Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), and keep verbs consistent. Add one specific detail about what you read and how often you jog to make the answer more vivid. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

Example: Yes — I enjoy reading and jogging in my free time. I usually read modern novels and articles about psychology, which expands my vocabulary and ideas. I go jogging three times a week to stay physically fit and to clear my mind after a busy day.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer structure. Begin with a topic sentence in past tense, avoid repeating words, and give a specific example (e.g., favorite stamp). Explain briefly why it mattered. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, when I was a child I collected stamps and coins from different countries. My grandmother inspired me by sending postcards, and my favourite stamp was one from Japan because of its colourful design.

Suggestion: Maintain tense consistency and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence in present perfect if the hobby continues, then explain current situation briefly with a linking phrase. Give a specific example of what you draw and how often you hope to practice.

Example: Yes, I have loved drawing and sketching since childhood. However, due to my busy schedule I haven't had much time recently, though I'm trying to sketch at least once a week to improve my skills.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid fragmented sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence then give two short contrasting examples using correct grammar and linking words (for example). Correct subject-verb agreement and remove redundancies. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Not really — my hobbies are different from my family. For example, my brother enjoys motorbike racing and writing, while my sister prefers gardening in her free time.

× Yes I do, I enjoy reading and jogging in my free time.

✓ Yes I do. I enjoy reading and jogging in my free time.

The original uses a comma splice joining two independent clauses with a comma. Replace the comma with a period to form two sentences. Also keep present simple for habitual actions ('enjoy'). Suggestion: use separate sentences or a coordinating conjunction with a comma.

× Reading helps me to expand my vocabulary and jogging helps me uh, keeping my body physically and mentally fit and clear my mind after a busy day.

✓ Reading helps me expand my vocabulary, and jogging helps me keep my body physically and mentally fit and clear my mind after a busy day.

After 'helps' the base form of the verb should be used (helps me expand/helps me keep), not the -ing form. Remove filler 'uh' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity.

× Yes I do. I had a hobby of collecting stamps and collecting coins of different countries.

✓ Yes I did. I had a hobby of collecting stamps and coins from different countries.

The question asks about childhood (past), so the response should use past tense 'Yes I did' not 'Yes I do'. Also reduce redundancy by saying 'collecting stamps and coins' and use 'from' for origin.

× The stamp I got an idea of collection from my grandmother which she used to send a letter via postcards.

✓ I got the idea of collecting stamps from my grandmother, who used to send letters and postcards.

Sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun use. 'Which' should be 'who' to refer to a person. 'Got an idea of collection' is awkward—use 'got the idea of collecting stamps'. Also correct 'send a letter via postcards' to 'send letters and postcards'.

× Yes I did, I love to draw and sketch since my childhood but because of my very busy schedule, I'm not able to give much time to my hobby lately.

✓ Yes I did. I loved to draw and sketch since my childhood, but because of my very busy schedule I have not been able to give much time to my hobby lately.

Mixes past and present incorrectly. For an ongoing hobby since childhood, use present perfect continuous or present perfect ('have loved' or 'have been drawing'), but 'loved' with 'since' usually needs present perfect. Here we correct to 'I loved' and then use present perfect 'have not been able' for recent inability. Also replace comma splice with a period and remove unnecessary commas.

× But I'm trying to take some time out of my busy schedule.

✓ I am trying to make some time in my busy schedule.

Starting a sentence with 'But' in spoken response is acceptable but in formal answer better to use 'I am'. 'Take time out of my schedule' is understandable but 'make some time in my schedule' is more natural. Keep present continuous 'am trying'.

× To be honest, I am very different from my family members.

✓ To be honest, I am quite different from my family members.

Original is grammatically acceptable but 'very different from' is slightly awkward; 'quite different from' is more natural. No major grammar error; this is a stylistic improvement.

× For example, my brother, he is very much into writing a different he's a racer and he loves riding bikes with his friends.

✓ For example, my brother is very much into writing and is also a racer; he loves riding bikes with his friends.

Original has redundant subject 'my brother, he' and runs clauses together without proper connectors. Remove the extra pronoun, use conjunctions or punctuation to join ideas, and correct 'a different' which is unclear — intended 'and' to connect hobbies.

× And my sister, she's love gardening in her free time.

✓ My sister loves gardening in her free time.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'she's love' is incorrect (contraction 'she's' = she is). Use 'she loves' or 'my sister loves'. Also avoid starting sentence with 'And' in formal speech.