Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify grammar and reduce redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and noun agreement, and give one concise supporting detail. Use linking words if adding another point. Also correct numerical expression of your budget. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they can transform an outfit. I usually buy new shoes every three months, spending about $100 to $150 each time.

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural by using the present perfect for experience and tightening phrasing. Use one linking word to explain why you prefer online shopping and be specific about examples of sites or features. Keep sentences concise.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because there is a wide variety and it is easy to compare prices quickly. For example, I often browse brand websites and marketplaces to find the best deals.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence with correct grammar and consistent tense. Combine the two points into one coherent answer using linking words (e.g., therefore, so) and precise numbers. Avoid filler words like 'well'.

Example: I usually budget about $100 to $150 for each pair of shoes, so I typically spend around $600 per year on footwear.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence stating your general preference, then use a linking word to show the condition and provide two concise examples. Fix repetition and sentence fragments. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: It depends on the situation: generally I choose fashionable shoes for parties or formal events, but I prefer comfortable sports shoes for jogging or exercise.

× I love buying shoes because it totally transform our outfit and I often only buy shoe every quarter and my budget is around between $100 to 1:50 to buy your shoes.

✓ I love buying shoes because they totally transform our outfits, and I often only buy shoes every quarter; my budget is usually between $100 and $150.

Multiple issues: 'it totally transform' has subject-verb agreement and reference errors — use plural 'they' for 'shoes' and third-person singular verb 'transforms' if singular; here 'they totally transform' is correct (Grammar Problem Type ID 10 and 27). 'our outfit' should be plural 'our outfits' to agree with plural subject (ID 1). 'buy shoe' should be plural 'buy shoes' (ID 1). 'around between $100 to 1:50' is incorrect phrasing and typo '1:50' — use 'between $100 and $150' or 'around $100 to $150' (ID 11 for preposition/phrasing). Also 'buy your shoes' is wrong reference; changed to no second-person reference. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent, match singular/plural, and use correct comparative phrasing 'between A and B'.

× Yes, I bought shoes online many times as we can see a lot of variety on Internet and we can easily compare the prices between brands very quickly rather than going to 1 store to another.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because we can see a lot of variety on the internet and easily compare prices between brands, instead of going from one store to another.

Tense and usage: 'I bought ... many times' is better as present perfect 'I have bought ... many times' to link past actions to present experience (Grammar Problem Type ID 6). 'on Internet' should be 'on the internet' (article error, ID 22 or 17); changed to 'the internet'. 'between brands very quickly rather than going to 1 store to another' has awkward phrasing and numeral usage; use 'instead of going from one store to another' for correct preposition and phrase (ID 11). Also combined redundancy 'very quickly' removed for clarity.

× Well, for shoes, I have budget around 100 to 150 always. And so that's how I spent almost $600 in a year on shoes.

✓ Well, for shoes, I have a budget of around $100 to $150. So I spend almost $600 a year on shoes.

Errors: missing article 'a budget' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22). Numeric range needs dollar signs and 'to' is fine but include '$' and consistent spacing. 'I have budget around 100 to 150 always' awkward word order; 'I have a budget of around $100 to $150' is natural (ID 26 sentence structure). 'that's how I spent almost $600 in a year' uses past tense 'spent' inconsistently with habitual action; use simple present 'I spend almost $600 a year' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 present tense issue). Also 'in a year' is better as 'a year'.

× Well, it depends upon the situation. If I'm going to any kind of party or any event that demands fashionable shoes. So I I wear fashionable shoes and stylish shoes and if I have to go on to play some sport or for jogging, then I I wear sport shoes.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation. If I'm going to a party or an event that demands fashionable shoes, I wear fashionable or stylish shoes. If I have to play a sport or go jogging, I wear sports shoes.

Problems: 'depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural (preposition nuance, ID 11). The second sentence is a fragment: 'If I'm going... that demands fashionable shoes.' needs to be connected to a main clause (Grammar Problem Type ID 23 or 26). Repetition 'So I I' and 'then I I' are typographical/repetition errors; remove duplicates. Use articles 'a party' and 'an event' (Article errors, ID 22). 'go on to play some sport' is awkward; use 'play a sport' (ID 26). 'sport shoes' should be 'sports shoes' (singular/plural and word choice, ID 1). Suggestions: combine conditional and result in one sentence, use correct articles, and avoid repeated words.