Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep the answer concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence about whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms (e.g., say "I buy shoes every month" instead of "I used to buy" unless you no longer do).

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every month because it makes me feel relaxed and confident. For example, I prefer branded shoes because they are more comfortable and durable, so I feel motivated and ready for my day.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use clearer linking words to structure the reasons. Remove filler words like "umm". Give one or two specific benefits of buying online and a short example or comparison to shopping in-store.

Example: Yes, I often buy shoes on Amazon because it saves time and I can read customer reviews before I purchase. For instance, checking reviews helps me avoid shoes that run small or wear out quickly, which is harder to find out in a physical store.

Suggestion: Give a clear amount and brief explanation. Use correct phrasing for frequency and currency (e.g., "about $100 a month"). If possible, add a reason why you spend that amount to add detail.

Example: I usually spend about $100 a month on shoes because I buy one or two pairs each month, mostly mid-range branded shoes that balance comfort and price.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" and "for example"). Correct grammar (e.g., "comfortable shoes are more long-lasting"; avoid "foods"). Mention how your lifestyle influences your choice.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because they last longer and protect my feet during long shifts. For example, as a security guard I stand for many hours, so supportive shoes prevent pain and help me stay focused.

× I used to buy shoes on every month because I'll buying shoes gives a kind of peace to my mind and I like wearing branded shoes with comfortable with comfort.

✓ I used to buy shoes every month because buying shoes gives me a kind of peace, and I like wearing branded shoes that are comfortable.

The sentence mixes past habit 'used to' with incorrect future/modal 'I'll' and wrong verb forms. Remove 'on' before 'every month' (preposition error) and replace 'I'll buying' with the gerund 'buying'. 'Gives a kind of peace to my mind' is awkward; use 'gives me a kind of peace'. 'with comfortable with comfort' is redundant; use 'that are comfortable'. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use correct gerund and clearer phrasing. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× It gives me it, it, it encourages me that I can do whatever I can.

✓ It encourages me and makes me feel that I can do anything.

Redundant fillers 'it, it, it' should be removed. The construction 'encourages me that I can do whatever I can' is ungrammatical; use 'encourages me and makes me feel that I can do anything.' Use 'anything' instead of repeating 'whatever I can'. Maintain present simple for general truth. Suggestion: avoid fillers and use concise clauses. (Grammar problem type ID: 4)

× Yes, most of the time I buy shoes by Amazon because umm it saves my time and I can check comments instead of umm going to stores.

✓ Yes, most of the time I buy shoes on Amazon because it saves me time and I can check the comments instead of going to stores.

Use correct preposition 'on Amazon' rather than 'by Amazon' (preposition error ID 11). 'Saves my time' is acceptable but 'saves me time' is more natural. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: use 'on' with online platforms and use 'saves me time'. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× It takes a lot of time and I cannot check the reviews of the customers who bought earlier.

✓ Going to stores takes a lot of time and I cannot check the reviews of customers who bought items earlier.

Context clarifies 'going to stores' as subject, so add it. 'Customers who bought earlier' is vague; add 'items' or 'products' after 'bought'. Maintain present simple for habitual fact: 'takes' and 'cannot'. Suggestion: specify object of 'bought' for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× I don't spend too much money on shoes but only like 100 bucks every month around 100 and.

✓ I don't spend too much money on shoes, I only spend about 100 bucks each month.

Run-on and awkward phrasing 'only like 100 bucks every month around 100 and.' should be rephrased. Use 'I only spend about 100 bucks each month.' Maintain present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: remove filler 'like' and redundant repetition. (Grammar problem type ID: 6)

× While buying fashionable shoes are not a good investment, I prefer to buy comfortable shoes because it is long lasting.

✓ Although fashionable shoes are not a good investment, I prefer to buy comfortable shoes because they are long-lasting.

'While buying fashionable shoes are not a good investment' is ungrammatical; use 'Although fashionable shoes are not a good investment'. Subject-verb agreement: 'they are' for plural 'shoes' (ID 27). 'Long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting' when used as adjective. Suggestion: start with 'Although' and match plural subject with plural verb. (Grammar problem type ID: 26)

× It keeps our foods a long time comfortable as I do security job.

✓ They keep my feet comfortable for a long time because I do a security job.

Original uses 'It' and 'our foods' which are incorrect. 'Shoes' (they) is plural and the body part is 'feet', not 'foods'. 'A long time' order corrected to 'for a long time'. Article missing before 'security job' -> 'a security job'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns referring to shoes, correct body part, and include articles. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× For me comfortable shoes are much better than the fashionable shoes as I'm studying for long hours.

✓ For me, comfortable shoes are much better than fashionable ones because I study for long hours.

Minor issues: add comma after introductory phrase. 'The fashionable shoes' -> 'fashionable ones' or drop 'the' (article error ID 22). Use present simple 'I study' for habitual action rather than 'I'm studying', which implies temporary ongoing action; both could work but present simple is more natural for habitual. Suggestion: prefer 'I study' and use 'fashionable ones' for conciseness. (Grammar problem type ID: 2)