Rules— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief specific examples using linking words. Avoid redundancy and filler words.

Example: Yes. My school has strict appearance rules. For example, students must tie hair above shoulder length with a black hair tie, and skirts must be worn at the prescribed length. Because these rules aim to maintain uniformity, there are many regulations about dress.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer topic sentence, use linking words to structure reasons, and give a specific consequence or example. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'being benefited' -> 'benefitting').

Example: No, I don't think so. Although rules can provide order, more rules would likely harm motivation; for example, many students at my school complain about restrictions and seem less engaged in class as a result.

Suggestion: Use a single coherent sentence then add a supporting detail with linking words. Fix repetition and prepositions ('encouraged me in my dream' or 'encouraged my dream of').

Example: Yes. My current Japanese teacher is very dedicated; she teaches passionately and actively encouraged my dream of studying at a university abroad by advising me on applications and language study.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then explain with a clear reason and a specific example. Use correct phrasing ('less motivated in their studies').

Example: I prefer fewer rules at school. Too many regulations can reduce students' motivation in their studies; for instance, when minor freedoms are removed, many classmates become quieter and less willing to participate.

Suggestion: Organize your answer: give one clear example and avoid hesitations and repetition. Use correct sentence structures and link the example to the teacher's strictness. Be specific about what happened.

Example: Yes. My PE teacher was extremely strict about appearance; for example, she publicly scolded a student for shortening her skirt and for using a non-black hair tie, which made other students very anxious.

Suggestion: Start with a clear short answer. Then give two linked reasons using linking words (first/second or because/so). Correct grammar and word choice ('a very stressful job', 'wouldn't be able to control').

Example: No, I wouldn't. Firstly, I don't want to be a teacher because it is a very stressful job; secondly, without any rules teachers would struggle to maintain control, so effective lessons would be difficult to run.

× Yes there is.

✓ Yes, there are.

The student refers to 'rules' (plural) so the verb 'there is' is incorrect; 'there are' agrees with plural noun. Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech.

× There are lots of many strict rules.

✓ There are many strict rules.

Using both 'lots of' and 'many' together is redundant. Choose one quantifier. 'Many' or 'lots of' is correct with countable plural 'rules.'

× I don't see any students being benefited.

✓ I don't see any students benefiting.

'Be benefited' is not the correct passive sense here. Use the active participle 'benefiting' after 'see' to mean 'I observe that students benefit.' Also 'any students' with 'benefiting' is natural.

× Yes, I have a teacher who taught me Japanese and still is teaching me Japanese, is a passionate teacher and she encouraged me on my dream to go to the university abroad.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher who taught me Japanese and is still teaching me Japanese; she is a passionate teacher and encouraged me to pursue my dream of going to university abroad.

Multiple tense and word-order problems: place adverb 'still' before 'is teaching.' Combine clauses and keep tense consistency: 'taught' (past) and 'is still teaching' (present) is acceptable. Use 'encouraged me to pursue my dream' instead of 'encouraged me on my dream' and 'going to university abroad' without 'the' is more natural.

× I prefer having fewer rules in schools.

✓ I prefer having fewer rules at school.

Use 'at school' to match the context of the question (referring to the student's school). 'In schools' is not wrong but 'at school' is more natural here.

× For example, with a student was umm, folding their skirt to keep it short.

✓ For example, a student was, um, folding her skirt to keep it short.

Original sentence has wrong word order and awkward pronoun usage. Use 'a student was folding her skirt' for clarity. Maintain gender if known; if gender unknown, 'their' is acceptable, but since later 'she' is used, 'her' is consistent.

× Or the student was using a hair tie that's not black.

✓ Or the student was using a hair tie that was not black.

Maintain past tense 'was using' so the relative clause should match with 'was not black.' Using 'that's' (that is) mixes present with past narrative.

× She scolded her.

✓ She scolded her for that.

Sentence is grammatically correct but vague. Adding 'for that' clarifies the reason and improves flow. If keeping as-is, it's acceptable; suggested improvement clarifies referent.

× She scolded the students whenever they were.

✓ She scolded the students whenever they did that.

'Whenever they were' is incomplete; 'did that' or 'violated the rules' completes the idea. Use a clear verb to indicate the action.

× No I wouldn't.

✓ No, I wouldn't.

Add a comma after 'No' for natural spoken response punctuation. Grammatically 'I wouldn't' is fine.

× I really don't want to be a teacher in my future because I know that is very stressful job and if there were absolutely no rules then the teacher won't have control of their students and they won't be able to have a class.

✓ I really don't want to be a teacher in the future because I know that it is a very stressful job, and if there were absolutely no rules then teachers wouldn't have control of their students and wouldn't be able to hold a class.

Use 'in the future' or 'in my future' — 'in the future' is more natural. Insert 'it' before 'is a very stressful job.' Use plural 'teachers' for general statement and match conditionals: with 'if there were' use 'wouldn't' rather than 'won't.' Also 'hold a class' or 'conduct a class' is more natural than 'have a class.'