Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more fluent and concise: remove hesitation sounds, correct unclear phrases, and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting specifics. Use linking words for coherence (for example, 'I enjoy... because'). Also correct 'I remind it for my future' to a natural expression such as 'I like to preserve memories for the future' or 'I can look back on my work later.'

Example: I enjoy photography because it lets me capture beautiful places and events. For example, I often photograph city buildings and natural landscapes, and I like to keep these photos so I can remember places and improve my skills over time.

Suggestion: Organize into a clear topic sentence and two concise supporting details. Avoid filler words and correct grammar (e.g., 'After finishing school, my mother waited for me'). Be specific about occasions when you still enjoy sweets. Use linking words like 'however' or 'now' to contrast past and present.

Example: When I was a child I loved eating sweets, especially chocolate bars. After finishing school my mother often gave me chocolates as a treat. Now I rarely eat them, but I still enjoy them on special occasions.

Suggestion: Make your answer directly address the question with a clear topic sentence (name the hobby) and explain briefly how it continued into adulthood. Avoid vague timing and repetition; correct grammar ('ask questions', 'I used to'). Provide a specific example of how you share this hobby with family and why you enjoy it.

Example: Yes — I have always loved asking questions and listening to family stories. As a child I often asked my parents and grandfather about their memories, and now I still enjoy interviewing relatives to learn about our past because their stories are fascinating.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence stating which hobbies you share. Use correct grammar and pluralization ('my father joins', 'play cricket', 'sometimes football') and link ideas with short connectors. Give one specific example of a shared activity (when/where) to make it concrete.

Example: Yes, I share several hobbies with my family, especially cricket and photography. For example, my father joins me on weekends to play cricket in the local park, and we also take photographs together on family outings.

× I remind it uh, for my future.

✓ I will remember it for my future.

The original uses 'remind' incorrectly. 'Remind' is transitive and usually means causing someone to remember; the student likely means 'remember' or 'will remember.' Also tense and modality: speaking about a future intention requires future tense 'will remember.' Use 'it' to refer to 'photography' or 'the memories' is okay, but clearer is 'I will remember it for the future.' Suggestion: use 'remember' or 'will remember' depending on intended time.

× I enjoy uh, capturing beautiful places and events, for example, city buildings, uh, landscape and nature.

✓ I enjoy capturing beautiful places and events, for example, city buildings, landscapes, and nature.

The sentence largely correct but 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match items in a list and to be natural. No change to the gerund 'capturing' which is correct after 'enjoy.' Suggestion: use plural nouns consistently in lists.

× After finish my school, my mother wait for me and give me chocolates because I love it.

✓ After finishing school, my mother waited for me and gave me chocolates because I loved them.

The sequence describes past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense. Use the gerund 'finishing' after 'after.' 'Wait' and 'give' must be 'waited' and 'gave.' Also 'chocolates' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' and verb 'love' should be 'loved' for past preference. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and match pronoun number.

× Uh, right now I don't eat but I enjoy when I have occasion.

✓ Right now I don't eat them, but I enjoy them on special occasions.

The original is unclear: 'I don't eat' needs an object like 'them' (chocolates). 'Have occasion' is not natural; use 'on special occasions.' Present simple 'don't eat' is fine for current habit, but add object and correct phrase. Suggestion: include the object and use the fixed expression 'on special occasions.'

× When I was a child my favorite hobby was eating sweets, chocolate, especially chocolate bars, uh, confectionery candy.

✓ When I was a child, my favorite hobby was eating sweets and chocolate, especially chocolate bars and confectionery candy.

The original mostly correct but needs conjunction 'and' to join 'sweets and chocolate.' Also a comma after introductory clause. 'Confectionery candy' is redundant but acceptable; clearer: 'confectionery' or 'candy.' Suggestion: add commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes I did. When I was a child I used to disturb my parents and grandfather a lot because I always wanted to play games and ask question.

✓ When I was a child I used to disturb my parents and my grandfather a lot because I always wanted to play games and ask questions.

Missing plural 'questions.' 'Grandfather' is fine but adding 'my' before it improves style. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit. Suggestion: pluralize 'question' to 'questions.'

× Even if when I have three times sometimes I bother them and ask them for past memories it it's so amazing.

✓ Even when I visit three times, I sometimes bother them and ask them about past memories; it's so amazing.

Original is ungrammatical: 'Even if when I have three times' is incorrect. Likely meaning 'when I visit three times' or 'even if I visit three times.' Use 'visit' or 'go there' and place adverbs correctly. 'Ask them for past memories' should be 'ask them about past memories.' Remove duplicate 'it.' Use semicolon or full stop before 'it's so amazing.' Suggestion: simplify to 'Even when I visit three times, I sometimes bother them and ask them about past memories; it's so amazing.'

× Yes, actually my favorite hobby is cricket, volleyball and photography.

✓ Yes, actually my favorite hobbies are cricket, volleyball, and photography.

List of hobbies requires plural 'hobbies' and plural verb 'are' for subject-verb agreement. Using singular 'hobby is' with multiple items is incorrect. Suggestion: use plural noun 'hobbies' and 'are.'

× Sometimes my father's join with me on weekends, uh, my father play with cricket with me, sometimes footballs and also helps me.

✓ Sometimes my father joins me on weekends; he plays cricket with me, sometimes football, and he also helps me.

Errors: 'father's' is the possessive form; should be 'father' as subject. Subject-verb agreement: 'joins' for third person singular. 'Play with cricket with me' is ungrammatical; use 'plays cricket with me.' 'Footballs' should be 'football' (the sport). Add pronoun 'he' and commas/semicolons for clarity. Suggestion: use correct subject form, third person singular verbs, and proper noun forms for sports.

× Photography. It's a common for us and we enjoy it.

✓ Photography is common for us, and we enjoy it.

Fragment 'Photography.' should be combined into one sentence. 'It's a common for us' is incorrect: remove article 'a' and say 'common for us.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and unnecessary articles.