Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific frequency using correct expressions and avoid fillers. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep under five sentences. Also correct number expressions (e.g., "one every three months" or "about four pairs a year").

Example: Yes, I do. I love buying shoes because they can transform an outfit and reflect my style. I usually buy about four pairs a year, roughly one pair every three months, as I like to refresh my wardrobe each season.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words like "because" or "so". Avoid redundancy ("I can choose from them") and use correct tense and pluralization. Mention an example to be more concrete.

Example: Yes, I have. I buy shoes online quite often because it offers a much wider selection and allows me to compare prices across different sites. For example, I recently compared three stores and found the best deal on running shoes.

Suggestion: Answer directly with clear figures and correct grammar. Use linking words to explain why (e.g., "because"), and avoid repetition of the same opinion. Be specific about whether amounts are per pair or per year. Keep within five sentences.

Example: I usually budget about $100–$150 per pair of shoes, so I spend around $500–$600 a year on footwear. I think it's worth it because well-made shoes are more comfortable and last longer.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give two contrasted, concise reasons using linking words like "if", "because", and "however". Avoid filler words and repetitions ("comfortable comfort", "out out"). Provide a brief example to illustrate choices.

Example: I prefer comfort for active situations but style for social events. For example, I wear running shoes for sports because they provide support, whereas I choose stylish shoes for parties to complete my outfit.

× I love buy shoes because shoes change your personality and they can transform your outfit entirely.

✓ I love buying shoes because shoes change your personality and they can transform your outfit entirely.

After verbs like 'love' when referring to an activity, use the gerund (verb + -ing). 'Love buy' is incorrect; 'love buying' correctly expresses enjoyment of the activity.

× And I buy shoes not quite often but I can say uh, pair in in 1/4.

✓ And I don't buy shoes very often, but I can say I buy one pair every quarter.

The original has plural/singular and quantity phrasing errors. Use 'don't buy' for negative, 'very often' for frequency, 'one pair' for a single unit, and 'every quarter' to mean each three-month period.

× So every year I buy 4 pair of shoes.

✓ So every year I buy four pairs of shoes.

Use plural 'pairs' when the number is greater than one. Also write numbers in words if desired; '4 pair' is incorrect agreement.

× Yes, online shopping is always interesting and I bought shoes online many times because it gave me a variety of shoes that I can choose from them and I can say I can compare some price from visiting various websites.

✓ Yes, online shopping is always interesting and I have bought shoes online many times because it gives me a variety of shoes to choose from, and I can compare prices by visiting various websites.

When an action has occurred several times up to now, use present perfect 'have bought'. Use present simple 'gives' for a general truth. Remove redundant 'from them' and use 'compare prices' (plural) and the gerund 'by visiting' to show method.

× I can say I can compare some price from visiting various websites.

✓ I can compare prices by visiting various websites.

Use 'compare prices' and the preposition 'by' to indicate the method. 'Compare ... from visiting' is incorrect.

× Well on shoes I can say I have always budget between $100 to 150.

✓ Well, on shoes I can say I have always budgeted between $100 and $150.

Use the past participle 'budgeted' with 'have' for present perfect, and use 'between ... and ...' for ranges. Also include the dollar sign for both amounts consistently.

× Well on shoes I can say I have always budget between $100 to 150.

✓ Well, on shoes I can say I have always budgeted between $100 and $150.

After 'have' the past participle 'budgeted' is required. 'Have budget' is incorrect; 'have budgeted' shows completed/continuing allocation.

× So I can say in a year I spend almost 500 to $600.00 and I think it's worth to spend on shoes because it change your personality entirely.

✓ So I can say in a year I spend almost $500 to $600, and I think it's worth spending on shoes because they change your personality entirely.

Use 'spend' present simple for habitual action. Use 'worth spending' (gerund) after 'worth'. Match plural 'they' and plural verb 'change' for 'shoes'. Include dollar sign before both amounts and use a consistent format.

× and I think it's worth to spend on shoes because it change your personality entirely.

✓ and I think it's worth spending on shoes because they change your personality entirely.

'It change' is incorrect subject-verb agreement. Use 'they change' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Also 'worth spending' requires the gerund form.

× If I'm going on any sports event, then I will wear sports shoes because it gave me sense of some, uh, comfortable comfort.

✓ If I'm going to any sporting event, then I will wear sports shoes because they give me a sense of comfort.

Use 'going to' for events, and 'sporting event' is the correct adjective-noun form. Use present simple 'give' for habitual/general truths. 'Sense of comfort' is concise; drop redundant 'comfortable'.

× because it gave me sense of some, uh, comfortable comfort.

✓ because they give me a sense of comfort.

Use 'they' to refer to plural 'sports shoes'. 'It' is incorrect. Also use 'sense of comfort' rather than repetitive 'comfortable comfort'.

× And if I'm going to any kind of party, uh, some kind of night out out, then I can say I can wear stylish shoes.

✓ And if I'm going to a party or a night out, then I would wear stylish shoes.

Use 'a party' or 'a night out' (article needed). 'Would wear' expresses preference in that situation; 'can' is less appropriate. Remove duplicate 'out' and streamline phrasing.