Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar (e.g., plural nouns and articles) and a concise time expression. Add one brief specific reason or example using a linking word to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. For example, I usually only replace my shoes every six months to a year because they are durable and I take good care of them.

Suggestion: Give a complete, fluid answer with reduced hesitation. Fix awkward phrases (e.g., 'to try them on' not 'to take them on') and use linking words to contrast preferences and exceptions.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, but I generally prefer buying in-store to try them on. However, if I find a specific model I like that isn't available locally, I will search for it online.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and give a brief range or context to make the figure clearer. Use linking words to explain variation and add one short reason for the amount.

Example: It depends on the type of shoes, but on average I spend about ¥10,000. For instance, I might spend more on boots for durability and less on casual sneakers.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant; make it slightly more concise and replace vague phrases like 'to feel more freely' with precise reasons. Use one linking word to connect preference and reason.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I'm quite active; therefore I usually wear sneakers so I can walk around easily and stay comfortable all day.

× Even though I like shoes, I don't buy it so often because whenever I buy shoes it takes for about 6 months to one year so I do not have to buy them so often.

✓ Even though I like shoes, I don't buy them so often because when I buy shoes they last for about six months to a year, so I do not have to buy them frequently.

The original uses the singular pronoun 'it' to refer to the plural noun 'shoes' (singular and plural issue). Also 'it takes for about' is incorrect; the correct verb for durability is 'last' and the time expression should be 'for about six months to a year'. Suggestion: match plural nouns with plural pronouns (they/them) and use 'last' to describe how long something endures; write numbers in words for clarity in speech transcripts.

× Umm, actually I prefer to buy shoes offline to take them on.

✓ Umm, actually I prefer to buy shoes offline to try them on.

The phrase 'take them on' is incorrect; the correct collocation for testing footwear is 'try them on', which uses the verb + object + on pattern. Suggestion: use common phrasal verbs for actions with clothing/shoes (try on, take off).

× However, if there are any shoes I want to buy, I would search for online.

✓ However, if there are any shoes I want to buy, I would search for them online.

The original misuses the preposition and omits the pronoun: 'search for online' is ungrammatical. Correct patterns are 'search online' or 'search for them online'. Suggestion: include the object pronoun ('them') and place 'online' after the verb or object.

× It depends on the shoes like sneakers or boots, but on average I spend about ¥10,000 to buy shoes.

✓ It depends on the shoes, like sneakers or boots, but on average I spend about ¥10,000 on shoes.

The phrase 'spend about ¥10,000 to buy shoes' is awkward; the correct preposition is 'on' when indicating expenditure. Tense is acceptable; this is a preposition/usage issue. Suggestion: use 'spend ... on [item]' to describe money spent.

× Definitely comfortable shoes because I am actually more of an active person so wherever I go I always wear comfortable shoes like sneakers to get around easily and to feel more freely.

✓ Definitely comfortable shoes, because I am more of an active person, so wherever I go I always wear comfortable shoes like sneakers to get around easily and feel freer.

The sentence contains awkward adverb/adjective use: 'more of an active person' is acceptable but 'actually' is unnecessary. 'To feel more freely' is incorrect because 'freely' is an adverb; the correct comparative is 'freer' (adjective) after 'feel'. Suggestion: use 'feel freer' to describe a comparative state and remove unnecessary filler words like 'actually'.