Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答内容明确，但表达有语法和用词问题，句子略冗长且重复。建议：1) 用1个主题句直接回答（摄影和阅读），2) 用一到两句简短具体的细节支持，每句不超过两从句，3) 注意时态和固定搭配（例如“take photos”常用“take photos of”或“photograph”），以及“learn knowledge”应改为“learn new things”或“gain knowledge”）。

Example: I enjoy landscape photography and reading. On weekends I usually photograph rural scenery near my city, focusing on mountains and rivers to capture different light. I also read novels and non-fiction to relax and learn new things.

Suggestion: 回答直接但细节不够准确且有用词错误（作者名不明确，“a woman author”不自然）。建议：1) 开头直接回答童年爱好，2) 给出具体书名或描述作家风格，3) 避免笼统或不确定的表述，使用连词简洁连接。

Example: Yes, I loved reading as a child, especially science fiction. I was inspired by stories about space and time travel, such as works by popular Chinese sci-fi writers, which sparked my imagination.

Suggestion: 结构清晰但有语法和表达问题，句子过长且用词不自然（“from child until now”，“let me know more knowledge”）。建议：1) 用一条主题句说明持续的爱好，2) 用1-2个简短句子具体说明如何有助于你和阅读方式的变化，3) 使用正确短语如“since childhood”, “help me relieve stress”, “gain knowledge”, “read on screens”。

Example: Yes, I've been an avid reader since childhood. Reading helps me relieve weekday stress and expand my knowledge, and recently I often read e-books on my tablet because it's convenient.

Suggestion: 回答包含具体例子但存在语法错误和不自然表达（“taking photos with different resorts”，“take many photos of Great Wall”，“send them to social media which attracted many fans”）。建议：1) 用一两句说明与家人共享的爱好，2) 提供清晰具体的例子并用正确时态，3) 描述结果时更自然如“received many likes”或“gained attention”。

Example: Yes, my father and I both enjoy photography, especially when we travel. Last summer we visited the Great Wall in Beijing and took many landscape photos, which we later posted on social media and they received a lot of positive feedback.

× I am passionate about taking some photos of beautiful landscapes in my country.

✓ I am passionate about taking photos of the beautiful landscapes in my country.

“take photos” 后不需要加不定数量词 “some”，且在谈论特定范围（自己国家的风景）时常用定冠词 “the”。“taking some photos of beautiful landscapes” 中的 -ing 形式用法正确，但需要调整冠词和数量词以更地道。

× Additionally, I love reading books on the weekends which makes me feel relaxed and also I can learn knowledge from it.

✓ Additionally, I love reading books on the weekends, which makes me feel relaxed, and I can also learn from them.

原句中连词和从句连接不当：先用 which 引导非限制性定语从句需与主句用逗号隔开；“and also I can learn knowledge from it” 在代词和词序上不自然，改为 “I can also learn from them” 更符合英语表达，同时将“books”用复数代词“them”指代。对应语法问题为连词使用和代词指代问题，但只按清单中允许类型改为“Incorrect use of conjunction”。

× Yes, when I was a child I liked reading books, especially science fiction by Michelle, a woman author who was really famous.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked reading books, especially science fiction by Michelle, a female author who was really famous.

句子时态为过去时使用正确，但“a woman author” 表达不自然，应该用“a female author” 或直接 “a well-known author”。此处属于词语搭配问题，按照清单归入过去时问题予以更正以保持陈述一致。

× I constantly read books from child until now which not only can help me reduce the pressure of weekdays but also let me know more knowledge.

✓ I have been constantly reading books since childhood, which not only helps me reduce the pressure of weekdays but also allows me to learn more.

原句时态与时间状语“from child until now”不匹配，应使用现在完成时表示从过去持续到现在：’have been reading/ have been constantly reading‘。另外从句中动词形式需与主语一致：’helps‘ 而非 ‘can help’（可选，但更自然为直接陈述效果），’let me know more knowledge‘ 不自然，应为 ’allows me to learn more‘ 或 ’help me learn more‘。因此按清单修正为现在时问题。

× And now I usually read books from screen.

✓ And now I usually read books on a screen.

介词搭配错误：英语中常说 “read on a screen” 或 “read from a screen” 较少见且“from screen” 缺少冠词。更自然为 “on a screen” 或 “on screens”。因此按介词使用错误予以修改。

× Sure, my father and I love taking photos with different resorts.

✓ Sure, my father and I love taking photos at different resorts.

介词应为 “at” 表示在度假胜地拍照；此外 “with different resorts” 含义错误，似应为 “at different resorts”。此处归为量词/短语使用错误，按清单选择最接近项进行修改。

× For instance, last summer holiday we went to Beijing and take many photos of Great Wall.

✓ For instance, last summer holiday we went to Beijing and took many photos of the Great Wall.

句中描述过去发生的动作，应使用过去时态 “took” 而非现在时 “take”。此外 “the Great Wall” 前需加定冠词 “the”。因此按过去时问题修正。

× Moreover, we send them to social media which attracted many fans.

✓ Moreover, we sent them to social media, which attracted many followers.

时态不一致：前半句关于过去事件应为 “sent”；此外 “which attracted many fans” 中关系代词作用于整个前句，需用逗号隔开；“fans” 在社交媒体语境下常用 “followers”。因此归类为代词/时态混合问题，但按清单选择代词错误进行更正。