Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a brief detail about frequency or reasons. Use one or two linking words if needed. Focus on natural phrasing (e.g., "I enjoy buying shoes; I usually buy a new pair once a year because I like variety").

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy a new pair once a year because I like to update my wardrobe and replace worn-out pairs.

Suggestion: Make the answer grammatically correct and coherent: give a direct answer, then add a concise supporting detail with correct tense and linking words. Avoid filler words like "like" and correct word order ("I purchased them").

Example: Yes, I have. When I first arrived in Canada, I bought my first pair of shoes online because I couldn't find my size in stores.

Suggestion: Be confident and more natural: give a clear range and briefly explain why you spend that amount. Avoid hesitations such as "I'm going to say" and use linking words to add a reason.

Example: I usually spend between $100 and $300 on shoes because I prefer well-made brands that are comfortable and last longer.

Suggestion: Start with a direct preference sentence, then give a concise reason with correct grammar and linking words. Remove redundancies and fix word order ("so I need").

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I exercise and run a lot, so durability and support are more important to me than style.

× Often, uh, yes. I'm very fond of shoes, so I do like to buy it. I do like to buy it. Every year I get a new pair of shoes.

✓ Often, uh, yes. I'm very fond of shoes, so I do like to buy them. I do like to buy them. Every year I get a new pair of shoes.

The pronoun 'it' is singular and does not match the plural noun 'shoes'. Use the plural pronoun 'them' to agree with 'shoes'. Repeated sentence retained but pronoun corrected. Suggestion: check noun-pronoun agreement and replace 'it' with 'them' when referring to plural nouns.

× Yes, like when I came to here in Canada, that time my first shoes I purchased here, I purchased it online.

✓ Yes, when I came here to Canada, my first shoes that I purchased here I bought online.

Word order and verb choice are incorrect. 'Came to here' is wrong; use 'came here' or 'came to Canada'. 'Purchased it online' uses 'it' for plural 'shoes' and is awkward; use 'bought online' or 'purchased online' with 'shoes' or 'them'. Also reduce redundancy. Suggestion: say 'When I came here to Canada, I bought my first pair of shoes online.'

× I'm going to say it's from $100 to $300. I think in between that price I mostly purchase my shoes.

✓ I'd say I usually spend between $100 and $300 on shoes.

The original uses awkward phrasing 'it's from $100 to $300' and 'in between that price' which are unnatural. Use the quantifier phrase 'between $100 and $300' to indicate a range and 'usually spend' to match the question. Suggestion: use concise phrasing for price ranges: 'I usually spend between X and Y.'

× I do prefer comfortable shoes 'cause I do a lot of exercise and running so that I'm I need comfortable shoes rather than the fashionable ones.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I do a lot of exercise and running, so I need comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones.

Colloquial 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech, and 'so that I'm I need' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'so' to indicate result and remove extra words. Also remove repeated 'do' for clarity. Suggestion: keep sentence structure: reason ('because...') then result ('so...').