Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Сформулируйте ответ более напрямую и грамматически корректно: начните с чёткой темы, затем коротко добавьте одну-две конкретные детали, избегая лишних слов. Исправьте согласование (my hobby/ hobbies) и время глаголов. Например, используйте связки (for example, nowadays) чтобы сделать речь связной.

Example: Yes, I do. I'm a creative person, so my hobbies change quite often; for example, when I was younger I enjoyed paper crafts, but nowadays I prefer drawing and digital design.

Suggestion: Дайте более конкретные примеры и уберите разговорные вставки («umm», «uh»). Сформулируйте причину, почему вам нравились эти занятия, и свяжите прошлое с настоящим с помощью слов-связок (for example, however). Это покажет последовательность мыслей.

Example: Yes, definitely. For example, I used to make paper crafts and bead jewellery because I enjoyed creating small gifts for friends; however, it's not my main hobby anymore.

Suggestion: Упорядочьте рассказ во времени и используйте более точные слова вместо «threw it» и «continue this way». Объясните кратко, почему вы вернулись к гитаре, и используйте связки (then, later, so) для связности. Старайтесь не превышать 3–4 предложений.

Example: Yes, I have played the guitar since I was a child. I loved it, but stopped for a few years; later I returned to it because I missed playing, and now practicing guitar is my main hobby.

Suggestion: Дайте прямой ответ, затем поясните конкретным примером о различиях. Избегайте тавтологии и слов-паразитов («umm», «that's right now»). Используйте слова-связки (for example, while, whereas) чтобы показать контраст.

Example: Not really. While I enjoy creative hobbies like music and crafts, my parents prefer gardening and my sister likes team sports, so we each have different interests.

× Obviously yes, hope it's the time where you can do anything in your free time.

✓ Obviously yes; I hope this is a time when you can do whatever you want in your free time.

The original sentence is a run-on and uses informal/clumsy phrasing ('hope it's the time where'). Use 'I hope' as an independent clause and 'when' for the time clause; 'whatever you want' is more natural than 'anything'. Also add appropriate punctuation to separate clauses.

× So I'm a creative person and my hobby are changing frequently.

✓ So I'm a creative person and my hobbies change frequently.

Subject 'hobby' does not agree with plural verb 'are changing'. Use plural 'hobbies' with simple present 'change' to express habitual action. Avoid progressive for regular changes.

× In my childhood I used to do lots of the things with paper crafts and right now I don't I'm not into with that.

✓ In my childhood I used to do many things with paper crafts, but right now I'm not into that.

Remove the extra 'the' and use 'many things' or 'lots of things'. 'I'm not into that' is the correct colloquial form; do not combine 'I don't' and 'I'm not' and avoid 'into with' which is incorrect preposition usage.

× Uh, definitely yes. As I said that I used to do lots of things with paper grab crafts, umm, I also found that doing jewelry with beads, it really floats my boat.

✓ Uh, definitely yes. As I said, I used to do lots of paper craft projects; I also found that making jewelry with beads really floated my boat.

Use past simple 'floated' to match 'used to' (past habit). 'Grab crafts' is incorrect; use 'paper craft projects' or 'paper crafts'. Remove unnecessary comma before 'it' and use 'making' instead of 'doing' for jewelry.

× But right now I can't say that it's my favorite one.

✓ But right now I wouldn't say it's my favorite.

'I can't say' is acceptable but 'I wouldn't say' is more natural for expressing preference; remove 'one' as redundant when context is clear.

× Yes I do, and it's playing guitar.

✓ Yes I do; it's playing the guitar.

Use 'the guitar' when referring to the instrument in general in English. Add a semicolon or comma for clarity.

× I really loved to play this instrument, nevertheless I threw it and when I was older I decided to continue this way and right now my hobby is playing guitar.

✓ I really loved playing this instrument; I stopped for a while, but when I was older I decided to continue, and now my hobby is playing the guitar.

Use 'loved playing' instead of 'loved to play' for natural phrasing. 'I threw it' is incorrect/confusing—used 'I stopped for a while'. Use contrastive connector 'but' and 'when I was older' with past tense. Again use 'the guitar'.

× I don't think so, since my family members are really umm, different from me and from the hobbies I do, and we've got diversity actions hobbies for all members in my of my family.

✓ I don't think so, since my family members are quite different from me in their hobbies, and we have a variety of hobbies among the members of my family.

Original has awkward pronoun and phrase use: 'different from me and from the hobbies I do' is unclear. Replace with 'different from me in their hobbies'. 'We've got diversity actions hobbies' is ungrammatical; use 'a variety of hobbies'. Fix word order 'members of my family'.

× That's right now.

✓ That's how it is right now.

Original is a fragment and unnatural. Use full clause 'That's how it is right now' to convey the intended meaning.