Shoes— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 의미 전달이 불명확합니다. 질문에 대한 직접적인 토픽 문장(예: 좋아한다/자주 산다)을 유지하되, 불필요한 반복과 중단된 문장을 제거하세요. 이유를 말할 때는 구체적인 이유를 간결하게 하나 또는 두 개로 제시하고, 연결어(for example, because, so 등)를 사용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 또한 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 제한하세요.

Example: Yes, I do like buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair about once a week. I collect shoes because I enjoy different styles and they help me express my personality. For example, I often buy sneakers for casual wear and dress shoes for special occasions.

Suggestion: 의미는 전달되지만 문법과 문장 연결이 약합니다. 현재완료 시제 사용은 적절했으나, 경험 설명 뒤에는 이유와 결과를 명확히 연결하세요. ‘하지만’으로 시작하는 반대 사실은 하나의 완전한 문장으로 연결하고 구체적 예(사이즈, 색상 문제 등)를 제시하면 좋습니다.

Example: Yes, I have. I often buy shoes online because it is easy to find the styles I like and compare similar designs. However, sometimes the shoes don't fit well or look different from the pictures, so I have to return them.

Suggestion: 숫자·단위 표현과 대명사 사용이 부정확합니다. 비용을 말할 때는 통화 단위를 명확히 하고 빈도와 예외 상황을 분리해 말하세요. 또한 이유를 말할 때는 구체적인 항목(브랜드, 모델)과 예시를 하나 들면 신뢰도가 올라갑니다.

Example: To be honest, I usually spend about $100 on shoes each weekend because collecting shoes is my hobby. Sometimes I even spend most of my budget on limited-edition or designer models, like special releases from popular brands.

Suggestion: 의미는 비교적 명확하지만 어색한 표현('flip my feet')과 시제/전치사 오류가 있습니다. 선호를 묻는 질문에는 직접적인 답변(주로 편안한 신발을 선호한다)을 첫 문장에 두고, 상황에 따른 예를 하나 들어 대비 표현(although, however)을 사용하세요.

Example: I prefer comfortable shoes for walking because they support my feet and are practical. However, when I'm going out with friends or attending events, I often choose fashionable shoes to look more stylish.

× I think I usually buy them once a week.

✓ I usually buy them once a week.

Redundant modal 'think' makes meaning unclear; simple present 'usually buy' expresses habitual action more naturally.

× That's because I can't find it for flexing and fulfilling, especially when I.

✓ That's because I buy them to show off and to satisfy myself, especially when I'm feeling good.

Original sentence is incomplete and uses incorrect pronoun 'it' and odd phrases 'for flexing and fulfilling'. Provide a complete clause with clear verbs and subject. Use 'show off' for 'flexing' and 'satisfy myself' for 'fulfilling'.

× Will test and present for people around me.

✓ I will try them on and show them to the people around me.

Missing subject and incorrect verb forms. Begin with subject 'I' and use 'will' + base verb for future intent; 'try them on' and 'show them to' are natural expressions.

× When I bought shoes online, I can find shoes that I want easily and I can search similar design.

✓ When I buy shoes online, I can find the shoes I want easily and I can search for similar designs.

Mixing past 'bought' with general ability 'can' is inconsistent. Use simple present 'buy' for habitual action. Also add article 'the' and preposition 'for' and plural 'designs' for natural phrasing.

× However. Sometimes unlike failed to buy shoes are suitable for me.

✓ However, sometimes shoes I bought online are not suitable for me.

Original has incorrect word order and punctuation. Combine into one sentence, use 'shoes I bought online' as noun phrase and 'are not suitable' for correct negation.

× Umm, to be honest, I spend 100 on shoes every weekend.

✓ To be honest, I spend 100 on shoes every weekend.

Remove filler 'Umm' in written response; otherwise sentence is grammatically fine in present tense for habitual action.

× Because collecting shoes is my hobby, sometimes I spend our last amount of money on collecting shoes, such as primary Levy products.

✓ Because collecting shoes is my hobby, sometimes I spend most of my money on collecting shoes, such as limited-edition products.

'Our last amount of money' is unnatural and incorrect; use 'most of my money'. 'Primary Levy products' is unclear—likely 'limited-edition products' fits context.

× When I walked, I tend to wear comfortable shoes.

✓ When I walk, I tend to wear comfortable shoes.

Use simple present 'walk' to describe habitual action; 'walked' is past tense and inconsistent with 'tend'.

× However, when I go shopping or I'm with my friends, I usually flip my feet on fashionable shoes.

✓ However, when I go shopping or I'm with my friends, I usually wear fashionable shoes.

'Flip my feet on' is incorrect and unnatural. Use verb 'wear' with 'fashionable shoes' to convey the intended meaning.