Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on directly answering the question first (e.g., yes/no and frequency), use simple clear sentences, correct key vocabulary (shoes, gifted, bought), avoid irrelevant words, and keep responses to no more than 3–4 short sentences. Also organize with a topic sentence + one or two supporting details and use a linking word if needed.

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes. I don’t buy them very often — maybe once every few months. Today I received a pink pair of shoes as a birthday gift from my mother, so I’m very happy with them.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + frequency or experience). Use correct verbs and nouns (bought, shoes), give a specific example, and explain briefly with linking words (for example, however). Keep to 2–3 supporting sentences and avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online a few times. For example, I ordered a pair that looked great in the photos but the size was wrong, so it did not fit well. However, overall I find buying shoes online convenient because it saves time.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear amount or range, then give one brief reason. Use correct currency format and precise vocabulary (like, quality, style) and avoid long unclear phrases. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

Example: I usually spend about $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes. I spend that much because I prefer good quality shoes that are comfortable and last longer.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct opinion first (I prefer…), then add 1–2 supporting reasons with linking words (because, so). Use correct word forms (shoes, play sports, easy to move) and avoid filler sounds. Keep answer within 3 sentences for clarity.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I go to school and often play sports with my friends. Therefore I need shoes that are easy to move in and provide good support.

× Oh, Australia is I know.

✓ Oh, I know Australia.

Word order is incorrect. The subject and clause should be arranged as 'I know Australia' to form a correct subject-verb-object structure. Suggestion: place the speaker 'I' before the verb 'know' and the object 'Australia' after it.

× Actually today I have a beautiful show with the the colored pink with the color is pink and my strolls are bored for by my mother for my birthday.

✓ Actually, today I have a beautiful pair of shoes that are pink, and my shoes were bought by my mother for my birthday.

Multiple issues: 'show' should be 'shoes' (word choice), 'the the' is duplicated, and 'pair of shoes' needs article/quantity. Use plural 'shoes' and passive 'were bought by my mother' for correct tense. Also 'strolls' is incorrect; use 'shoes'. Suggestion: use 'a beautiful pair of shoes that are pink' and 'were bought by my mother'.

× So I'm very, uh, happy and I'm very.

✓ So I'm very happy.

Sentence is incomplete and repetitive. Remove the extra 'and I'm very' to complete the thought. Suggestion: end the sentence after 'very happy' or add an adjective (e.g., 'very excited').

× Oh yes, uh, I have ever bought 2 online, but I think sometime I bought my seal online as the my show is very beautiful and sometimes it's not as good for me.

✓ Oh yes, I have bought two pairs online, but sometimes the shoes I bought online are beautiful and sometimes they are not as good for me.

Incorrect use of 'ever' with present perfect here and number/word choices. Use 'have bought' with a quantifier 'two pairs', and 'sometimes' should be placed before the clause. 'Seal' and 'show' appear to be misused; use 'shoes'. Also match plural agreement 'they are'. Suggestion: use 'I have bought two pairs online' and 'sometimes they are not as good'.

× Uh, but I think uh, book, uh, book a show online is the very easy and inconvenient for the everyone.

✓ But I think buying shoes online is very easy and convenient for everyone.

'Book a show' is incorrect; use 'buying shoes'. 'Inconvenient' is opposite meaning; use 'convenient'. Article 'the' before 'everyone' is incorrect. Suggestion: use the gerund 'buying' to refer to the action and 'convenient for everyone'.

× Oh, I usually spend $1000 to on my shoes because I'm very like the beautiful shows and Elaine Dominant shows that which I want to buy a good show or have a quality show to go around.

✓ Oh, I usually spend about $100 on my shoes because I really like beautiful shoes and I want to buy good-quality shoes to wear when I go out.

Amount and preposition were incorrect ('$1000 to on'); use 'spend about $100 on my shoes'. Many word-choice errors: 'shows' should be 'shoes', 'Elaine Dominant' unclear and removed, and 'go around' corrected to 'go out' or 'wear when I go out'. Use adjective 'good-quality'. Suggestion: simplify and use 'spend about $100 on shoes' and 'good-quality shoes to wear when I go out'.

× Oh, I think, uh, I will choose uh, comfortable shows because I often go to school.

✓ Oh, I think I will choose comfortable shoes because I often go to school.

Use 'shoes' not 'shows' and keep plural agreement. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: use 'comfortable shoes'.

× I, uh, like the playing sport with my friends.

✓ I like playing sports with my friends.

Do not use 'the' before gerund 'playing'. Use plural 'sports' for general activities. Suggestion: 'I like playing sports with my friends.'

× So I want to choose uh, comfortable show to uh, easy to move and easy to play the order Spock and uh, move.

✓ So I want to choose comfortable shoes so they are easy to move in and easy to play sports in.

Use plural 'shoes' and correct infinitive structure 'so they are easy to move in'. 'Play the order Spock' is meaningless; likely 'play sports'. Use 'in' with 'move' and 'play sports'. Suggestion: say 'comfortable shoes so they are easy to move in and easy to play sports in'.