Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct small grammar issues (e.g., plural agreement) while adding a linking word to connect ideas. Also vary vocabulary slightly to sound more natural.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair about once a year. However, it depends on how durable my current shoes are; if they remain comfortable and in good condition, I don’t replace them.

Suggestion: Correct the word error ('food' → 'foot') and add a linking word for coherence. Give a brief specific example of a site or brand to add credibility.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I know my exact foot size and don’t need to visit a shop. For example, I buy from my favorite secondhand store online, and if a pair doesn’t fit I can exchange it free of charge.

Suggestion: Be specific with currency and numbers and avoid unclear phrases like 'a few 100' or '1,000,000'. Use linking words and correct word order. Provide realistic price ranges and reasons for the difference.

Example: It depends on the type of shoes. For sports shoes I usually buy cheaper pairs that cost around 100–200 dollars because I only wear them once or twice a week. In contrast, for everyday shoes I spend more—around 100–200 dollars—because I want them to be comfortable and durable.

Suggestion: Avoid awkward word choice ('avoid soundness') and use correct collocations like 'prevent injury' or 'reduce discomfort'. Keep one clear topic sentence then add a specific example with a linking word.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I run and walk a lot each day. For example, on weekdays I usually walk about five kilometres, so shoes with good support and cushioning help prevent pain and keep me active.

× Although it also depends on how durable my current pair are.

✓ Although it also depends on how durable my current pair is.

The subject 'pair' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is' rather than plural 'are'. Use 'pair is' when referring to the set as one unit. Alternatively, you could say 'how durable my current pairs are' if referring to multiple pairs.

× If they're still comfortable and in good condition, I won't replace them.

✓ If they are still comfortable and in good condition, I won't replace them.

Contraction 'they're' is acceptable in speech but here the issue is clarity: earlier 'pair' was singular, so pronoun 'they' conflicts. Make the antecedent clearly plural by saying 'they are' only if referring to multiple shoes, or change antecedent to 'they' by using 'my shoes' earlier. To fix, ensure pronouns match: 'If my pair is still comfortable... I won't replace it.' or 'If they are still comfortable... I won't replace them.'

× Yes, I often buy shoes online because I know my exact food size and don't need to go to the store to try them on.

✓ Yes, I often buy shoes online because I know my exact foot size and don't need to go to the store to try them on.

There is a typo: 'food' should be 'foot'. This is an incorrect word choice (pronoun/word misuse). Correcting to 'foot size' ensures the sentence conveys the intended meaning.

× I usually buy from my favorite secondhand shop and if my pair doesn't fit I can exchange it without paying any extra fee.

✓ I usually buy from my favorite secondhand shop, and if my pair doesn't fit I can exchange it without paying any extra fee.

Punctuation improves clarity. Grammatically, 'pair' is singular so 'doesn't fit' and 'it' are correct. Ensure consistency with earlier sentences about 'pair' vs 'they'. If you mean 'shoes' plural, use 'they don't fit' and 'them'.

× For sports shoes I usually choose cheaper pairs that cost around a few 100 because I only wear them once or twice a week.

✓ For sports shoes I usually choose cheaper pairs that cost around a few hundred because I only wear them once or twice a week.

'a few 100' is not standard English. Use 'a few hundred' or a specific number like 'a few hundred dollars' to express the approximate price. Quantifier plus spelled-out number is required.

× For everyday shoes I prefer something comfortable and stylish so I would spend about 1,000,000 to buy since I wear them much more.

✓ For everyday shoes I prefer something comfortable and stylish, so I would spend about 1,000,000 to buy them since I wear them much more.

The sentence lacks a clear object after 'buy'; add 'them' to refer back to 'everyday shoes'. Also include a comma before 'so' for clarity. Additionally, ensure the number format matches the currency context (e.g., '1,000,000 VND' or '1,000,000 won'); otherwise readers may be confused.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I run and walk a lot every day, so I always care about how my feet will feel.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I run and walk a lot every day, so I always care about how my feet feel.

Using 'will feel' shifts to future unnecessarily. When describing habitual conditions, use the simple present 'feel'. This matches the present habitual context of the sentence.

× For example, on weekdays I usually walk about 5 kilometers, so shoes with good support and cushioning help me avoid soundness and keep me active.

✓ For example, on weekdays I usually walk about 5 kilometers, so shoes with good support and cushioning help me avoid soreness and keep me active.

The word 'soundness' is incorrect in this context. The intended noun is likely 'soreness' (pain or discomfort). This is an incorrect word choice; it fits under incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs or vocabulary error. Replace with 'soreness' to convey the correct meaning.