Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give two or three specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and tense errors. Vary vocabulary (e.g., “watering” instead of “give water”) and correct grammar (e.g., “I enjoy gardening in the evening” not “I really enjoyed”).

Example: I enjoy two main hobbies: gardening and dancing. For gardening, I water my plants and grow vegetables in my small backyard, usually in the evening when it is cooler. As for dancing, I take a short free-style class once a week because it helps me stay fit and relax.

Suggestion: Directly answer the question in past tense and avoid fillers. Use one topic sentence about childhood hobbies, then add specific examples and a linking phrase to explain why you enjoyed them. Remove boastful or vague comments like “my voice is very good” without proof — rephrase to sound natural.

Example: Yes, as a child I enjoyed coloring, dancing and singing. For example, I spent hours coloring picture books and often performed simple songs at family gatherings, which made me feel happy and confident.

Suggestion: Start with a clear, grammatical topic sentence and use correct tenses. Avoid irrelevant or confusing remarks (e.g., “because I am poor”); instead explain reason like “to relax” or “to keep fit.” Give a brief example of how the hobby continued into adulthood.

Example: Yes. Dancing is a hobby I have had since childhood. I used to dance with my cousins at family events, and I still practice a few times a week now to stay active and relieve stress.

Suggestion: Answer directly and politely, avoid absolute statements or negative language like “I don't even touch books.” Use linking words to contrast (e.g., “whereas”) and give a brief reason for the difference. Offer a positive closing sentence to show balance.

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family’s. While most of them enjoy reading and discussing books, I prefer active hobbies like gardening and dancing. However, I can still join them occasionally for a book club meeting to spend time together.

× Yes, I do have hobbies and one of them is gardening.

✓ Yes, I have hobbies, and one of them is gardening.

Redundant auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present simple sentences. Use 'I have' instead of 'I do have' for natural phrasing.

× I love to do gardening in evening.

✓ I love gardening in the evening.

Present tense and expression: use the verb 'love' + gerund ('gardening') rather than 'to do gardening'. Also include the definite article 'the' with 'evening' when referring to a specific time of day.

× I go in my garden, I grow seeds, I love to give water to the plants and I really enjoyed.

✓ I go into my garden, I grow seeds, I love to water the plants, and I really enjoy it.

Multiple issues: preposition 'in' should be 'into' for entering the garden (preposition error ID 11), 'give water to the plants' is awkward — use 'water the plants' (verb/phrase choice), and tense/verb form 'I really enjoyed' is past tense while context is present — should be 'I really enjoy it' (present tense issue ID 6). Also sentences should be connected with proper conjunctions.

× And the other one is dancing.

✓ The other hobby is dancing.

Style: replace 'And the other one is dancing' with 'The other hobby is dancing' for clarity. 'Dancing' correctly appears as a gerund representing the hobby (verb + -ing form is appropriate).

× I love to do dance.

✓ I love to dance.

Use the infinitive 'to dance' after 'love' or the gerund 'dancing'. 'Do dance' is unnatural — say 'to dance' or 'dancing'.

× Well, I do have hobbies.

✓ Well, I have hobbies.

Same as before: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' in affirmative present simple. Use 'I have' for natural expression.

× When I was a child I loved coloring, I love dancing and sometimes I used to do singing because my umm voice is very good and everyone appreciates me while I was singing.

✓ When I was a child, I loved coloring, I loved dancing, and sometimes I used to sing because my voice was very good and everyone appreciated me when I sang.

Mix of past and present tenses: when referring to childhood, use past tense consistently (loved, used to sing). 'Used to do singing' is incorrect — use 'used to sing'. Also change 'appreciates me while I was singing' to 'appreciated me when I sang' for correct tense agreement and natural phrasing.

× Well, I do have a hobby that I had since childhood is dancing.

✓ Well, a hobby I have had since childhood is dancing.

Tense and sentence structure: 'have had since childhood' (present perfect) indicates a hobby that started in the past and continues now. Original mixes present and past incorrectly and has awkward word order; restructure to 'a hobby I have had since childhood is dancing'.

× When I was young I love to to dance with my cousins and now I do it sometimes in the morning or evening just because I am poor.

✓ When I was young, I loved to dance with my cousins, and now I do it sometimes in the morning or evening.

Tense error: recounting past events requires past tense 'loved' not 'love'. Remove the repeated 'to'. The phrase 'just because I am poor' is irrelevant and likely incorrect in meaning; omit it. If intended, replace with an appropriate reason.

× No, I'm very different from my family members.

✓ No, I'm very different from my family members.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It demonstrates correct subject-verb agreement and structure; no change necessary.

× My family members are more likely to read books and I don't even touch books because I hate reading.

✓ My family members prefer reading books, and I don't even touch books because I hate reading.

'Are more likely to read' is awkward when comparing general preferences; use 'prefer reading books'. Tense is present and appropriate. Also add a conjunction and comma for clarity.

× So yeah, I don't have same hobbies as my family members.

✓ So yeah, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies' (article error ID 22). Subject-verb agreement and structure otherwise fine.

× They are very different from me.

✓ They are very different from me.

Sentence is correct; subject-verb agreement is fine. No grammatical change required.