Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Keep your answer concise and more grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid extra words. Also correct verb forms and count expressions (e.g., “once a year”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I only buy them about once a year. Because I prefer high-quality brands, they tend to be expensive, so I save up and choose carefully to make sure they last.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use clearer grammar. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “suit me,” “concerned about,” “exchange them”). Provide a brief reason and, if possible, a short example or condition that might change your mind. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I haven't bought shoes online because I’m worried the size might not suit me and I’m not sure if the store will accept exchanges. If a website had easy returns and accurate size charts, I might try it.

Suggestion: Give a direct estimate and then explain why. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “when I wear them”). Be specific about the price range and link it to a reason (comfort, durability). Avoid leaving sentences unfinished.

Example: I usually spend around $100 to $150 on a pair of shoes because I prioritize comfort and durability. I prefer to invest in well-made pairs that I can wear for several years.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly. If you truly prefer both, explain how you balance them with a short reason or example. Correct vocabulary (“look good”) and remove filler words like “umm.” Keep it to 1–3 sentences and include linking words (but, and) to connect ideas.

Example: I try to balance both: I prefer shoes that are comfortable but also stylish. For example, I choose sneakers from brands that offer good support and modern designs so I can feel comfortable and look good.

× I love buying shoes but I rarely purchase them like I buy them once a year because the shoe price that I choose is usually expensive so I have to make the best.

✓ I love buying shoes, but I rarely purchase them; I buy them about once a year because the shoes I choose are usually expensive, so I have to choose carefully.

Plural nouns and noun phrases were inconsistent and awkward. 'the shoe price that I choose' is incorrect; use 'the shoes I choose' and plural 'shoes' to match context. Also added 'about' for frequency, replaced 'make the best' with 'choose carefully' for correct idiomatic meaning. Use commas and a semicolon to separate clauses for clarity.

× No, because I'm afraid that the size is not suited me and I concern that the store might be change it for me if I can't wear them, so I prefer to buy.

✓ No, because I'm afraid the size will not suit me and I'm concerned that the store might not exchange them for me if I can't wear them, so I prefer to buy in person.

Pronoun and verb forms were incorrect. Use 'suit me' (not 'suited me') and 'I'm concerned' (not 'I concern'). 'Change it for me' is wrong; use 'exchange them for me' or 'not exchange them for me'. Also added 'in person' to complete the idea. Adjusted tense to future/modal 'will' and modal 'might' for possibility.

× I am very picky in buying shoes and I usually think about the comfort when I wearing it so I prefer expensive shoes like the price is about.

✓ I am very picky when buying shoes and I usually think about comfort when I wear them, so I prefer expensive shoes; the price is usually around [amount].

Tense and pronoun agreement issues: use 'when buying' or 'when I wear them' (not 'when I wearing it'). 'Comfort' does not need 'the'. 'Shoes' requires plural pronoun 'them'. The final clause was incomplete; replaced with 'the price is usually around [amount]' to show expected structure.

× Actually I can't choose between fashionable and umm comfortable shoes because I love to look bath with my shoes and also I want to be comfortable with them.

✓ Actually I can't choose between fashionable and comfortable shoes because I love to look good in my shoes and I also want to be comfortable wearing them.

Word choice errors: 'bath' is incorrect; likely 'good'. Replaced with 'look good in my shoes'. Also adjusted phrase 'comfortable with them' to 'comfortable wearing them' for natural collocation and correct verb form.