Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and enthusiastic but a bit long-winded and repetitive. Start with a concise topic sentence, avoid redundancy (e.g., “love to buy” repeated), and add a brief frequency phrase to answer “How often?”. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a linking word if you give extra detail.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I buy them fairly often—about once every two months—because I like having a variety for different occasions.

Suggestion: Your response answers the question but has grammar errors and unclear phrasing (e.g., “multiple time”, “multiple qualities issues”). Use correct tense and clearer reasons: convenience, price, and variety. Limit to two sentences and use a linking phrase such as “also” or “in addition.”

Example: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because it is more convenient and often cheaper. In addition, online shops offer a wider range of styles and customer reviews that help me judge quality.

Suggestion: Your answer communicates the idea but has awkward wording and grammar (“miser by nature”, “it's a worthy”). Provide a clear estimate or range of spending and briefly explain why you sometimes exceed your budget. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “however” or “because.”

Example: I usually spend around $50–$100 on a pair of shoes, although I sometimes spend more if I really like the design. However, I don’t worry about the cost when the shoes suit my style because I consider them a worthwhile investment.

Suggestion: Good clear opinion and reasons. Improve fluency by tightening sentences and avoiding repetition (e.g., “I can easily wear them” and “I can freely walk” mean the same). Add a linking word like “although” when contrasting with fashionable shoes, and give a brief example of an occasion for fashionable shoes.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes because I can wear them all day and walk without pain. Although fashionable shoes look better for parties or special events, I choose comfort for everyday use.

× Definitely, I love to purchase shoes and it would not be exaggeration to say that I have a huge collection of shoes and for this reason I love to buy shoes a lot.

✓ Definitely, I love to purchase shoes, and it would not be an exaggeration to say that I have a huge collection of shoes; for this reason, I love buying shoes a lot.

Use of articles and verb forms: 'not be exaggeration' lacks the article 'an'. Also 'love to buy shoes a lot' is awkward; 'love buying shoes a lot' or 'love to buy shoes' are more natural. Added commas and a semicolon for clearer sentence structure and flow. Grammar problem type ID:10

× Yes, multiple time I have purchased online shoes from online shopping because it is one of the convenient and cheaper way to purchase shoes.

✓ Yes, multiple times I have purchased shoes online because it is one of the most convenient and cheapest ways to buy shoes.

'multiple time' should be plural 'multiple times'. 'purchased online shoes from online shopping' is awkward — place 'online' after the verb: 'purchased shoes online'. 'one of the convenient and cheaper way' needs superlative and plural: 'one of the most convenient and cheapest ways'. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Apart from that they also show multiple qualities issues which is not possible to visit at shop.

✓ Apart from that, they also show multiple quality issues, which is not possible when visiting a shop.

'qualities issues' should be 'quality issues' (adjective form). 'which is not possible to visit at shop' is ungrammatical; correct form 'which is not possible when visiting a shop' clarifies meaning and fixes preposition use. Grammar problem type ID:13

× Although I am miser by nature but if shoes relates to my taste so I never think about money.

✓ Although I am miserly by nature, if shoes relate to my taste I never think about money.

'miser' is a noun; the adjective is 'miserly'. Removed unnecessary 'but' after 'although' (can't use both), adjusted verb agreement 'relates' should be 'relate' to match plural 'shoes'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Sometime I spend out of my budget but I think it's a worthy for me.

✓ Sometimes I spend beyond my budget, but I think it's worth it for me.

'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'spend out of my budget' is better as 'spend beyond my budget'. 'a worthy' is incorrect; use adjective 'worth it'. Grammar problem type ID:2

× As I clear earlier I had a huge collection of shoes.

✓ As I clarified earlier, I have a huge collection of shoes.

'As I clear earlier' is incorrect; use 'As I clarified earlier' or 'As I mentioned earlier'. Also use present perfect 'I have' to indicate ongoing possession rather than past 'I had'. Grammar problem type ID:9

× I would say comfortable shoes are my first priority always because I can easily wear them and I can freely walk with the shoes.

✓ I would say comfortable shoes are always my first priority because I can wear them easily and walk comfortably in them.

'first priority always' ordering is awkward; 'always my first priority' is natural. 'can freely walk with the shoes' is better as 'walk comfortably in them'. Adjusted adverb placement. Grammar problem type ID:16

× On the other hand, if I talk about fashionable shoes, so these type of shoes are not comfortable and we are not able to wear on all occasions.

✓ On the other hand, when I talk about fashionable shoes, these types of shoes are not comfortable and we are not able to wear them on all occasions.

Do not use both 'if' and 'so' together; use 'when' or 'if' without 'so'. 'these type' should be plural 'these types' or 'this type'. Also add object 'them' after 'wear' and include preposition 'on all occasions'. Grammar problem type ID:16