Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, avoid hesitations and repetition, and give a clear topic sentence plus one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if you add details. Pronounce words correctly and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. ‘activities’ or ‘hobbies’ instead of unclear phrases).

Example: I have several hobbies, including reading and sketching. For example, I usually read novels in the evening to unwind; additionally, sketching helps me focus and reduces stress.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and hesitations, and give a specific example with correct nouns. Use linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘also’. Replace unclear references with correct names (e.g. cartoon names) and describe what you drew.

Example: Yes. When I was a child, I loved reading and drawing. For example, I often watched cartoons and then drew the characters in my notebook, practicing different poses and expressions.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence and clear timeline, avoid grammatical errors and vague phrases. Use linking words (e.g. ‘over the years’) and provide a specific recent example with correct vocabulary. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences and reduce hesitations.

Example: Yes, drawing is a hobby I have had since childhood. Over the years I have improved my skills, and recently I drew a detailed sketch of an old church to practice shading and perspective.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear direct answer, then contrast using linking phrases like ‘on the other hand’ or ‘whereas’. Correct grammar (e.g. ‘they have physical hobbies such as cycling and skating’) and avoid extra hesitations. Provide a brief reason or example to enrich the response.

Example: No, not really. My family prefers physical activities such as cycling and skating, whereas I enjoy quieter hobbies like reading and drawing because they help me relax indoors.

× I I have several hobbies such as reading and uh, trying office help me relax after, umm, A stressful day.

✓ I have several hobbies such as reading and trying office work; they help me relax after a stressful day.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I'), missing or incorrect connector structure, and awkward phrasing. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Combine ideas clearly: list hobbies, then state their effect using a clear subject ('they') and verb ('help'). Use 'office work' instead of 'office' to name the activity, remove filler sounds, and make articles consistent ('a stressful day'). Suggestion: remove duplicate words and fillers, use a semicolon or conjunction to connect related clauses, and ensure a clear subject for 'help.'

× When I was a child, I loved to read read and I loved to draw on different things.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to read and I loved to draw on different surfaces.

The sentence contains a repetition ('read read') and an imprecise object ('things'). This is a past tense/context error (ID 5) because the overall context is past and verbs are correct but wording is awkward. Remove duplicate word and replace 'things' with a more specific noun like 'surfaces' to clarify meaning. Suggestion: avoid repeating words and choose precise nouns to match the past-tense verbs.

× Umm for example, I used to watch Money Carton saw at the end I used to draw them in the book.

✓ For example, I used to watch Money Cartoons; when the episode ended, I would draw the characters in my notebook.

The original is unclear and run-on, mixing tenses and lacking connectors — a sentence structure error (ID 26). 'Money Carton' seems to be 'Money Cartoons' or 'cartoons.' Use a semicolon or separate sentences and consistent past habit phrasing: 'used to' or 'would.' Clarify that the speaker drew characters and specify 'notebook' instead of 'book' if appropriate. Suggestion: pick consistent past-habit expressions and split or connect clauses properly to avoid run-ons.

× One hobby that I have since my childhood is none other than drawing.

✓ One hobby that I have had since my childhood is drawing.

Using 'have' with 'since my childhood' requires the present perfect 'have had' to indicate a continuous state from the past to present; this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). 'None other than' is unnecessary and informal here. Suggestion: use 'have had' for continuing situations that started in the past and continue now, and keep phrasing concise.

× As from the child I was very interested in drawing and as a years ago I have improved a lot.

✓ Since childhood I was very interested in drawing, and over the years I have improved a lot.

The original uses incorrect prepositions/phrases ('As from the child', 'as a years ago') — this is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Use 'since childhood' to indicate starting point and 'over the years' to indicate gradual improvement. Ensure tense consistency: 'was' for early interest, 'have improved' for ongoing improvement. Suggestion: use standard time expressions ('since childhood', 'over the years') and match verb tenses to the intended meaning.

× I'm just last umm few days ago I had drawn a definitely old chick in spat drawing.

✓ Just a few days ago, I drew a detailed old chick in a sketch.

This sentence is confused in tense and word choice — a past tense issue (ID 5). 'I'm just last few days ago' mixes present and past; use 'Just a few days ago' and simple past 'drew' for a completed action. 'Definitely old chick in spat drawing' is unclear; likely intended 'detailed old chick in a sketch.' Suggestion: avoid mixing present and past time markers, use clear past-time expression plus simple past verb, and choose precise nouns ('sketch', 'drawing').

× No, on contrary they have a physical hobbies.

✓ No, on the contrary they have physical hobbies.

The phrase has incorrect article and plural agreement with pronoun placement — primarily incorrect use of pronouns/articles (ID 12 and 22). Remove 'a' before 'physical hobbies' because 'hobbies' is plural. 'On contrary' should be 'on the contrary.' Suggestion: ensure articles match noun number and use the fixed expression 'on the contrary.'

× I'm like cycling, biking, skating and on the other hand I have a hobbies which is reading, umm drawing which doesn't need a physical effort.

✓ I like cycling, biking and skating, but I also have hobbies such as reading and drawing, which do not require physical effort.

Multiple errors: 'I'm like' is incorrect (should be 'I like'), article 'a hobbies' is wrong for plural (ID 22), verb agreement 'doesn't' should be 'do not' to agree with plural 'reading and drawing' (ID 12/27). This is mainly incorrect use of pronouns/articles and subject-verb agreement. Use 'but' or 'on the other hand' correctly to contrast, and ensure plural agreement with 'do not.' Suggestion: use 'I like' for preferences, match articles to singular/plural nouns, and make verbs agree with their subjects (use 'do not' for plural subjects).