Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 2–3 specific occasions as supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct article and tense errors.

Example: Yes, I do. I consider shoes an essential accessory, so I buy them reasonably often. For example, I own different pairs for weddings, work meetings, walking and the gym, because each activity requires a different type of footwear.

Suggestion: Correct sentence structure and tense, remove hesitations and redundancy, and give a brief consequence or lesson learned. Use linking words (for example, so, therefore) to make the sequence clear.

Example: Yes. Two years ago I bought a pair of shoes online, but the size didn't fit, so I never wore them. Therefore, since then I prefer to try shoes in person to ensure the right fit.

Suggestion: Start with a clear estimate or general rule, then explain the reason with a linking word. Use specific phrases (e.g. 'around $X' or 'I usually spend between...') and avoid contradictory statements about necessity.

Example: I usually spend only a modest amount on shoes — around $40–$70 per pair. I do this because I prioritise having a few suitable pairs for different occasions rather than buying expensive designer footwear.

Suggestion: Give a direct choice sentence, then support it with 2 specific reasons connected by linking words (for example, because, although). Avoid repetition and fix grammar and word order issues.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes. Because I wear shoes for long periods, comfort prevents pain and allows me to stay active, although younger people might prioritise fashion for special events.

× Yes, actually I think it's would be necessary accessory and I like to buy many shoes for many occasion, for many different occasions, for example for wedding, for meeting, for walking and for going to the gym.

✓ Yes, actually I think it's a necessary accessory and I like to buy many shoes for many different occasions, for example for weddings, for meetings, for walking and for going to the gym.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'necessary accessory' and wrong use of 'would be' with 'it's' — use 'it's a necessary accessory'. ’Many occasion' should be plural 'many different occasions'. Also use plural forms for the examples: 'weddings' and 'meetings'. Suggestion: include the indefinite article 'a' before singular count nouns and make occasions consistent in plural when listing examples. Additional note: This correction addresses adjective/adverb and article use combined; the main error type is incorrect use of adjectives/phrasing affecting noun forms.

× Yes, as you can remember, two years ago I bought a shoes from an online shop and unfortunately it size its size was not suitable for me and I I I've never tried that shoes. So I decided to buy shoes in person.

✓ Yes, as you may remember, two years ago I bought a pair of shoes from an online shop and unfortunately its size was not suitable for me and I had never tried those shoes. So I decided to buy shoes in person.

Singular/plural errors: 'a shoes' is incorrect — use 'a pair of shoes' or just 'shoes'. Pronoun agreement: 'it size its size' is redundant; use 'its size'. 'I I I've' is repetition; choose one form. 'that shoes' should be 'those shoes' for plural. Also use past perfect 'had never tried' to indicate prior action relative to buying. Suggestion: use 'a pair of shoes' for a single purchase of footwear, use 'those' for plural demonstratives, and remove repeated words. Main problem type: singular and plural mismatch and demonstrative pronoun incorrectness.

× To be honest, I usually don't spend too much money on buying shoes because I think it's not a necessary accessory and I just try to have some suitable shoes for different occasions and different activities.

✓ To be honest, I usually don't spend too much money on shoes because I think they're not a necessary accessory and I just try to have some suitable shoes for different occasions and activities.

Tense mostly fine, but pronoun and phrasing issues: 'it's not a necessary accessory' refers to 'shoes' (plural), so use 'they're' or rephrase 'shoes are not a necessary accessory'. 'On buying shoes' is wordy; 'on shoes' is more natural. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and simplify phrasing. Marked as present tense issue because of incorrect present-tense pronoun agreement.

× If I had to choose, I'd definitely go for a comfortable shoes because I think it's more important than than than.

✓ If I had to choose, I'd definitely go for comfortable shoes because I think comfort is more important.

Subject-verb/number agreement: 'a comfortable shoes' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'shoes' — remove the article or use 'a comfortable shoe' (unnatural). Also 'it's more important than than than' is fragmented and unclear; better to say 'comfort is more important' or 'they are more important'. Suggestion: remove incorrect article and simplify the comparison, avoid repetition. Primary issue: subject-verb/number agreement.

× The shoes be stylish and fashionable, but depend on the age of people some somebody may choose fashionable and stylish shoes.

✓ Shoes can be stylish and fashionable, but depending on a person's age someone may choose fashionable shoes.

'The shoes be stylish' uses incorrect verb form for present possibility; use modal 'can be' or present 'are'. 'Depend on the age of people' should be 'depending on a person's age' or 'depending on people's age', and 'some somebody' is redundancy — use 'someone' or 'some people'. Suggestion: use correct modal or present tense for capability, use 'depending on' for conditions, and choose a single indefinite pronoun. Classified as incorrect passive voice because 'be' was misused as a passive/nonfinite form; correction uses active/modal construction.