Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid hesitations and repetition, and give a clear frequency with correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason and a precise frequency using linking words. Also correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'enhance' needs a subject agreement; 'borrow' is wrong here).

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they enhance my appearance. For example, I usually buy one or two pairs each month. In addition, I pick styles that suit my wardrobe so I feel more confident.

Suggestion: Answer directly, use correct tense and clearer phrasing. If you have not, say so and explain why or if you plan to in the future. Use linking words like 'however' or 'in the future' to show intent. Avoid repeating words.

Example: No, I haven't bought shoes online yet. However, I plan to try online shopping in the near future because it offers more choices and convenient delivery.

Suggestion: Give a clear numeric range using correct currency units and avoid repetition. Start with the amount, then explain briefly why you spend that much with a specific reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar (e.g., 'it's' → 'they are' or 'shoe spending is').

Example: I usually spend about 5,000 to 10,000 rupees on shoes each time. I spend this because quality shoes last longer and they complete my outfits, which helps me look more professional.

Suggestion: Good contrast structure; reduce hesitations and correct word choices (e.g., 'chapels' → 'chappals', 'Snickers' → 'sneakers'). Start with a clear topic sentence stating preference varies by occasion, then give two specific examples using linking words like 'however' or 'for example'.

Example: It depends on the occasion: for special events I prefer fashionable shoes such as heels or traditional chappals, however for everyday use like going to college I choose comfortable sneakers.

× I like buying shoes very well and uh, because it's enhance my personality and uh, I mostly, uh, in a month, I, I, I borrow one to two shoes.

✓ I like buying shoes very much because they enhance my personality, and mostly I buy one or two pairs a month.

Original uses incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'shoes' and incorrect verb form 'enhance' after 'it's'. Also 'very well' is unnatural for liking; use 'very much'. 'Borrow' is wrong context; likely 'buy'. 'One to two shoes' should be 'one or two pairs'. Suggestions: use correct pronoun-number agreement ('they' for shoes), correct verb agreement, and natural collocations ('very much', 'buy', 'pairs').

× No, I have not experienced yet. Experienced yet, but I think I bought in future as well.

✓ No, I have not experienced it yet, but I think I will buy shoes online in the future.

Errors: missing object 'it' after 'experienced', sentence fragment 'Experienced yet', incorrect past form 'bought' used for future. Use present perfect with 'yet' ('have not experienced it yet') and future simple ('I will buy') to express future intention. Suggestions: include objects, avoid sentence fragments, use appropriate tense for future plans.

× Approximately 5 to 10 five to 10,000. I spend money on my shoes because it's a part of our dressing. So we so it's a part of our personality. If we well dressed, then, uh, our personality looks so good.

✓ I usually spend approximately five to ten thousand rupees. I spend money on shoes because they are part of how we dress and part of our personality. If we are well dressed, we look good.

Problems: unclear numerical expression repeated and inconsistent; missing article and wrong unit; pronoun/verb agreement ('it's' for plural 'shoes'); poor sentence structure. Correct by writing numbers in words consistently, specifying currency if needed, using plural pronouns 'they' and plural verbs 'are', and fixing 'well dressed' to 'are well dressed'. Suggestions: be clear with quantities, match noun number with pronouns, and use correct verb forms for 'to be'.

× For any event I prefer fashionable shoes like heels and some traditional chapels. But for comfort for for example if I go to college or university I I prefer comfortable shoes like Snickers.

✓ For special events I prefer fashionable shoes like heels and some traditional chapels. But for comfort, for example when I go to college or university, I prefer comfortable shoes like sneakers.

Issues: 'chapels' is incorrect word; should be 'chapals' or 'chappals' (traditional sandals) or 'slippers' depending on dialect. 'Snickers' is a brand of chocolate; correct word is 'sneakers'. Repetition 'for for' and missing commas. Also 'For any event' is better as 'For special events'. Suggestions: choose correct vocabulary ('chappals' or 'sandals', 'sneakers'), remove repeated words, and add commas for clarity.