Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法ミスと冗長さがあります。トピック文の後に短い理由や頻度の説明を加え、語順や時制を修正してください。例えば「when I go exhaust by a part time job」は不自然なので「when I'm exhausted after my part-time job」に直すべきです。また接続詞（because, so, when）や頻度表現（often, sometimes）を使って論理的に繋げてください。5文以内に収め、語彙は文脈に合った語を選びましょう。

Example: I enjoy singing, and going to karaoke is my favorite way to relax. I often go after my part-time job because singing helps me unwind. Sometimes I practice new songs to improve my voice.

Suggestion: 内容は伝わりますが、文法の誤り（主語の一致、冗長表現）が目立ちます。まず短いトピック文で答え、その後に理由（なぜやめたか）を明確に述べてください。例えば “that was my hobbies”→“that was my hobby” や “I quit it to play it” は意味不明なので、具体的に「練習が忙しくてやめた」などに言い換えましょう。接続語（but, however, because）を適切に使い、文を簡潔に保ってください。

Example: Yes. I used to play the piano a lot when I was a child, but I stopped because I became too busy with school. I enjoyed it at the time, though, and learned basic music theory.

Suggestion: 良い内容ですが、文法（現在完了進行形の使い方、語順）と繰り返しが問題です。不要な重複（really I really, really）を避け、一貫した時制を使ってください。具体的な開始年は“from the age of two”か“when I was two”と表現し、理由は一つに絞って簡潔に述べましょう。接続詞（because, so）を使って文を滑らかに繋げてください。

Example: Yes, I have been swimming since I was a child. I started when I was about two years old and have continued because swimming helps me relieve stress and stay fit.

Suggestion: 答えは明確で関連性も良いですが、文法的に小さな誤りがあります（“that's the hobbies”→“that's the hobby”または“those are the hobbies”）。より自然にするために、家族との関係や具体的なエピソード（父が教えてくれた練習や思い出）を一文で付け加えると良いでしょう。過去と現在の時制を整え、重複を避けてください。

Example: Yes. My father was a professional swimmer and taught me when I was young, so swimming is a hobby we share. He coached me through many weekend training sessions.

× Yes, singing is actually one of my hobbies. I love to go to karaoke when I want to feel relaxed or when I go exhaust by a part time job.

✓ Yes, singing is actually one of my hobbies. I love to go to karaoke when I want to feel relaxed or when I am exhausted from a part-time job.

The phrase 'go exhaust' is incorrect; after 'when' you need a clause with a correct verb form. Use the adjective 'exhausted' to describe the subject's state and the preposition 'from' to indicate the cause. Also 'part time job' should be hyphenated as 'part-time job'. Suggested improvement: Use 'I am exhausted from a part-time job' to clearly express a state caused by the job.

× I used to play the piano a lot so that was my hobbies when I was a child, but I quit it to play it so that's not my hobby anymore.

✓ I used to play the piano a lot, so that was my hobby when I was a child, but I quit, so that's not my hobby anymore.

The noun phrase 'my hobbies' is plural but refers to a single activity 'play the piano', so it should be singular 'my hobby'. Also wording 'quit it to play it' is unclear and redundant; simply 'I quit' suffices. Suggested improvement: Keep number agreement between subject and noun ('my hobby').

× Swimming is one of the hobbies that I've been still doing since I was a child. I think I started to swimming from the age of two years old. I'm really I really liked it because I can really get rid of my stress.

✓ Swimming is one of the hobbies that I've still been doing since I was a child. I think I started swimming at the age of two. I really like it because I can relieve my stress.

Use 'I've still been doing' rather than 'I've been still doing' for natural adverb placement. 'Started to swimming' is incorrect; after 'start' use the gerund 'swimming'. Use 'at the age of two' instead of 'from the age of two years old'. 'I'm really I really liked it' is mixed tenses and redundant; choose present 'I really like it' if it continues now. 'Get rid of my stress' is informal; 'relieve my stress' is more natural. Suggested improvement: Use correct verb patterns (start + gerund), place adverbs ('still') before the main verb, and keep tense consistent.

× My dad actually used to be a professional swimmer, so he taught me swimming when I was a child. So that's the hobbies that we share.

✓ My dad actually used to be a professional swimmer, so he taught me to swim when I was a child. So that's the hobby that we share.

'That's the hobbies' mixes singular demonstrative 'that' and plural 'hobbies'; it should be 'that hobby' since referring to one shared activity. Also 'taught me swimming' is acceptable but 'taught me to swim' is more natural. Suggested improvement: Ensure demonstratives and nouns agree in number and choose natural verb patterns ('teach someone to do something').