Rules— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct small errors (role → rule), and give one clear supporting detail. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes. There are a few important rules: we must wear a uniform and treat each other respectfully. These rules help ensure students are treated equally and prevent distractions during lessons.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like "I feel like" and tighten phrasing.

Example: Yes. More rules can help students develop discipline and respect because consistent expectations teach appropriate behaviour. For example, rules about punctuality and homework encourage responsibility over time.

Suggestion: Remove filler words (umm, uh), correct grammar (maths, not Max), and use past tense consistently. Give one clear specific example of what the teacher did to help you.

Example: Yes. My maths teacher, Dr Anamu, taught me from middle school for over five years and was very dedicated. Because he used clear explanations and patient one-to-one help, I went from hating maths to enjoying it.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer and avoid repetition. Use precise language (fewer rules, feel trapped). Give one concise reason and a suggestion for balance.

Example: I prefer fewer rules. Too many rules can make students feel restricted, so there should be a reasonable number focused on safety and fairness rather than controlling minor behaviour.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing, avoid awkward sentences ("I still didn't forget his name"), and maintain an objective tone. Provide one specific example and a brief reflection on its impact.

Example: Yes. In fourth grade I had a very strict teacher in Ethiopia who punished us with a plastic ruler when we talked in class. This scared many students and made the classroom tense rather than supportive.

Suggestion: Answer directly, correct word choice (roof → rule-free), and organize reasons succinctly. Use linking words and a short concluding sentence to summarise your view.

Example: No. I would not want to teach in a rule-free school because students would be difficult to manage without basic expectations. However, if the school had a few clear and fair rules about behaviour and safety, I would consider teaching there.

× Every school has a role and one of the main rules is for us to wear uniform and respect one another.

✓ Every school has rules and one of the main rules is for us to wear a uniform and respect one another.

The noun 'uniform' needs an article in this context: use 'a uniform' to refer to wearing a single set of clothing. Also 'a role' is odd; 'rules' fits meaning better. Suggestion: use articles before singular, countable nouns (a/an/the) and check noun plurality.

× And they feel like we're all very important for students to be treated equally.

✓ And they feel it is very important that students are treated equally.

Original sentence has incorrect structure and unclear subject 'they'. Use a clear clause: 'it is important that...' and passive 'students are treated equally'. Ensure subject and verb agreement and logical order.

× And I feel like following rules makes you more disciplined and just makes you respect more people.

✓ And I feel that following rules makes you more disciplined and makes you respect other people more.

Word order and choice: 'respect more people' is awkward; use 'respect other people more'. Maintain present simple tense 'makes' for habits. Suggest clearer adverb placement after object.

× And I feel like rules do actually shape the way that kids grow and the way that they treat people is based on the rules that their parents have for them at home or at school.

✓ And I feel that rules actually shape the way kids grow, and the way they treat people is based on the rules their parents set for them at home or at school.

Remove extra 'that', simplify 'do actually' to 'actually', and use 'set' instead of 'have' for rules parents impose. Ensure parallel structure and concise phrasing in present tense.

× His name was uh, Doctor Anamu, uh, He has taught me maths for starting from middle school, actually for for more than five years.

✓ His name was Doctor Anamu. He taught me maths starting from middle school, actually for more than five years.

Tense mismatch: 'has taught' with 'starting from middle school' and 'was' is inconsistent. Use past simple 'taught' because speaker refers to a past period. Also remove repeated 'for' and capitalize properly. Use 'maths' or 'math' consistently.

× I love and adored him so much.

✓ I loved and adored him so much.

Mixing present 'love' with past 'adored' is inconsistent. Use past tense 'loved' to match 'adored' when referring to a past teacher. Keep tense consistent.

× He makes me love Max more, which was the subject I hated the most and that's what teachers are capable of.

✓ He made me love math more; it was the subject I hated the most, and that shows what teachers can do.

Tense consistency: use past 'made' to match earlier past references. 'Max' is likely 'math' (spelling error) and 'that's what teachers are capable of' is awkward; rephrase to 'that shows what teachers can do.' Ensure clear meaning and consistent tense.

× I prefer to have less rules because I feel like if it's too much rules, I feel like it's just gonna make me feel trapped and make me feel like I'm in prison.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules because I feel that if there are too many rules, they will make me feel trapped, like I'm in prison.

Use 'fewer' with countable plural 'rules' (not 'less'). Replace 'too much rules' with 'too many rules'. Avoid repetition 'feel like' and informal 'gonna'; use 'will' for clarity. Improve pronoun reference and reduce redundancy.

× So I feel like the rules should just be the enough amount and should be reasonable.

✓ So I feel the rules should be reasonable and kept to a sufficient amount.

'The enough amount' is ungrammatical. Use 'a sufficient amount' or 'kept to a reasonable number'. Keep adjective-noun order natural and concise.

× I still didn't forget his name.

✓ I still haven't forgotten his name.

Use present perfect 'haven't forgotten' to express a past action with relevance to present (still). 'Didn't forget' is simple past and conflicts with 'still'.

× I was in 4th grade and it was here in Ethiopia to the school I was going to.

✓ I was in 4th grade and it was at the school I attended here in Ethiopia.

Incorrect preposition 'to' and awkward word order. Use 'at the school I attended' or 'the school I went to'. Place location 'here in Ethiopia' naturally.

× He was very strict to the point where he used to hit us with a plastic wire whenever we talked with each other or just looked at him in appropriately and it was just very bad.

✓ He was very strict to the point where he used to hit us with a plastic wire whenever we talked to each other or looked at him inappropriately, and it was very bad.

Adverb placement: 'inappropriately' should be one word and follow the verb 'looked'. 'Talked with each other' is acceptable but 'talked to each other' is more natural. Remove redundant 'just' and fix punctuation.

× No, I definitely would not want to work as a teacher in a roof in school because firstly and mainly I feel like the students would be hard to manage.

✓ No, I definitely would not want to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because, firstly, I feel the students would be hard to manage.

'roof in school' is a mispronunciation of 'rule-free school'. Clarify phrasing and punctuation. 'Firstly and mainly' is redundant; use 'firstly' or 'mainly'. Ensure sentence reflects intended meaning.

× But if there are some specific rules that they or just some basic rules that they can practice, I feel like I wouldn't mind teaching in that school.

✓ But if there are some specific or basic rules they can follow, I wouldn't mind teaching at that school.

Unnecessary repetition 'that they or just some basic rules that they can practice' is confusing. Use 'specific or basic rules they can follow' and 'teaching at that school' for natural preposition. Simplify and clarify condition.