Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện phát âm, ngữ pháp và tính mạch lạc. Tránh lặp từ (‘in in’, ‘to to’) và lỗi từ (‘shutting’ không đúng). Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (tần suất, lý do) với từ nối như “because” hoặc “so”. Ví dụ: nêu rõ tần suất (once a month) và đưa lý do cụ thể (giúp thư giãn, sưu tập kiểu dáng).

Example: Yes, I do. I buy shoes about once a month because I enjoy collecting different styles, and shopping helps me relax after long study sessions.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ chính xác (không nói “I've called” khi muốn nói “I've tried/ordered online”). Rút gọn câu cho tự nhiên, dùng từ nối như “also” hoặc “for example”, và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (một nền tảng, loại voucher). Tránh lặp từ và cấu trúc vụng về.

Example: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because it’s very convenient — I can shop anytime and sometimes get vouchers on platforms like Shopee, which helps me save money as a student.

Suggestion: Cần câu trả lời rõ ràng, ngắn gọn với số tiền và đánh giá hợp lý. Sửa ngữ pháp (thiếu chủ ngữ, động từ sai). Tránh câu rườm rà; dùng từ nối như “but” để so sánh. Nên nói rõ một khoảng giá và nhận xét ngắn gọn về khả năng chi trả.

Example: To be honest, I usually spend about 1,000,000 VND on a pair of shoes. That price is quite expensive for me, so I only buy them occasionally.

Suggestion: Giảm tiếng “um/you know” và lặp từ; sửa cấu trúc câu để rõ ràng. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể (loại hoạt động, ví dụ: chơi bóng, chạy). Dùng liên từ như “because” để nối ý.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I’m quite sporty — I often play football and need shoes that fit well and support my feet.

× Yes, of course, and buying shoes is also one of my favorite hobbies.

✓ Yes, of course, and buying shoes is one of my favorite hobbies.

The original sentence included correct -ing form but had an extra also that is unnecessary; keep 'buying' as gerund for hobbies. Suggestion: use 'is one of my favorite hobbies' for conciseness.

× For example, in in my free time, I spend time to shutting some affordable to to fulfill my shoe collection in my house, which is also help me to relax after a long time of studying.

✓ For example, in my free time I spend time buying affordable shoes to add to my collection at home, which also helps me relax after long periods of studying.

Multiple errors: duplicate words, incorrect verb form 'shutting' and phrase 'spend time to + verb' (correct is 'spend time + -ing'), incorrect placement 'to fulfill my shoe collection', and subject-verb agreement 'which is also help' should be 'helps'. Suggestion: use 'spend time buying', 'add to my collection', and ensure verb agrees with singular 'which'.

× Yes, I've called and I find buying to online extremely convenient ways.

✓ Yes, I have tried it and I find buying online extremely convenient.

Original 'I've called' is incorrect contextually; likely intended 'I've tried'. 'buying to online' is ungrammatical; correct is 'buying online'. Also 'extremely convenient ways' should be 'extremely convenient' or 'an extremely convenient way'. Suggestion: use present perfect 'I have tried' for experience and correct noun phrase.

× I can buy it at anywhere at any time and moreover, when I buy it in a digital platform, I can gain some vouchers to save my money, which is very essential for a student like me.

✓ I can buy shoes anywhere at any time, and moreover, when I buy them on a digital platform I can get vouchers to save money, which is very important for a student like me.

'at anywhere' is wrong; use 'anywhere'. 'buy it' should match plural 'shoes' -> 'buy them'. Use preposition 'on a platform' not 'in a platform'. 'gain some vouchers' -> 'get vouchers'. 'essential' better as 'important' here. Suggestion: match pronouns to nouns and use correct prepositions.

× Well to be honest am still a student so I just went on to about 1,000,000 Vietnam Dong and I find out those who which is about that expense is really expensive so I can afford to buy it.

✓ Well, to be honest, I am still a student, so I usually spend about 1,000,000 Vietnamese Dong, and I find that amount quite expensive, so I cannot always afford to buy shoes.

Multiple tense and structure errors: missing subject 'I' before 'am', 'just went on to' is incorrect for habitual spending -> use 'usually spend'. 'find out those who which is about that expense' is ungrammatical; correct 'I find that amount quite expensive'. 'so I can afford' contradicts context; likely meant 'cannot afford'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and clear subject-verb structure.

× Well, from my point of view, I will prefer the, you know, comfortable shoe because I'm I'm a sporty person so I usually use my shoes to to those ball.

✓ Well, from my point of view, I prefer comfortable shoes because I'm a sporty person, so I usually use my shoes for playing ball.

'I will prefer' is unnatural; use present simple 'I prefer' for general preference. 'the comfortable shoe' should be plural 'comfortable shoes'. Duplicate 'I'm'. 'use my shoes to to those ball' is incorrect: correct collocation is 'use shoes for playing ball' or 'to play sports'. Suggestion: use simple present for preferences and correct preposition 'for' with 'playing'.

× So it's a very essential for me to choose one which is comfortable and fit my feet.

✓ So it's very important for me to choose one that is comfortable and fits my feet.

'a very essential' is incorrect article+adjective usage; 'essential' is better replaced with 'important' or used without 'a'. 'which is comfortable and fit my feet' has subject-verb agreement error: 'fits' agrees with singular 'one'. Also use 'that' for restrictive clause. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with its subject and choose correct adjective/article.