Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc (ví dụ 'release' không phù hợp), làm câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn bằng cách dùng cấu trúc chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể. Nên dùng liên từ ngắn gọn để giữ mạch văn (ví dụ 'but' hoặc 'because') và giữ tối đa 4-5 câu. Ngoài ra, cho thêm ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh thay giày để chi tiết hóa câu trả lời.

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and typically buy a new pair about once a year, but I replace them sooner if they wear out. For example, I might get new trainers after a year of regular jogging because the soles become thin. I try to wait until a pair shows clear signs of wear to avoid unnecessary spending.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ (ví dụ 'different' lặp nhiều lần) và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn. Sử dụng liên từ/phrases như 'because', 'for example', hoặc 'which allows' để kết nối ý. Thêm một ví dụ cá nhân ngắn về một lần mua cụ thể sẽ tăng tính thuyết phục và cụ thể.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes online because websites offer a wide selection of styles, colours and sizes, which makes it easier to find the perfect pair. For example, I recently bought a pair of running shoes from an online store after comparing reviews and sizes across several brands.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Sửa lỗi ngôn ngữ và trình bày rõ ràng (ví dụ 'Vietnam' nên là 'VND' hoặc 'Vietnamese dong'; 'nicer interest year pair' không rõ nghĩa). Nên trả lời trực tiếp với con số rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn lý do. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và dùng từ phù hợp như 'everyday', 'formal occasions' và 'quality' để rõ ràng hơn.

Example: It depends on the purpose. For everyday shoes I usually spend about 500,000 VND per pair, but for formal occasions like weddings I might spend up to 2,000,000 VND for higher quality shoes. I’m willing to pay more for formal shoes because they need to look better and last longer.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh dùng từ không chính xác ('drastic brand') và cấu trúc lặp. Nên đưa ra câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words như 'however' hoặc 'for everyday use' để liên kết. Thêm một ví dụ ngắn về đôi giày bạn chọn cho từng trường hợp để cụ thể hoá và tự nhiên hơn.

Example: It depends on the occasion. For everyday use I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me move around easily and stay comfortable all day. However, for weddings or graduations I choose dressier, high-quality shoes that match my outfit and look more formal, such as leather loafers.

× I'm fond of buying shoes and I usually buy new ones once a year. However, I sometimes release them sooner if they are worn out.

✓ I'm fond of buying shoes and I usually buy new ones once a year. However, I sometimes replace them sooner if they become worn out.

'Release' is wrong collocation for replacing shoes; use 'replace'. 'Become worn out' is the natural expression. This fits the present simple habitual action and explains replacement timing.

× Yes, of course, I have bought shoes online many times because on the Internet it offers a variety of shoes with different styles, different colors and different sizes, allowing me to choose the best ones, suiting my interest perfectly.

✓ Yes, of course, I have bought shoes online many times because the Internet offers a variety of shoes in different styles, colors, and sizes, allowing me to choose the best ones to suit my preferences.

Use 'the Internet' not 'on the Internet it offers'. Remove extra 'different' repeats. Use 'in different styles' collocation. 'Suit my interest' is unnatural; use 'suit my preferences'. Also use infinitive 'to suit' to show purpose.

× It depends on the purpose. For everyday use I spend around 500,000 Vietnam for a pair, but for special cases like weddings or graduations I spend up to 2 million Vietnam for a nicer interest year pair.

✓ It depends on the purpose. For everyday use I spend around 500,000 Vietnamese dong for a pair, but for special occasions like weddings or graduations I spend up to 2 million Vietnamese dong for a nicer, dressier pair.

Use correct currency name 'Vietnamese dong' and placement after the number. 'Special cases' -> 'special occasions'. 'Nicer interest year pair' is incorrect; likely intended 'nicer, dressier pair'. Remove 'year'.

× It depends on the purpose. For everyday use, I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to move quickly and feel good already. However, on special occasions like weddings or graduations, I would choose a nicer and dressier pair from a drastic brand, prioritizing quality.

✓ It depends on the purpose. For everyday use, I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to move easily and feel comfortable. However, on special occasions like weddings or graduations, I would choose a nicer, dressier pair from a reputable brand, prioritizing quality.

'Move quickly' is unnatural for footwear; 'move easily' is better. 'Feel good already' is awkward; use 'feel comfortable'. 'Drastic brand' is wrong word choice; use 'reputable brand'. Ensure parallel adjectives 'nicer, dressier'.