Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. "buying shoes" and "buy it"). Also correct tense/word choices ("I like to buy shoes" not "I would like to buy it").

Example: I do like buying shoes. I usually wait for Black Friday because there are big discounts, so I can buy higher-quality pairs while saving money.

Suggestion: Good direct answer and clear reason. Improve by adding a linking word and a brief specific example (e.g. a past return problem or a brand that fits differently) to make it more convincing and natural. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: No, I haven't. I find it hard to judge my exact size online, so I prefer trying shoes in a shop to avoid returns. For example, one brand I tried once online fitted poorly, which is why I stick to in-store shopping.

Suggestion: Clarify amounts and remove filler words ("uh"). Use a clear topic sentence and tidy supporting details. Correct awkward phrasing ("for an on it"). Provide currency consistently and avoid range ambiguity. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I usually spend little on shoes because I'm a student and have a limited budget. Therefore, I buy comfortable, inexpensive pairs only when necessary, typically spending around $20 to $50 per pair.

Suggestion: The answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference. Use linking words and give specific reasons and examples. Remove confusing phrases ("filled with my knit"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones. As a student, I need shoes that I can wear all day to school and when I hang out with friends, so I usually choose sneakers or cushioned slip-ons for comfort.

× I'm really into buying shoes and I would like to buy it whenever it is Black Friday, which is a super sales day in the year and that helped me save a lot of money so I buy at that time.

✓ I'm really into buying shoes and I like to buy them when it's Black Friday, which is a big sales day of the year, and that helps me save a lot of money, so I buy then.

Problems: 'it' refers to shoes (plural) so use 'them' (singular and plural issue - ID 1). 'I would like to buy it whenever it is Black Friday' is awkward for habitual action; use present simple 'I like to buy them when it's Black Friday' (present tense issue - ID 6). 'a super sales day in the year' is unnatural; use 'a big sales day of the year'. 'that helped me' mixes past with habitual present; use 'that helps me' to match habitual meaning. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun, keep consistent present-tense for habitual actions, and use natural collocations like 'big sales day' and 'buy then'.

× No I haven't. I don't really buy shoes online because it's hard for me to estimate my exact size and feet, so I prefer to try them on in a shop to avoid returns.

✓ No, I haven't. I don't really buy shoes online because it's hard for me to estimate my exact size and foot shape, so I prefer to try them on in a shop to avoid returns.

Problems: 'estimate my exact size and feet' is incorrect noun use; 'feet' should be 'foot shape' or 'foot measurements' (incorrect use of nouns/adjectives - ID 13). Also add a comma after 'No'. Modal verb ID 4 not strictly needed but the sentence fits preference; main corrections are noun usage and punctuation. Suggestion: use 'foot shape' or 'measurements' for clarity and add comma after interjection 'No'.

× I usually spend very little on shoes because I'm still a student and don't have, uh much money. I prefer comfortable, cheap shoes and only buy new pairs when I really need them. So I typically spend around 20 to $50.00 for an on it.

✓ I usually spend very little on shoes because I'm still a student and don't have much money. I prefer comfortable, inexpensive shoes and only buy new pairs when I really need them. So I typically spend around $20 to $50 for a pair.

Problems: extra comma before 'much' and filler 'uh' removed (sentence fluency). 'cheap' is acceptable but 'inexpensive' is more natural (adjective choice - ID 13). '20 to $50.00' inconsistent formatting; use '$20 to $50'. 'for an on it' is ungrammatical and unclear; correct to 'for a pair'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary fillers/punctuation, use consistent currency formatting, and use 'a pair' to indicate shoes unit.

× As I mentioned, I'm still a student so I think that's a comfortable shoes is filled with my knit and I think that is also easy for me to wear every day to school or to hang out with my friends.

✓ As I mentioned, I'm still a student, so I prefer comfortable shoes because they suit my style and are easy for me to wear every day to school or when I hang out with my friends.

Problems: 'that's a comfortable shoes' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'shoes' (singular and plural issue - ID 1) and wrong article usage (article errors - ID 22). 'is filled with my knit' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely meant 'suit my style' or 'fit my knitwear' (word choice/adjective use - ID 13). 'to hang out with my friends' better preceded by 'when'. Suggestion: ensure number agreement between article and noun, choose clear expressions ('suit my style'), and use conjunction 'when' for habitual activities.