Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise, correct odd phrasing, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid saying “one shoe” — use plural and mention frequency. Also keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I prefer to keep a few versatile pairs and use them for a long time, so I only shop when a pair is worn out. For example, I usually buy new shoes once or twice a year at most.

Suggestion: Good clear answer and reasons. Improve cohesion by using linking words and make phrasing smoother (e.g., “in person” instead of “the physical store”), and reduce redundancy. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I have never bought shoes online. I prefer to buy them in person because I want to try them on for size and comfort, and I'm also concerned about payment security.

Suggestion: Be specific and accurate with numbers and currency names, and avoid contradictory or vague phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence stating typical spending, then give one detail or example. Use correct currency name (Vietnamese dong) and a consistent number format.

Example: I don't spend much on shoes because I buy them infrequently. For instance, in total I have bought shoes about three times and typically spent around 4,000,000 Vietnamese dong on each pair, which I consider affordable.

Suggestion: Good direct response and reason. Improve by using a linking word and slightly more natural phrasing, and avoid minor grammar slips (“some pair” → “a pair”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because I'm a high school student who walks to school every day. Therefore, I need a pair that is comfortable and easy to wear.

× I like buying shoes, but I don't really buy them often because I prefer to have just one shoe but I can use it for a long period of time.

✓ I like buying shoes, but I don't really buy them often because I prefer to have just one pair of shoes that I can use for a long time.

The phrase 'one shoe' is singular and unnatural when referring to footwear generally; use 'one pair of shoes' for a single set. Also 'for a long period of time' is wordy; 'for a long time' is more natural. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× No, I have never bought shoes online. I prefer to buy them in the sports store, the physical store, because I want to try them on for size and comfort and I'm worried about the payment security as well.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online. I prefer to buy them in a sports store, a physical store, because I want to try them on for size and comfort, and I'm worried about payment security as well.

Use articles correctly and remove unnecessary 'the' before general nouns: 'a sports store' and 'a physical store' are appropriate. Also 'the payment security' should be 'payment security' (no article) when speaking generally. Added a comma before 'and' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I have bought shoes for about 3 times in my entire life and I think I spent about around 4000 Vietnam Dome on my shoes and it was not that expensive.

✓ I have bought shoes about three times in my entire life, and I think I spent around 4000 Vietnam dongs on my shoes; it was not that expensive.

Use 'have bought' with 'about three times' (no 'for'). Spell out numbers up to ten in formal speech and use 'dongs' as the plural of Vietnam dong. Use 'around' or 'about' (not both). The semicolon or period separates the ideas more clearly. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× It's a really small amount of money.

✓ It's a very small amount of money.

'Really' is acceptable but 'very' is a more appropriate quantifier here; both are adverbs modifying 'small', but 'very small amount' is more natural in this context. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× I prefer buying comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because I am a high school student and I walk to school every day, so I need some pair of shoes that are comfortable and easy to use.

✓ I prefer buying comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I am a high school student and I walk to school every day, so I need a pair of shoes that is comfortable and easy to wear.

Use 'fashionable ones' to avoid repetition. 'Some pair of shoes' is incorrect; use 'a pair of shoes.' 'Pair' is singular, so use 'is' instead of 'are' and 'easy to wear' is the natural phrase rather than 'easy to use.' Grammar problem type ID: 14