Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming a few main hobbies, then give one or two brief, specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "vast majority" and "different aspects of life."

Example: I enjoy several hobbies, such as crocheting, playing tennis and guitar, and reading. For example, I crochet in the evenings to relax, and I play tennis twice a week to stay fit, which helps balance my study and work life.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reason; correct tense and avoid vague or incorrect phrases. Use a linking word to explain why you focused on studies and add one specific example or contrast.

Example: Not really — when I was a child I mostly focused on my studies because my parents emphasized school success. As a result, I rarely had time for hobbies, although I sometimes read storybooks on weekends.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear statement about tennis, fix tense and reduce repetition. Give a concise supporting detail (how often you played or why you continued) using a linking phrase.

Example: Yes, I have played tennis since I was 12, and it is the only hobby that continued into adulthood. For instance, I played on my school team and still play twice a week because I enjoy the exercise and competition.

Suggestion: Make a clear topic sentence and give a brief supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repeated negatives and improve grammar (singular/plural agreement).

Example: No, my hobbies are mostly different from my family's. However, my brother and I both enjoy tennis, which we often play together, while other family members prefer activities like cooking or hiking.

× I do have many hobbies like crocheting, playing sports, going to the gym, playing guitar, reading.

✓ I do have many hobbies, such as crocheting, playing sports, going to the gym, playing the guitar, and reading.

List items should use consistent forms; 'playing guitar' is more natural as 'playing the guitar' and items should be separated with commas and 'and' before the final item to be grammatically correct.

× I have a vast majority of different interests in different fields, different aspects of life and that helps actually to make the person I am.

✓ I have a wide variety of interests in different fields and aspects of life, and that actually helps shape who I am.

'Vast majority' is incorrect when referring to interests; 'wide variety' or 'a wide range' is appropriate. Word order and connectors were awkward; 'helps shape who I am' is a natural collocation. Removed redundant 'different' and fixed sentence flow.

× When I was a child, I was merely focusing only on my studies and I haven't had any chance to practice any hobbies.

✓ When I was a child, I focused mainly on my studies and I didn't have any chance to pursue hobbies.

Mixing past continuous with present perfect ('haven't had') is inconsistent for a past time frame. Use simple past 'focused' and 'didn't have' to match 'When I was a child'. 'Merely focusing only' is redundant; use 'focused mainly'.

× Nevertheless, the last no one actually show me a way to it, so I merely focused on my studies.

✓ Moreover, no one actually showed me a way to pursue hobbies, so I focused on my studies.

The original has ungrammatical fragments: 'the last no one' and wrong verb form 'show'. Use past tense 'showed' for a past situation and restructure to 'no one showed me a way to pursue hobbies'. 'Nevertheless' can be replaced by 'Moreover' or removed; adjusted to simple past consistency.

× I don't think I have a hobby now that I used to adopt to back to when I was a child.

✓ I don't think I have any hobby now that I adopted when I was a child.

'Used to adopt to back to' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'adopted' (simple past) for a habit begun in childhood, and 'any hobby' fits negative present reference. Keep tense consistent: 'I don't think I have any hobby now that I adopted when I was a child.'

× The only thing when I was 12 I started playing tennis and that was the only hobby that continues on continued until I grew up.

✓ When I was 12, I started playing tennis, and that was the only hobby that continued until I grew up.

Mixing 'continues on continued' is incorrect. Use simple past 'continued' to describe a habit that lasted until adulthood. Add commas and reorder for clarity: 'When I was 12, I started...' is more natural.

× But not not.

✓ But not anymore.

'Not not' is ungrammatical and likely intended to mean 'not anymore' to indicate the hobby no longer continues. Replace with correct adverbial phrase.

× It's only just tennis. Not any other hobbies because I didn't practice much hobbies, many hobbies.

✓ It's just tennis; not any other hobby, because I didn't practice many hobbies.

Use singular 'hobby' after 'any other' and 'many hobbies' alone is fine but 'didn't practice many hobbies' is correct negative quantifier use. Removed redundant words and adjusted punctuation.

× No no I don't think I have the same hobbies as my family member.

✓ No, no, I don't think I have the same hobbies as my family members.

'Family member' (singular) conflicts with 'hobbies' (plural). Use plural 'family members' when referring to more than one person in the family.

× Only my brother share one hobby which is tennis but not any other hobbies.

✓ Only my brother shares one hobby, which is tennis, but no one else shares any other hobbies.

Subject-verb agreement: 'brother' (singular) requires 'shares' (third person singular). Clarified meaning: other family members do not share hobbies; adjusted phrasing to natural English.