Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence stating your habit, avoid repetition and pausing fillers, correct word choices (e.g. 'shoes' not 'Sue'), and limit to 2–4 concise sentences. Add one specific detail about when or why you buy shoes using a linking word.

Example: I don’t buy shoes very often. Usually I only buy new shoes when I travel or when I find a style that really suits me; for example, I bought a pair last month while on a business trip because they matched my work clothes.

Suggestion: Give a clear affirmative or negative first, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid long hesitations and unclear words (e.g. 'workshop' likely meant 'pair of shoes' or brand). Mention where, when, and your opinion concisely and use linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online. For example, I recently bought a pair from the Iconic app during a sale, and I’m pleased with the quality because they are comfortable and well made.

Suggestion: Begin with a general statement about your typical spending, then give clear ranges with reasons. Correct unclear references (e.g. 'Scotch' might be 'a designer brand'). Use numbers clearly and avoid filler words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: It depends on the shoes. If they are from a designer brand I like, I might spend up to $200–$300, but normally I try to keep my purchases under $100 to stay within my budget.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly first, then provide 1–2 specific reasons linked logically. Use correct vocabulary ('fashionable' not 'fascinating', 'comfortable' not 'comfy' is fine but be consistent) and avoid hesitations. Mention situations where comfort matters.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes. Because I’m on my feet a lot at work, I need shoes that are easy to walk and move in, for example cushioned sneakers that support me during long days.

× I don't usually buy Sue regularly, I only buy it when I fly.

✓ I don't usually buy shoes regularly; I only buy them when I fly.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'Sue' is a misspelling of 'shoes' and 'it' incorrectly refers to the plural noun. This is a sentence structure and pronoun reference problem. Use the correct plural noun 'shoes' and the plural pronoun 'them'. Replace the comma splice with a semicolon (or split into two sentences) to fix sentence structure.

× After a couple of months when I see a new pair of shoes that's umm, looking good and umm uh, suitable to me, then I would buy it 'cause it's the only way to.

✓ After a couple of months, when I see a new pair of shoes that looks good and suits me, I would buy them because it's the only way for me.

The clause 'that’s ... looking good' misuses the present participle; for a defining relative clause use simple present 'that looks'. Also 'suitable to me' should be 'suits me'. 'It' should be 'them' to match the plural 'pair of shoes' (treated as plural here), and the final fragment 'the only way to' is incomplete; clarify as 'the only way for me'. Add commas for clarity.

× I I think I have purchased a few shoes online uh just the recently I bought a workshop from the uh, the, the iconic app, which were on special the other day and I currently using it's quite good quality and I lo, I love working with it.

✓ I think I have purchased a few pairs of shoes online. Recently I bought a pair from the Iconic app that was on special the other day, and I am currently using it; it's quite good quality and I love wearing it.

Use 'pairs of shoes' or 'pairs' (plural) rather than 'a few shoes' for natural English. 'Just the recently' is incorrect; use 'Recently'. 'Workshop' is likely the wrong word—use 'pair'. 'Which were on special' should be 'that was on special' because 'pair' is singular. 'I currently using' lacks auxiliary verb; use 'I am currently using'. 'Working with it' is likely intended as 'wearing it'. Correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

× It give me the com.

✓ It gives me comfort.

'Give' lacks third-person singular inflection; use 'gives'. 'the com' is an incomplete word—use 'comfort' to complete the idea. This fixes subject-verb agreement and completes the noun.

× Well, I would say depends if it's the, uh, if did the shoes that I love, umm from Scotch, I would definitely spend up to 2 or 300 on a shoe, a pair of shoe, but for what I would try to stay within the budgets, which is under 100 could I believe.

✓ Well, I would say it depends: if it's a pair of shoes that I love, for example from Scotch, I would definitely spend up to 200 or 300 on a pair. But usually I try to stay within a budget of under 100, I believe.

Sentence structure is fragmented and tense/word choice is incorrect. Add 'it' after 'depends'. Use 'a pair of shoes' and 'a pair' rather than 'a pair of shoe'. Write numbers as '200 or 300' (not '2 or 300'). 'Budgets' should be 'a budget' and 'could I believe' is incorrect—use 'I believe'. Ensure consistent present/future modality and clearer sentence separation.

× Oh, if I get to choose for comfortable shoe or fascinating shoe, I will definitely go for comfortable shoe because it's umm, it is.

✓ Oh, if I could choose between comfortable shoes or fashionable shoes, I would definitely choose comfortable shoes because they are...

Use 'between' for choices and plural 'shoes'. 'Fascinating' is the wrong adjective for fashion; use 'fashionable'. Use conditional 'could'/'would' for hypothetical choice. 'It is' should match plural subject: 'they are'.

× Is it easy for me to walk around and run if I need? Because more of the time I do a lot of working umm in my daily life, so I refer the comfy shoe.

✓ They are easy for me to walk and run in if I need to because most of the time I do a lot of walking in my daily life, so I prefer comfortable shoes.

Sentence fragments and incorrect verb forms: 'Is it easy...' should be 'They are easy...' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'Run if I need' needs 'to' after 'need'. 'More of the time' should be 'most of the time'. 'Do a lot of working' should be 'do a lot of walking'. 'I refer' is wrong verb; use 'I prefer'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word choices.