Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Сформулируйте более ясное и краткое вступление, избегайте повторов (например, «helps me to relax» и «express my feelings» повторяются). Используйте связки для логичности и не более 3–4 предложений. Поработайте над грамматикой (артикли и согласование).

Example: I have several hobbies, but drawing is my main one. It helps me relax and gives me a way to express my emotions. I also enjoy showing my drawings to friends, who often give me helpful feedback.

Suggestion: Сократите и структурируйте ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте конкретные детали и связывающие слова. Исправьте грамматику и нелогичные фразы («I often school» непонятно).

Example: Yes, I used to enjoy swimming as a child. After school and homework I would go to the local pool near our house, often with my friends or sometimes with my family. It was a great way to stay active and relax.

Suggestion: Избегайте заполнителей («uh», «exactly») и повтора мыслей. Дайте чёткое время начала и конкретные детали о том, что вы делали (какие материалы, как часто). Заканчивайте предложение завершённой мыслью.

Example: Yes, I've been drawing since I was about six years old. I started with simple pencil sketches and later experimented with paints and different colours. Over the years I practised regularly, which helped me improve my technique.

Suggestion: Уточните, кто именно и какие именно общие хобби у вас с членами семьи или друзьями. Избегайте бессвязного перечисления; используйте связки и конкретные примеры (частота, места). Исправьте лексику («hobby in the song» непонятно).

Example: Yes, my friend Marie and I share several interests. We both enjoy travelling to other countries and visiting historical villages and sites. We often explore local restaurants and talk about our experiences during these trips.

× Several hobbies but one of the important one will be drawing because I really enjoy it because it helps me to relax and to share my feelings and also it allows me to express my feelings and I like sharing my drawings with others.

✓ I have several hobbies, but one of the most important ones is drawing because I really enjoy it; it helps me relax and express and share my feelings, and I like sharing my drawings with others.

The sentence has singular/plural mismatches: 'one of the important one' should be 'one of the most important ones' (plural 'ones' after 'one of'). Verb form 'will be' is incorrect for a general statement about a current hobby; use present tense 'is'. Also improve redundancy and punctuation. Suggestion: use 'one of the most important ones is drawing' and keep present simple for habitual facts.

× Yeah, when I was a child, the hobby which I had was swimming. Yeah, because every time when I finished my lessons and my homework, I often went to the pool near our house and I often school with my friends and my family.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was swimming. After I finished my lessons and homework, I often went to the pool near our house with my friends and family.

Use simple past for past habitual actions ('was', 'went'). Remove redundant 'Yeah' and 'every time when' -> 'after'. The phrase 'I often school with my friends' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'with my friends and my family' so use 'went ... with'. Suggestion: keep clear past tense verbs and correct verb selection.

× Yeah, exactly that hobby must be drawing because, uh, since I was a child like approximately 6 years, I started to drawing, I started to draw and working with pants and also some colors and that's why I.

✓ Yes, that hobby is drawing. Since I was about six years old, I started drawing and working with paints and colors.

'Must be' is inappropriate for stating a lifelong hobby; use 'is'. 'I started to drawing' mixes infinitive and gerund; correct is 'started drawing' (verb + -ing). 'Working with pants' is wrong word choice; intended 'paints'. Also express age correctly: 'about six years old'. Suggestion: use 'started drawing' and 'working with paints and colors'.

× Yes, me and my friend Marie have hobby in the song and that hobby is going abroad, going villages and other historical places and like sharing our feelings each other and also communication with each other and also restaurants.

✓ My friend Marie and I have similar hobbies: singing, traveling abroad and visiting villages and historical places, sharing our feelings with each other, and dining at restaurants.

Use subject pronoun order 'My friend Marie and I' instead of 'me and my friend Marie'. 'Have hobby in the song' is incorrect; use 'have similar hobbies' or 'like singing'. 'Each other' needs a preposition: 'sharing our feelings with each other'. 'Also communication with each other and also restaurants' is awkward; use 'and dining at restaurants'. Suggestion: reorder subjects correctly and use appropriate verbs and prepositions for activities.