I bought a pair of flat shoes for 350 and they are comfortable and durable.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and phrasing, remove redundancy, and make the reason concise and logical. Use linking words like 'because' and correct adjective/noun order (e.g., 'good quality and comfortable'). Replace incorrect words such as 'unnecessary' with the intended word 'necessary' or 'important'.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute by train and spend a lot of time standing and walking, so comfortable, good-quality shoes are important to prevent sore feet.

× I usually look for flats or or running shoes because I like to try them on to make sure they are comfortable and fit well.

✓ I usually look for flats or running shoes because I like to try them on to make sure they are comfortable and fit well.

There is a repeated word 'or or' which is a typing error rather than a grammar category in the list; correction removes the duplicate. Ensure to proofread to avoid accidental repeated words.

× And a lot of new shoes nowadays is super cute.

✓ And a lot of new shoes nowadays are super cute.

Subject 'a lot of new shoes' is plural, so the verb must be plural ('are' instead of 'is'). Use plural verb agreement with plural quantifiers.

× As I said earlier, I often buy shoes uh from online website or Tokopedia because they offer a wide variety of shoes.

✓ As I said earlier, I often buy shoes from online websites or Tokopedia because they offer a wide variety of shoes.

Use the plural 'websites' when speaking generally. Also 'from online website' should be 'from online websites' or 'from an online website'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal speech.

× Also they cheaper than the actual offline store and it's more easier.

✓ Also they are cheaper than actual offline stores and it's easier.

The sentence lacks the verb 'are' after 'they'. 'The actual offline store' is better as 'actual offline stores' to match general comparison. 'More easier' is redundant; use 'easier' or 'more easy' but correct is 'easier'.

× I usually spend about 300 to 500 on new shoes because I bought them from online stores where affordable option still have a good quality.

✓ I usually spend about 300 to 500 on new shoes because I buy them from online stores where affordable options still have good quality.

Tense consistency: the answer describes a habitual action so use present simple 'buy' not past 'bought'. 'Option' should be plural 'options' to agree with 'stores' and 'still have a good quality' is awkward — better 'still have good quality'. Adjust for subject-verb agreement.

× Like for example yesterday I just bought 350 a pair of shoes flat shoes.

✓ For example, yesterday I bought a pair of flat shoes for 350.

Word order and redundancy: 'Like for example' is redundant; choose one. Use correct order 'bought a pair of flat shoes for 350'. Remove duplicate 'shoes' and 'just' is unnecessary.

× They are comfortable and durable.

✓ They are comfortable and durable.

Sentence is grammatically correct; provided to show no change needed. 'They' (plural) correctly take 'are'.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute by train to work and I spend a lot of time standing and walking, so a pair of shoes with a good quality and comfortable are unnecessary for me from getting my feet sore during the commute.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute by train to work and I spend a lot of time standing and walking, so a pair of shoes with good quality and comfort is necessary to prevent my feet from getting sore during the commute.

Multiple issues: 'a pair of shoes ... are' must be singular 'is' because 'a pair' is singular (subject-verb agreement). 'With a good quality and comfortable' is incorrect adjective use; use 'with good quality and comfort' or 'comfortable' as an adjective before 'shoes'. The meaning 'unnecessary' contradicts context; likely intended 'necessary'. 'From getting my feet sore' should be 'to prevent my feet from getting sore'. The corrected sentence fixes word order, verb agreement, adjective use, and clarity.