Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I do / No, I don't), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition ('making' repeated) and use precise verbs (e.g. create, film).

Example: No, I don't have many hobbies, but I usually spend my free time creating short films. I enjoy filming and editing because it lets me bring my ideas to life, and I often plan each scene carefully to match the mood I want.

Suggestion: Good content and specific details. Improve fluency and accuracy: use correct plural forms and link ideas with a connective. Keep to maximum five sentences and a clear topic sentence.

Example: Yes, as a child I loved arts and crafts, especially drawing and making paper toys. I also enjoyed playing outdoors with friends at the playground, which helped me stay active and social.

Suggestion: Start with a full sentence and avoid repeating similar phrases. Use linking words to organise details (for example, additionally, especially). Be specific about how the hobby continued (now vs then).

Example: Yes, I have listened to music since I was a child. I enjoy a variety of styles, such as K-pop, J-pop and jazz; especially K-pop, which I used to copy by practising the choreography in my room.

Suggestion: Make the response grammatically correct and more natural: begin with a clear topic sentence (No, we don't). Use linking phrases to contrast, and give one or two concise examples. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'different tastes each other'.

Example: No, we don't share the same hobbies because our tastes differ. For example, my father enjoys playing golf and my mother likes visiting exhibitions, while I prefer staying at home and relaxing.

× I don't have any hobbies but I usually spend my free time on making videos.

✓ I don't have any hobbies, but I usually spend my free time making videos.

Use 'spend time' + gerund without 'on'. 'Spend my free time making videos' is the correct structure. Remove 'on' to fix the verb + -ing form error and add a comma before 'but' for clarity.

× I really like making films because I can actualize my imagination on each scene, so I like making.

✓ I really like making films because I can bring my imagination to life in each scene, so I enjoy making them.

'Actualize' is awkward here; 'bring to life' is natural. 'On each scene' is incorrect preposition and noun usage; use 'in each scene'. The final clause 'so I like making' is incomplete; specify the object 'them' or rephrase to 'enjoy making them'. This fixes sentence structure and preposition use.

× When I was a child I loved art activities like drawing pictures and making paper toy, and I really liked to go out and play with friends in the playground.

✓ When I was a child I loved art activities like drawing pictures and making paper toys, and I really liked going out to play with friends on the playground.

'Paper toy' should be plural ('paper toys') to match 'activities' and because more than one is implied. 'Liked to go out and play' is grammatical but 'liked going out to play' is more natural; use 'on the playground' instead of 'in the playground' for standard collocation. This addresses singular/plural and preposition/verb form choices.

× Definitely listening to music.

✓ Definitely, listening to music has been my hobby since childhood.

The fragment lacks a verb; adding 'has been' gives proper present perfect to show a hobby continuing from childhood to present. This uses the past participle form in the present perfect construction to fit the question about a lifelong hobby.

× I really loved listening to music like K pop, J pop and jazz.

✓ I really loved listening to music like K-pop, J-pop, and jazz.

Hyphenation for K-pop and J-pop is standard in English. Adding commas for list clarity and keeping no article is correct. This addresses minor punctuation and style; no article needed before genres.

× So I spent a lot of time listening to music and especially I really like K pop, so I used to imitate the choreography.

✓ I spent a lot of time listening to music and especially liked K-pop, so I used to imitate the choreography.

Maintain consistent past tense when describing past habits: 'spent', 'liked', 'used to imitate'. Mixing present 'I really like' with past 'spent' is inconsistent. Change 'I really like' to 'liked' to match past context.

× Unfortunately, we're not because we have different tastes each other.

✓ Unfortunately, we are not because we have different tastes from each other.

'We're not' is incomplete—'we are not' what? In context, 'we do not share the same hobbies' is clearer, but minimal correction: change 'each other' collocation to 'from each other' to show difference. Alternatively: 'Unfortunately, we do not share the same hobbies because we have different tastes.' This fixes pronoun and sentence completeness.

× For example, my dad, he loves playing golf and my mom loves going to exhibition and I like just staying at home and relaxing.

✓ For example, my dad loves playing golf, my mom loves going to exhibitions, and I like just staying at home and relaxing.

Avoid redundant pronoun 'he' after 'my dad'. Use plural 'exhibitions' and add commas and 'and' for proper list structure. This fixes sentence structure and article/number usage.