Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, clarity and naturalness. Use a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and prepositions, and concise phrasing. Replace vague phrases like "get charge energies" with natural expressions (e.g., "boost my mood"). Add one or two supporting details using linking words.

Example: Yes. At the moment, my hobby is rewriting the lyrics of famous songs to match my feelings and situations. For example, I change the words to express whether I feel happy or sad, and this helps boost my mood and motivates me when I’m tired.

Suggestion: Correct word choice and sentence structure. Use the past tense consistently and replace incorrect verbs ("correct") with the right ones ("collect"), and fix repetitions. Provide one specific detail about why it made you happy, using a linking word.

Example: Yes. When I was a child, I used to collect beautiful stones and shells from the beach near my house. I kept my finds in a glass jar, and because each piece was unique, they made me feel proud and happy.

Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, use present perfect for ongoing hobbies, and explain current limitations briefly with a linking word. Replace unclear terms like "beach carving" with "collecting shells and stones" if that is intended.

Example: Yes, I have. I have enjoyed collecting beautiful stones and shells since childhood. However, I haven’t been able to visit the beach recently, but collecting has remained my hobby because I enjoy looking for interesting shapes and colors.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and sentence completeness. Start with a clear topic sentence and combine short fragments into full sentences. Add a brief reason using a linking word to make response coherent and specific.

Example: No, my family don’t share this hobby. I enjoy collecting stones and shells on the beach because it makes me feel like a treasure hunter, and it relaxes me. For example, I display the best pieces at home, which reminds me of peaceful days by the sea.

× Yes, current my hobby is to revise famous songs lyrics to adjust my feelings or suitable my situations so that I get charge energies.

✓ Yes, currently my hobby is revising famous songs' lyrics to adjust my feelings or suit my situations so that I get charged with energy.

Problems: incorrect adverb placement ('current' -> 'currently'), wrong word order ('current my' -> 'currently my'), incorrect verb form after 'is' (use gerund 'revising'), missing possessive for songs ('songs''), wrong verb choice and form ('suitable my situations' -> 'suit my situations'), incorrect phrase 'get charge energies' (use 'get charged with energy' or 'feel energized'). Suggestion: place adverbs before the main verb or after auxiliary, use gerunds for activities, use possessive for nouns indicating ownership, choose appropriate verbs and natural collocations ('suit situations', 'get charged with energy' or 'feel energized').

× When I was a child, I used to correct beautiful stones and shells.

✓ When I was a child, I used to collect beautiful stones and shells.

Error: wrong verb 'correct' used instead of intended 'collect'. 'Used to' is correct for past habitual actions. Suggestion: use the verb that matches the meaning; here 'collect' fits collecting stones and shells.

× I visited the beach near my house and kept the finds my finds in the glass chair.

✓ I visited the beach near my house and kept my finds in a glass jar.

Problems: redundant phrase 'the finds my finds', incorrect noun 'glass chair' (likely 'glass jar'), article use ('a glass jar'). Suggestion: remove redundancy, choose correct noun, and use the indefinite article for one of many similar containers.

× These make me made me happy.

✓ These made me happy.

Error: mixed present and past verbs ('make me made me'). Because the context is past, use past tense 'made'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent; use 'made' to describe past feelings.

× Yes, since childhood I have enjoyed collect correcting beautiful stones and shells.

✓ Yes, since childhood I have enjoyed collecting beautiful stones and shells.

Errors: incorrect verb form after 'enjoy' (use gerund 'collecting'), extra word 'correcting' is wrong; remove or replace with intended verb. 'Have enjoyed' requires an -ing form. Suggestion: use 'enjoy' + gerund and pick the correct verb 'collect' -> 'collecting'.

× Umm, recently I couldn't visit the beach.

✓ Umm, recently I haven't been able to visit the beach.

Problem: 'couldn't' implies past ability; 'recently' with present perfect ('haven't been able to') better expresses the ongoing inability up to now. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions affecting the present or 'couldn't' if referring to a specific past time.

× But uh, beach carving is still my hobby.

✓ But uh, beach collecting is still my hobby.

Error: 'beach carving' is unnatural for collecting stones and shells; likely intended 'beach collecting' or 'collecting on the beach'. Suggestion: use natural noun phrase that matches earlier meaning, e.g., 'beach collecting' or 'collecting shells on the beach'.

× Actually, no, my family don't share this hobby.

✓ Actually, no, my family don't share this hobby.

Issue: subject-verb agreement note: 'family' can be singular or plural. In informal speech 'my family don't' is acceptable in British English, but standard American English uses 'my family doesn't'. Choose 'don't' only if treating family members plural. Suggestion: for consistency and formality use 'my family doesn't share this hobby.'

× I enjoy collecting beautiful stones and shells and searching for them on the beach.

✓ I enjoy collecting beautiful stones and shells and searching for them on the beach.

This sentence is correct grammatically; no change needed. Explanation: 'enjoy collecting' uses gerund correctly and the structure is clear. Suggestion: none.

× Makes me feel like a treasure hunter.

✓ It makes me feel like a treasure hunter.

Error: sentence fragment without subject. Add the pronoun 'It' to form a complete sentence referring to the activity. Suggestion: include a subject ('It') for clarity.

× It relaxes me and I like displaying the best pieces at home.

✓ It relaxes me, and I like displaying the best pieces at home.

Sentence is grammatically correct; only punctuation (comma) added for compound sentence. Explanation: present simple correctly expresses habitual feeling and preference. Suggestion: include comma before conjunction for clarity.