Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, grammatical and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence answering frequency, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, because/so/therefore) and correct verb forms and articles. Keep it under five sentences and avoid redundancy.

Example: I buy shoes about once or twice a month because online shopping is very convenient. For example, I often check several websites for discounts and order when I find a good deal. So far I have collected over fifty pairs, mostly bought during sales.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide a specific example or reason with clear grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas (because/therefore/for example). Avoid repeating words and incorrect plural forms. Limit to up to five sentences.

Example: Yes, most of my shoe collection was bought online because many websites offer branded shoes at discounts. For example, I often wait for seasonal sales and compare prices on two or three sites before I buy.

Suggestion: Provide a clear estimate and avoid informal fragments. Start with a direct statement of typical spending (e.g., amount per month or per pair), then give reasons and one specific detail. Remove filler words and correct plurals. Keep to a maximum of five sentences.

Example: I usually spend about $50–$100 a month on shoes because I buy two to three pairs during online sales. I tend to buy multiple pairs when prices are low, and sometimes I help friends find good deals too.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference first, then explain with specific examples and a linking word (however/but/when). Use correct collocations (formal occasions, stylish shoes) and avoid vague phrases. Keep answers coherent and within five sentences.

Example: I generally prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot at college and need support. However, for formal events or ceremonies I choose stylish or formal shoes to match my outfit.

× I usually buy the shoes or like once or twice in a month because online shopping becomes a convenient nowadays I just always go and check whenever the discounts pop up on different sides websites.

✓ I usually buy shoes once or twice a month because online shopping has become convenient nowadays; I always go and check whenever discounts pop up on different websites.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'shoes', incorrect verb form 'becomes' for a present perfect context, extra words 'or like', word order 'in a month' should be 'a month' and 'different sides websites' is incorrect. Suggestion: Remove unnecessary articles, use present perfect 'has become' to describe a change up to now, simplify filler words, and correct noun phrase to 'different websites'. Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× I just order shoes.

✓ I just order shoes.

This sentence is acceptable in simple present for habitual action; no past participle needed. Keep as is when describing current habit. If intended as past action, use 'I just ordered shoes.'

× I till now I have 50 plus collection of different kind of shoes in my wardrobe.

✓ So far, I have a collection of more than 50 different kinds of shoes in my wardrobe.

Problems: awkward placement 'I till now I have', missing article 'a' before 'collection', incorrect '50 plus collection' and pluralization 'different kind'. Suggestion: Use 'So far' or 'Till now', include article 'a', place 'more than 50' before 'collection', and pluralize 'kinds'.

× Most of my my collection I just got from online shopping because nowadays buying the stuff online becomes more convenient as there are numerous websites available those who sells the branded shoes and stuff on discount or less price.

✓ Most of my collection I got from online shopping because buying things online has become more convenient; there are numerous websites that sell branded shoes and other items at discounts or lower prices.

Problems: repeated word 'my', awkward word order 'Most of my collection I just got', tense 'becomes' should be 'has become', incorrect relative clause 'those who sells' and singular/plural agreement 'sells' with 'those'. Also 'less price' is incorrect; use 'lower prices' or 'discounts'. Suggestion: Remove repetition, use present perfect for change over time, use 'that sell' for websites, and correct noun phrases.

× Whenever I got a chance to buy a shoes, those are discounted.

✓ Whenever I get a chance to buy shoes, they are discounted.

Errors: tense mismatch 'got' (past) vs habitual context—use present 'get'; article 'a' before 'shoes' is incorrect (plural 'shoes' needs no 'a'); 'those' referring to shoes is awkward—use 'they'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual statements and correct article usage.

× Binga shopaholic person.

✓ I'm a bit of a shopaholic.

Original is fragmentary and contains a typo 'Binga'. It lacks a verb and proper articles. Suggestion: Use a complete sentence with subject and verb and correct idiomatic expression 'a bit of a shopaholic'.

× I tend to uh, spend a lot of money on the footwears.

✓ I tend to spend a lot of money on footwear.

Errors: filler 'uh' should be removed, 'footwears' is incorrect plural—'footwear' is uncountable, and 'the' is unnecessary unless specifying. Suggestion: Remove filler, use uncountable noun 'footwear' without 'the' for general statements.

× As I already mentioned.

✓ As I already mentioned,

This fragment is acceptable only as a clause leading into another sentence. It lacks completion; keep as introductory phrase followed by a related clause. Suggestion: Attach it to the next sentence or complete it: 'As I already mentioned, I buy shoes when there is a good deal.'

× Whenever there is a good deal going on different websites I just go with it.

✓ Whenever there is a good deal on different websites, I go for it.

Minor issues: 'going on' is wordy; 'go with it' is informal—use 'go for it'. Add comma after subordinate clause. Suggestion: Use concise verb phrases and proper punctuation.

× And once or twice a month I usually buy 2 to 3 pairs for myself and that's not for myself even.

✓ Once or twice a month I usually buy two to three pairs for myself, and that's not only for me.

Issues: starting sentence with 'And' is informal, numerals should be written in words in formal speech, awkward phrase 'that's not for myself even'—use 'not only for me'. Suggestion: Use clearer phrasing and proper pronoun 'me' instead of 'myself' when not reflexive.

× I also encourage my friends to do so.

✓ I also encourage my friends to do the same.

Original is understandable but 'do so' is slightly formal; 'do the same' is more natural here. No strong grammar error, but suggestion improves naturalness.

× So this is a bit confused question for me.

✓ So this question is a bit confusing for me.

Error: incorrect adjective form 'confused' (describes a person) instead of 'confusing' (describes a question). Word order improved. Suggestion: Use 'confusing' to describe the question.

× I am a person who prefers comfort over the fashionable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfort over fashionable shoes.

Problems: unnecessary phrase 'I am a person who', unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'fashionable shoes'. Suggestion: Use concise structure 'I prefer comfort over fashionable shoes.'

× But most of the time it depends on the occasion what kind of occasion I'm going to attend.

✓ But most of the time it depends on the occasion I am going to attend.

Redundancy: 'occasion what kind of occasion' is repetitive. Use clearer clause order. Keep present continuous 'I'm going to attend' acceptable for planned events. Suggestion: Remove repetition and simplify.

× Sometimes like casually I just wear the comfortable shoes like for my college and or at home.

✓ Sometimes I casually wear comfortable shoes, for example to college or at home.

Errors: extra 'like' repetitions, unnecessary 'the' before 'comfortable shoes', awkward 'for my college and or at home'. Suggestion: Remove filler words, use examples 'for example to college or at home', and drop 'the'.

× But if I'm attending some firm in formal occasion then I just wear fashion.

✓ But if I'm attending a formal event, then I wear fashionable shoes.

Problems: 'some firm in formal occasion' is incorrect—likely meant 'formal event'; 'wear fashion' is ungrammatical—use 'wear fashionable shoes'. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'event' and adjective 'fashionable' with 'shoes'.