Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations, correct minor grammar (e.g., "practical hobby set at art or singing" → "art or singing"), and use one or two specific details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "and" / "so").

Example: I don't do much art or singing, but at the moment I enjoy exercising. For example, I walk my dog twice a day to boost my energy and relax after a long day, which helps me stay healthy and calm.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and coherence: use correct tense (past) and avoid repetitions/hesitations. Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Clarify unclear parts ("join my sister Art"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

Example: Yes. As a child I was passionate about sports, especially soccer. I often played soccer with my school friends because it kept me fit and helped me maintain a balanced lifestyle.

Suggestion: Be direct and avoid fillers like "uh" and unnecessary words. Use correct phrase forms ("keep me fit" not "keep me stay fit"). Structure: topic sentence + specific examples + reason. Use linking words ("for example", "because").

Example: Yes. Since childhood I have preferred active hobbies with friends. For example, we often walk to the park or play badminton because these activities keep me fit and help build teamwork.

Suggestion: Clarify subject-verb agreement and avoid unclear phrases ("give for our national team", "enjoy the 1:00"). Start with a clear statement, then give a specific example of shared activity and what you do together. Use linking words like "especially" and "for example" correctly.

Example: Yes. My father and I share a love of soccer. For example, when the Vietnam national team plays a good match we watch it together, cheer for our team, and relax while enjoying the game.

× Well, I don't have a practical hobby set at art or, uh, singing, but I at the moment I really enjoy exercising, especially working, umm, and I have a dog, so I always try to walk my dog two times a day where I can, you know, boost my energy and relax after a long day.

✓ Well, I don't have a practical hobby like art or singing, but at the moment I really enjoy exercising, especially walking, and I have a dog, so I always try to walk my dog twice a day when I can to boost my energy and relax after a long day.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incorrect word choices (e.g., 'practical hobby set at art', 'working' instead of 'walking', 'two times a day where I can'). Restructure the sentence for clarity: use 'like' to give examples, place 'at the moment' before 'I really enjoy', replace 'working' with 'walking' to match context, use 'twice a day' for idiomatic frequency, and use 'when I can' and 'to boost' for purpose. Suggestion: practice joining ideas with conjunctions and keep verbs consistent.

× Yes, when I was the kid, I have a big passion for sports, especially soccer.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I had a big passion for sports, especially soccer.

The time reference 'when I was a kid' refers to the past, so the verb should be past tense ('had'), not present ('have'). Also use 'a kid' not 'the kid'. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time expression; use past tense for past time frames.

× So I often play soccer with my friends at school and I, I always, uh, I always wanted to join my sister Art, uh, because they can keep me, stay fit and uh, have a balance lifestyle.

✓ So I often played soccer with my friends at school, and I always wanted to join my sister's team because they helped me stay fit and have a balanced lifestyle.

This sentence mixes present and past. Because it describes childhood habits, use past tense ('played', 'wanted', 'helped'). Also correct possessive 'sister's team' and plural/singular agreement: 'they' is unclear; use 'they helped me' or 'it helped me'. Use 'balanced lifestyle' rather than 'balance lifestyle'. Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently and use correct possessive forms.

× Well, yes, boss, always in my favorite thing to do when, when, uh, when I hang out with a group of friends, I always prefer, uh, exercising activities at walking to the park or, umm, playing badminton, umm, because they can keep me stay fit and, you know, strengthen the, uh, teamwork.

✓ Well, yes, my favorite thing to do when I hang out with friends is to exercise, such as walking to the park or playing badminton, because these activities keep me fit and strengthen teamwork.

The original sentence has redundant words ('when' repeated), unclear address ('boss'), and awkward phrasing ('exercising activities at walking'). Reorder to a clear subject-predicate structure: 'my favorite thing... is to exercise', give examples with 'such as', use 'these activities' to refer back, and use 'keep me fit' (not 'keep me stay fit'). Suggestion: remove filler words, simplify structure, and ensure verbs match subjects.

× Oh yes, I and my dad, we have the same, uh, favorite sport, which is soccer, especially if they're a uh, good match of or Vietnam national team, we will sit down together and give for our national team.

✓ Oh yes, my dad and I have the same favorite sport, soccer. Especially when there is a good match for the Vietnam national team, we sit down together and cheer for our national team.

Pronoun order and usage: use 'my dad and I' not 'I and my dad, we'. Replace 'they're a good match of or Vietnam national team' with 'when there is a good match for the Vietnam national team'. Use 'cheer for' instead of 'give for'. Also keep tense consistent ('sit' as a habitual present). Suggestion: use standard subject order and correct verbs/phrases for cheering.

× Well, we enjoy the 1:00 because we can relax and enjoy and stay at the same hobbies.

✓ We enjoy watching matches together because we can relax, have fun, and share the same hobbies.

'We enjoy the 1:00' is unclear and likely a wrong expression; clarify as 'watching matches together'. Avoid repeating 'enjoy' twice; use varied verbs ('relax, have fun'). 'Stay at the same hobbies' is ungrammatical; use 'share the same hobbies'. Suggestion: clarify vague time references and use idiomatic phrases for shared activities.