Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, prepositions) and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every few months. It depends on the occasion: I buy casual shoes for daily wear and sports shoes when I go running. For example, last month I bought a pair of trainers because I started a running routine.

Suggestion: Answer directly whether you have bought shoes online, then explain briefly why or why not with specific details. Correct verb forms and use clearer vocabulary ('order online', 'variety', 'showrooms'). Use linking words such as 'however' or 'therefore'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I usually haven’t ordered shoes online because I prefer to try them on first. Therefore I go to local showrooms where there is a wider selection and I can check the fit before buying.

Suggestion: Give a specific amount or range and explain the reason briefly. Start with a clear topic sentence stating how much you spend (e.g. per month or per pair), then add one supporting reason. Correct grammar and avoid repetition.

Example: I usually spend about $50–$100 on a pair of shoes, depending on the brand. As a shoe lover, I prefer to invest in good-quality shoes for comfort and special occasions.

Suggestion: Directly state your preference and give two concise reasons with linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Use clearer expressions ('work all day', 'good for my feet/health') and avoid redundancy. Keep to 2–3 sentences for effectiveness.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m on my feet all day at work, so they help prevent pain and fatigue. Consequently I’m willing to spend a bit more on well-cushioned shoes to protect my feet.

× Yes I like buying shoes.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes.

Missing comma after interjection 'Yes' (punctuation helps clarity). The verb tense is correct; no tense change needed. Ensure natural pause by adding a comma. Use of present simple 'like' is appropriate for habits.

× It depends on my outfit because sometimes I wear a casual shoes and sometimes sports shoes when I go on running.

✓ It depends on my outfit because sometimes I wear casual shoes and sometimes sports shoes when I go running.

Incorrect article and number: 'a casual shoes' mixes singular article with plural noun. Remove 'a' to use plural 'casual shoes'. Also 'go on running' is incorrect collocation; use 'go running'.

× So I wear a sports shoes when I go outfit or any function so I wear latest shoes.

✓ So I wear sports shoes when I go to an outing or any function, so I wear the latest shoes.

'a sports shoes' is wrong—'sports shoes' is plural so remove 'a'. 'go outfit' is incorrect; use 'go to an outing'. Add article 'an' before 'outing'. 'latest shoes' needs definite article 'the' to refer to specific updated items.

× Actually can't board shoes online because there is no variety of shoes.

✓ Actually I can't buy shoes online because there is not much variety of shoes.

Missing subject 'I' before modal 'can't'. 'board' is incorrect verb; use 'buy'. Use 'there is not much variety' or 'there isn't much variety' for uncountable concept; 'varieties' is possible but less natural here.

× So so then I go to travel show showrooms.

✓ So then I go to travel show showrooms.

Repeated filler 'So so' should be reduced to a single 'So'. The structure is colloquial; keep 'So then I go to travel show showrooms' or more simply 'So then I go to showrooms.'

× So because there is too much varieties of shoes so I buy shoes to showrooms.

✓ Because there are so many varieties of shoes, I go to showrooms to buy shoes.

Mismatch between 'too much' (for uncountable nouns) and plural 'varieties'. Use 'so many varieties' with plural. Also subject-verb agreement: 'there are' for plural. 'buy shoes to showrooms' is incorrect word order; use 'go to showrooms to buy shoes.'

× Yes, I usually spend money on my shoes because I am shoe lover person so I prefer to spend money on my shoes rather than clothes.

✓ Yes, I usually spend money on shoes because I am a shoe-lover, so I prefer to spend money on shoes rather than on clothes.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'shoe lover person' and awkward phrasing; use 'a shoe-lover' or 'a person who loves shoes'. 'on clothes' is fine but parallel structure benefits from 'on shoes rather than on clothes.'

× So sometime I go to you know special occasions so I spend money on on my shoes specially on shoes that's it.

✓ Sometimes I go to, you know, special occasions, so I spend money on my shoes, especially on shoes. That's it.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' for frequency. Insert commas for discourse phrase 'you know'. 'specially' is wrong in this context; use 'especially'. Remove duplicate 'on'. End with 'That's it.'

× Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I do very hard work all the day, so I usually spend money on comfortable shoes.

✓ Actually, I prefer comfortable shoes because I do very hard work all day, so I usually spend money on comfortable shoes.

Replace 'all the day' with 'all day' (idiomatic). Comma after 'Actually' improves flow. Tense and modal usage are fine.

× So it is good for me and it is good for my health, so I feel very comfortable when I wear the shoes.

✓ So they are good for me and for my health, and I feel very comfortable when I wear them.

Pronoun reference: 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; use plural pronoun 'they' or 'them'. Match verb 'is/are' to plural. Simplify by using 'they are good for me and for my health' and 'when I wear them.'