Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid vague phrases like "hobby stuff" and incorrect words such as "professor" if you mean "professional" or "instructor." Use one or two specific supporting details (how often you dance, styles, and a brief mention of achievements) and link them with simple connectors. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I enjoy dancing, which is my main hobby. I practice contemporary and traditional dances three times a week, and I find it both energizing and creative. Because of this commitment, I have won several medals in local competitions.

Suggestion: Make the answer coherent and accurate. Avoid irrelevant or confusing details (a master's degree is not a childhood hobby). Give a concise topic sentence and then list 2–3 childhood hobbies with brief specifics and a linking word. Reduce hesitations and filler words.

Example: When I was a child I enjoyed several activities, especially dancing, jogging and playing chess. For example, I used to go jogging every morning with my father and practiced chess at school club twice a week. I couldn't pick one favorite because I liked different things at different times.

Suggestion: This answer is clear but can be improved by making it more natural and specific. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add specific supporting details (when you started, what style, how it benefits you) and use linking words such as "because" or "which." Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I have danced since I was a child. I started taking classes at age six and now I focus on contemporary and folk dance. It inspires me and keeps me fit because the classes combine cardio and flexibility training.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar and vocabulary. Give a clear topic sentence about shared hobbies, then provide one or two specific examples (what you cook together, when, and why it matters) and use linking words like "for example" or "so." Avoid unclear phrases like "heritage at UMM."

Example: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family, especially cooking. For example, my mother taught me traditional recipes and we often cook together on weekends, which brings us closer and helps us preserve family recipes.

× Yes, I have a hobby stuff and my best hobby is dancing.

✓ Yes, I have some hobbies, and my main hobby is dancing.

The original uses 'hobby stuff' which is informal and ungrammatical. 'Hobby' should be plural if referring to several; use 'some hobbies'. 'Best hobby' is non-native phrasing; 'main hobby' or 'favorite hobby' is natural. Use a comma and conjunction to join clauses.

× I really enjoy that and I am professor in this part of sport and I have many medals, I have many awards of this type of activity.

✓ I really enjoy it; I am a professional in this sport and I have many medals and awards for this activity.

'Enjoy that' should be 'enjoy it' referring to dancing. 'I am professor in this part of sport' is incorrect: 'professor' implies academic role; likely meaning 'professional' or 'a coach'. Use article 'a professional' and 'in this sport'. Combine 'medals' and 'awards' with 'and' and use 'for this activity' rather than 'of'.

× Yes, yes, when I was a child. I have many hobbies, for example, jogging, dancing, I have a master's degree in umm, chess.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had many hobbies, for example jogging and dancing; I also studied chess and have a master's degree in it.

The question asks about past habits, so 'have' should be past 'had'. List items should be connected with 'and'. The clause about a master's degree must be clearer: 'have a master's degree in chess' or 'studied chess'. Ensure tense consistency: past hobbies ('had') and present qualification ('have a master's degree') separated clearly.

× And umm, for me, I didn't uh, choose one favorite when I was a child, unfortunately.

✓ For me, I didn't choose one favorite when I was a child.

Remove filler words and maintain past tense 'didn't choose' for childhood. 'Unfortunately' can remain but is optional; ensure clear placement if used: 'I didn't choose one favorite when I was a child, unfortunately.'

× Yes, I have a hobby that I have since my childhood.

✓ Yes, I have had a hobby since my childhood.

When describing an activity that began in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect 'have had' rather than 'have ... since'. 'I have a hobby that I have since my childhood' is redundant and ungrammatical.

× It is dancing.

✓ It is dancing.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable as a short answer identifying the hobby. No correction needed.

× I really like it and it is so pleasant for me.

✓ I really like it; it is very enjoyable for me.

'So pleasant for me' is understandable but awkward. Use 'very enjoyable for me' or 'very pleasant'. 'Enjoyable' is a better collocation with 'it'.

× It is inspiring for my life and it helps me to be fit and be a healthy person.

✓ It is inspiring in my life and helps me stay fit and healthy.

Use 'inspiring in my life' or 'inspiring to me'. 'Helps me to be fit and be a healthy person' is wordy; better: 'helps me stay fit and healthy'. Omit redundant 'be'.

× Yes, I have the same hobbies as my family members, I had heritage at UMM, love to cooking from my mother and we prefer cooking together every time and it is make our us interlinked with each other.

✓ Yes, I share hobbies with my family. I inherited a love of cooking from my mother, and we prefer cooking together; it helps keep us connected.

Multiple errors: 'I have the same hobbies as my family members' is fine but verbose—'I share hobbies with my family' is concise. 'I had heritage at UMM' is unclear and likely wrong; probably meant 'I inherited' rather than 'had heritage', and 'at UMM' is unnecessary unless referencing a place. 'Love to cooking from my mother' should be 'a love of cooking from my mother'. 'We prefer cooking together every time' is unnatural—'we prefer to cook together' or 'we often cook together'. 'It is make our us interlinked with each other' is ungrammatical; use 'it helps keep us connected'.