Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (yes/no and frequency), then give one or two specific reasons with correct word forms and linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “Ave. dress” and “tuning with my clothes.”

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every two to three months. I think shoes reflect your personality, so I choose styles that match my outfits. For example, I have a few versatile pairs for work and some casual trainers for weekends.

Suggestion: Use a clear sentence to state your experience, then add one or two specific details (when, how many, why) using linking words. Correct tense and word order: say “I have bought shoes online several times” and avoid unfinished sentences.

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. For example, last month I ordered three pairs from a website called Chase Value because they offered good prices and free delivery from their Faisalabad outlet.

Suggestion: Give clear numbers and use correct currency and grammar. Start with a direct statement of typical spending, then explain why using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like “vestige of money.”

Example: I usually spend about 7,000–8,000 rupees on formal shoes and around 4,000–5,000 rupees on casual pairs. I prefer to invest more in formal shoes because they need to look smart and last longer, while casual shoes can be cheaper.

Suggestion: Begin with a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific reasons and a linking phrase. Avoid repeating the same adjective (comfortable) twice in a row and correct phrases like “on the second hand.”

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because they support my feet during long days and are suitable for household chores and exercise. In contrast, fashionable shoes are sometimes impractical and uncomfortable for daily use, so I reserve them for special occasions.

× According to my perspective, shoes are the reflection of your personality.

✓ According to my perspective, shoes are a reflection of one's personality.

The original mixes first-person perspective with second-person pronoun 'your'. Use a general pronoun 'one's' or 'your' consistently. Also 'a reflection' needs indefinite article for countable noun. Use 'one's personality' for a general statement.

× So I would prefer to buy new shoes with my Ave. dress.

✓ So I would prefer to buy new shoes to match my evening dress.

The sentence has unclear phrase 'Ave. dress' and missing preposition. Likely 'evening dress' is intended. Use 'to match' to show coordination; 'my' + noun is correct. 'With' is not the best collocation here.

× I love to tuning with my clothes and I always prefer to buy new shoes.

✓ I love tuning my shoes with my clothes and I always prefer to buy new shoes.

Mixing infinitive 'to' with gerund 'tuning' is incorrect. Use either 'love to tune' or 'love tuning'. Also the verb 'tune' is better than 'tuning with'. Use 'tune my shoes with my clothes' or 'match my shoes with my clothes' for clarity.

× Yes I had both shoes online several times like recently I ordered 3 pairs of shoes in one from one page which is called Chase value and their original outlet are in Faisalabad.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Recently I ordered three pairs of shoes at once from a website called Chase Value, and their main outlet is in Faisalabad.

Use present perfect 'have bought' for experiences up to now. 'Had both' is incorrect. 'In one' should be 'at once'. Use 'website' and 'their main outlet is' (singular outlet is, or 'outlets are' if plural). Numbers should be written clearly.

× So I ordered my shoes from this website in.

✓ So I ordered my shoes from this website.

The trailing preposition 'in' is unnecessary and makes the sentence incomplete. Removing it completes the sentence.

× Uh, mostly I spend just uh, 7 to 8000 on my shoes for umm, formal wears.

✓ Mostly I spend just 7,000 to 8,000 on shoes for formal wear.

Use consistent present simple 'I spend'. Numbers require commas and clearer range '7,000 to 8,000'. 'Formal wear' is an uncountable noun, not 'formal wears'.

× If I both a pair of shoes casually, I just spend 4 to 5000.

✓ If I buy a pair of shoes casually, I just spend 4,000 to 5,000.

Use correct verb 'buy' not 'both'. Maintain number formatting and consistent tense. Use '4,000 to 5,000' for clarity.

× According to my point, more than spend on it is vestige of money because you should uh, wear it on special occasions.

✓ In my view, spending more on them is a waste of money because you should wear them on special occasions.

'According to my point' is unnatural; 'in my view' is better. 'More than spend on it' is ungrammatical — 'spending more on them' is correct. 'Vestige' is wrong word; use 'waste'. Match plural pronoun 'them' to 'shoes'.

× I I always prefer comfortable shoes because I found it incredibly comfortable and relaxing for me.

✓ I always prefer comfortable shoes because I find them incredibly comfortable and relaxing.

Redundant 'I'. Use present simple 'find' to match general preference. Pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Remove 'for me' which is redundant.

× Uh, on the second hand, fashionable shoes are just showpiece.

✓ On the other hand, fashionable shoes are just showpieces.

Use the idiom 'on the other hand' not 'on the second hand'. 'Showpiece' should be plural 'showpieces' to agree with 'shoes'.

× They are not comfortable for daily routines.

✓ They are not comfortable for daily routines.

This sentence is acceptable but ensure consistency with previous corrections. 'Daily routines' works; alternatively 'daily use' is natural. No grammatical correction needed so it's retained.