Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and frequency), then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/word forms. Keep under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I buy shoes fairly often — about once a month. I like to have different types for different activities, for example trainers for the gym and sturdy boots for hiking. Also, I sometimes buy a pair as a souvenir when I travel.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use correct sentence structure: state whether you have, then give 1–2 clear reasons using linking words (because, so). Mention a specific example or experience to be more concrete.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is very convenient and there is a wider selection. For example, I usually order from a site that delivers within three days, so I can plan ahead for events.

Suggestion: Give a clear numeric range and avoid vague or self-deprecating comments. Use correct currency placement and word order. Provide a brief reason or comparison to explain your choice.

Example: I usually spend between CN¥100 and CN¥300 on each pair of shoes because I prefer affordable but durable options. This price range suits my budget and the quality I expect.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly, then give a concise reason with a linking phrase (because, so). Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use one specific example to illustrate the problem with fashionable but uncomfortable shoes.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I am on my feet a lot during the day. For instance, high heels may look stylish but they hurt after a few hours, so I choose comfort for daily wear.

× Well, I usually buy shoes once a month I guess 'cause I need to.

✓ Well, I usually buy shoes once a month, I guess, because I need to.

Run-on punctuation and conversational contractions: add commas to separate clauses and expand 'cause to because for clarity. The verb tense 'usually buy' is correct; punctuation improves sentence flow.

× I need different types of shoes to do different things like go to gym, I need to have a souvenir and when I was going to hiking I also need to.

✓ I need different types of shoes for different activities, like going to the gym. I need casual shoes for daily wear, and when I go hiking I also need hiking boots.

Incorrect verb forms and awkward prepositions: 'go to gym' should be 'going to the gym' (gerund with definite article). 'Going to hiking' is wrong — use 'go hiking' or 'going hiking'. Also sentence structure was run-on; split into clear sentences and use specific nouns (hiking boots) for clarity.

× Yes, of course, due to the shopping online, the convenience of the shopping online websites are usually by my all my uh, clothes and shoes on the shopping online website, it's very convenient for me to receive the stuff uh, on the given day.

✓ Yes, of course. Because of online shopping, I usually buy all my clothes and shoes from shopping websites; it is very convenient to receive the items on the scheduled day.

Preposition and article misuse: 'due to the shopping online' should be 'because of online shopping' or 'due to online shopping'. 'On the shopping online website' should be 'from shopping websites'. Also subject-verb agreement fixed ('websites are' changed by rephrasing). Removed filler words and clarified 'given day' to 'scheduled day'.

× Well, 'cause I'm not rich enough. So I just buy some, buy the shoes on the range of 100 to CN¥300 for pursues. Umm, every pair of shoes.

✓ Well, because I'm not rich, I usually buy shoes in the range of CN¥100 to CN¥300 per pair; that is affordable for me.

Informal contraction and number/order errors: 'cause' expanded to 'because'. Currency format standardized to 'CN¥100 to CN¥300'. 'for pursues' is incorrect — likely meant 'per pair' or 'purchases'; corrected to 'per pair'. Combined fragments into one coherent sentence.

× Pairs of shoes. I think it's affordable for me.

✓ I think that price range is affordable for me.

Fragment: 'Pairs of shoes.' is a sentence fragment. Combine with the following sentence to make a complete, grammatical sentence and clarify the subject ('that price range').

× Oh I think the fashionable 1 is good but the comfortable 1 is what I preferred because because umm if you wear a pair of shoes it's beautiful but not comfortable.

✓ Oh, I think fashionable shoes are nice, but I prefer comfortable ones because if you wear a pair of shoes that is beautiful but not comfortable,

Use of numerals '1' is incorrect; replace with 'ones' or 'shoes'. Tense inconsistency: 'is what I preferred' should be 'I prefer' (present preference). 'it's beautiful but not comfortable' needs relative clause 'that is beautiful but not comfortable'.

× You have to stand it for the whole day whilst you walking outside, it's painful.

✓ you have to stand in them for the whole day while you are walking outside; it's painful.

Verb and preposition errors: 'stand it' is wrong — use 'stand in them' (stand in the shoes). 'whilst you walking' needs auxiliary: 'while you are walking'. Also replace comma splice with semicolon or split sentences. 'Whilst' is acceptable but 'while' is more natural in this context.