Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 직접적이고 간결하게 질문에 답한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 자연스럽게 연결되는 이유와 구체적인 설명이 부족합니다. 예를 들어 빈도뿐 아니라 구체적 상황(예: 신발이 닳을 때만, 스타일에 관심이 없어서 등)을 덧붙이고 연결어를 사용하면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다. 또한 'simply because' 대신 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하세요.

Example: Not really. I usually buy shoes at most once a year because I don’t care much about footwear — I only replace them when the old pair gets worn out. As a result, I rarely shop for new styles.

Suggestion: 온라인 구매 이유를 말한 것은 좋지만 문장이 어색하고 내용이 중복됩니다. 'comfortable to buy something' 같은 모호한 표현 대신 구체적 이점(편리함, 더 많은 선택, 시간 절약)과 연결어를 사용하세요. 또한 'size of food'는 오타로 보이며 'size of foot'로 고쳐야 합니다.

Example: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it’s more convenient and offers a wider selection. Also, I know my foot size well, so I can order with confidence without trying them on first.

Suggestion: 가격을 말하려는 시도는 있지만 금액이 과장되거나 문장이 미완성되어 신뢰도가 떨어집니다. 구체적인 평균 비용을 제시하고, 왜 그 정도를 쓰는지(브랜드, 품질, 가성비 등)를 설명하세요. 문장을 완성하고 숫자 표기는 현실적인 범위로 제시하세요.

Example: I usually spend about CN¥1,000 to CN¥2,000 on a pair of shoes, depending on the brand and quality. I prefer to invest a bit more in comfortable, durable shoes so they last longer.

Suggestion: 선호를 분명히 밝힌 점은 좋지만 문장이 반복되고 이유가 미완성되어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 간단한 주제 문장 뒤에 구체적인 이유와 예시를 연결어(예: because, so, therefore)로 이어 완성된 문장을 말하세요.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I walk a lot every day. Therefore, I choose shoes with good support and cushioning even if they’re not very stylish.

× No, not really. I buy my shoes at most once a year. This is simply because I'm not interested in shoes.

✓ No, not really. I buy shoes at most once a year because I'm not interested in shoes.

The original contains redundant phrasing and an informal contraction 'I'm' is fine; main issue is sentence flow rather than modal verbs. Keep simple present for habitual action. Suggest removing 'my' and 'this is simply' to make sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I always buy my shoes online. This is because it is more comfortable to buy something. And I know my size of food so I just buy shoes online.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because it is more convenient, and I know my shoe size so I just buy shoes online.

Errors: 'more comfortable to buy something' is awkward; use 'more convenient' and specify 'shoe size' not 'size of food'. 'my shoes' can be omitted for naturalness. Suggestion: use 'shoe size' and 'convenient' and combine sentences for clarity.

× Well, I think I spend my money on shoes around CN¥100,000. This is because when I buy some shoes.

✓ Well, I think I spend about CN¥100,000 on shoes a year because I buy a few pairs occasionally.

Original has unclear time frame and incomplete clause 'This is because when I buy some shoes.' Fix by specifying timeframe ('a year') and completing the reason. Use 'about CN¥100,000' and a clear clause describing purchase frequency.

× I prefer comfortable shoes more more than fashionable shoes. This is because. I walk a lot and.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I walk a lot.

Errors: 'more more than' is repetitive and incorrect comparative structure. Use 'prefer A to B' or 'prefer A rather than B'. Also 'fashionable shoes' can be 'fashionable ones' for conciseness. The sentence fragments 'This is because.' and 'and.' were incomplete; combine into one complete clause explaining reason.