Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and grammar mistakes (e.g., 'I'm more much fan' → 'I'm a big fan'). Keep responses to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. For example, I prefer purchasing fancy, well-made shoes rather than expensive clothes because new shoes make me feel more confident and comfortable.

Suggestion: Improve accuracy and coherence. Use a clear past-tense statement, add a brief reason or result with linking words (e.g., 'but', 'however'). Correct articles and word order: 'a pair of loafers' and avoid repetition. Keep to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I once bought a pair of loafers online, and they turned out very well. I expected them to be low quality because they cost only 2500, but surprisingly they were comfortable and well-made.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar and numbers. Start with a direct answer about usual spending, then give a specific example with clear figures and a short reason. Avoid vague phrases like 'simply use 1200 to' — specify currency and typical range.

Example: I usually spend between 1,200 and 3,000 on regular shoes. However, my most expensive pair were basketball shoes that cost 14,000; they were comfortable and felt worth the price.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid repetition. Give a clear preference sentence, then add one specific reason using a linking word (e.g., 'because', 'so'). Use correct grammar: 'comfortable shoes' (no article), and avoid repeating the same idea multiple times.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and need good support. Therefore, I usually choose comfort over style when I buy shoes.

× I actually like buying shoes. Umm, I'm more much fan of buying shoes is my I don't like buying fancy clothes, but mostly I like buying fancy and expensive shoes.

✓ I actually like buying shoes. I'm a big fan of buying shoes; I don't like buying fancy clothes, but I mostly like buying fancy and expensive shoes.

The original contains disfluent phrases and incorrect word order ('I'm more much fan of buying shoes is my I'). This is a sentence structure error. Correct by using a standard noun phrase 'a big fan of' and by splitting into clearer sentences; place 'mostly' before the verb for natural adverb placement.

× I have once I had bought a loafers from online but it came out really good.

✓ I once bought a pair of loafers online, and they turned out really good.

The original mixes present perfect 'I have' and past perfect 'I had bought' incorrectly and uses incorrect noun phrase 'a loafers'. This is a verb form and noun number issue; use simple past 'bought' for a specific past event and correct count noun to 'a pair of loafers' or 'loafers' and use plural pronoun 'they'.

× I thought it it was little cheap it was around 2500 but I thought it would be it will not reach that quality from that money but it was it turned out really nice.

✓ I thought it was a little cheap; it cost about 2500, and I thought it would not reach good quality for that price, but it turned out really nice.

Problems include missing articles ('a little cheap'), repeated words, incorrect tense mix ('would be it will not'), and awkward prepositional phrasing ('from that money'). This is an adjective/adverb and tense clarity issue; use 'a little' before adjective, 'cost' for price, and 'for that price' to express value, keeping past tense consistent for the event.

× My expensive purses was on basketball shoes.

✓ My most expensive purchase was on basketball shoes.

The original uses 'purses' incorrectly where 'purchase' is intended and has subject-verb disagreement ('purses was'). This is a singular/plural and word choice error. Replace with singular noun 'purchase' and keep verb 'was' to agree.

× I paid them about 14,000 in that shoes which was the most expensive shoes I have bought till now.

✓ I paid about 14,000 for those shoes, which were the most expensive shoes I have bought so far.

Use 'for' to indicate price, not 'in'. Also use demonstrative 'those shoes' and plural verb 'were' to agree with plural noun 'shoes'. 'Till now' is better expressed as 'so far'.

× It was kinda comfortable and it was worth it but I simply use 1200 to.

✓ They were kind of comfortable and worth it, but I usually use shoes that cost about 1,200 too.

Original mixes pronouns 'it' for plural 'shoes' and unclear phrase 'I simply use 1200 to.' This is a pronoun and clarity issue. Use 'they' for plural shoes and clarify 'use' meaning 'buy' or 'spend' and include 'about' before numeric amounts; 'kind of' is more natural than 'kinda' in formal speech.

× I prefer more like a comfortable shoes, whereas fashionable shoes are more good at looking but not as much as comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer more comfortable shoes, whereas fashionable shoes look better but are not as comfortable.

Incorrect article 'a comfortable shoes' (singular article with plural noun) and awkward comparative phrasing 'are more good at looking'. This is an article error and incorrect adjective use; remove 'a' for plural noun, use 'look better' and 'not as comfortable' for clear comparison.

× But I prefer comfortable over fashionable, so I always prefer to buy comfortable shoes when I'm out or when I'm buying something.

✓ I prefer comfort over fashion, so I always choose comfortable shoes when I'm out or when I'm shopping.

Repetition of 'prefer' and awkward phrase 'when I'm buying something' make this a sentence structure issue. Use 'prefer comfort over fashion' to be concise and 'when I'm shopping' as a natural collocation.