Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, correct grammar, and organize ideas: start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "and") and check subject-verb agreement and article use.

Example: I enjoy gardening because it is relaxing and therapeutic. I grow a variety of plants and flowers in front of my house, and spending time there after a hectic day helps me unwind and feel connected to nature, which is good for my mental and physical health.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, use correct past tense and articles, and give one specific example of a childhood activity. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "but", "however", "so").

Example: I didn't have a particular hobby as a child, but I enjoyed playing games with my cousin after school. We would share toys and snacks and spend hours inventing new games together, which helped us be creative and close.

Suggestion: Be clear about timeline and use correct pronouns and tenses. Begin with a direct answer (No/Yes) then explain concisely. Avoid confusing phrasing — say who was fascinated or that you became fascinated. Use linking words like "when" and "so".

Example: No, I did not keep a hobby from childhood. When I grew up, I explored different activities and eventually became fascinated by gardening. Gardening now relaxes me after a hectic day and helps me feel connected to nature.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use correct grammar (possessive forms, plural/singular agreement). Give one clear example comparing two family members and use linking words (for example, "while"). Avoid awkward phrasing like "you want" or unnecessary words like possessive "TV's".

Example: No, my family members have different hobbies. For example, my mother prefers listening to music and reading quietly, while my younger brother is more energetic and likes playing video games and watching TV shows.

× Hobbies I really love gardening, it does a relaxing and therapeutic hobby.

✓ Hobbies: I really love gardening; it is a relaxing and therapeutic hobby.

The original sentence misuses 'does' with 'a relaxing and therapeutic hobby' and has awkward structure. Use 'it is' to describe gardening. Also add colon or rephrase to separate topic word 'Hobbies' from the sentence. Improve flow and subject-verb agreement by using 'it is'.

× I have grown a variety of large and plant in front of my house and spending time after a hectic day helps me relax and feel connected to nature which is beneficial for my health and physical health.

✓ I have grown a variety of large plants in front of my house, and spending time there after a hectic day helps me relax and feel connected to nature, which is beneficial for my mental and physical health.

Errors include incorrect noun form 'plant' (should be plural 'plants') and awkward phrase 'large and plant'. Also missing conjunction punctuation and unclear reference for 'spending time' — add 'there'. 'Physical health' repeated; add 'mental and physical health' for clarity. Ensure parallelism and proper pluralization.

× I didn't have particular hobby as a child.

✓ I didn't have a particular hobby as a child.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'particular hobby'. Use 'a' for singular, countable nouns in this context.

× After school and tuition, I prefer playing game with my cousin who lived with us.

✓ After school and tuition, I preferred playing games with my cousin who lived with us.

Sentence refers to past time ('when you were a child'), so verbs should be past tense: 'preferred' and 'games' (plural) because playing repeatedly with cousin. 'Game' should be plural to match habitual activity.

× We often share toys and snacks and spend hours inventing new games together.

✓ We often shared toys and snacks and spent hours inventing new games together.

Maintain past tense to match the question about childhood. Change 'share' and 'spend' to 'shared' and 'spent'.

× As I discussed before, I had no specific hobby as a child but when I grew up I explored different kind of things around me.

✓ As I mentioned before, I had no specific hobby as a child, but when I grew up I explored different kinds of things around me.

Use 'mentioned' instead of 'discussed' for a brief reference. 'Different kind' should be 'different kinds' (plural) to match 'things'. Add comma before 'but' for clarity.

× One of them is always fascinated me with his gardening.

✓ One of them always fascinated me with his gardening.

Incorrect auxiliary 'is' with 'always fascinated me'. Use past simple 'fascinated' because referring to past experience. 'One of them' refers to an activity or person; context implies 'one of those things' or 'one of them (my relatives)' — keep as 'One of them always fascinated me'. Alternatively clarify subject.

× It's give me relaxation after a hectic day and connected me with the nature.

✓ It gave me relaxation after a hectic day and connected me with nature.

Tense should be past ('gave', 'connected') to match 'when I grew up'. 'It's' is present contraction incorrectly used. 'the nature' is incorrect: use 'nature' without article. Maintain parallel past tense verbs.

× No, I think every person in my family has their completely different interests and personality.

✓ No, I think every person in my family has completely different interests and personalities.

Agreement: 'every person' is singular, so use 'has' and then treat 'interests and personalities' plural to reflect multiple people. 'Their' is better replaced by rephrasing; here remove 'their' to avoid mismatch. Use 'personalities' plural to match 'every person' collectively.

× Some of my family members are very calm which you want to listen music and some is very energetic which want to play games and watching TV's show.

✓ Some of my family members are very calm and like to listen to music, while others are very energetic and like to play games and watch TV shows.

Multiple issues: relative clause 'which you want to' is incorrect; use 'and like to' for habit. 'Listen to music' requires preposition 'to'. 'Some is' should be 'others are' for plural agreement. 'Watching TV's show' is incorrect possessive and gerund form; use 'watch TV shows'. Ensure parallel structure and correct verb forms.