Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb tenses, and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'Recently,' 'When I was a child,' 'Because'). Add one or two specific details about the hobby (what you draw, techniques learned). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy drawing. Recently I completed art school, which helped me improve my watercolor and sketching techniques. When I was a child my mother encouraged me and taught me basic strokes, so I’ve developed a strong foundation.

Suggestion: Good content and clear ideas. Improve coherence by using linking words and correct tense consistency. Make sentences more concise and add one specific example to illustrate (e.g., a memorable activity or achievement). Avoid starting sentences with 'And'.

Example: Yes, I used to draw and paint, and I also played sports like football and basketball. For example, I played on my school football team for two years, which helped me learn teamwork and discipline.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and grammar. Use linking words (e.g., 'since childhood,' 'also') more naturally and avoid repetition ('sports game, playing sports game'). Provide one specific detail about how the hobby helps you or a typical activity you do.

Example: Yes, I have drawn since childhood. Drawing and painting help me relax and express my ideas, and I also enjoy playing chess and football because they challenge my thinking and keep me active.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, past/simple present) and clearer linking words. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add a specific example of how your family member helps (e.g., a technique or advice). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, my grandmother also paints and has taught me many techniques. For instance, she showed me how to mix colors and correct perspective, and she gives feedback on my sketches so I can improve.

× Yes, I'll have a hobby like a drawing.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby: drawing.

The original uses future 'I'll have' and incorrect article 'a drawing'. The context asks about current hobbies, so use present simple 'I have'. 'Drawing' is an uncountable activity, so no article; using a colon clarifies the example. Suggestion: use 'I have a hobby: drawing' or 'My hobby is drawing.'

× Recently I finished my art school and really enjoyed it.

✓ Recently I finished art school and really enjoyed it.

Use of 'my art school' can be acceptable, but 'finished art school' is more natural in English. The past tense 'finished' and 'enjoyed' are correct for a recent completed action. Suggestion: keep past tense for completed events and omit unnecessary articles.

× When I was a child I start drawing and with them my mom helps me.

✓ When I was a child I started drawing and my mom helped me with them.

Mixes past and present tenses. 'When I was a child' requires past tense verbs: 'started' not 'start', and 'helped' not 'helps'. The phrase 'with them' is unclear; if referring to drawings, 'with them' may be acceptable but better: 'helped me with them' meaning she helped with the drawings. Suggestion: keep verbs in past tense and make the object clear.

× She always touch me how drawing correctly.

✓ She always taught me how to draw correctly.

Several errors: 'touch me' is incorrect collocation; use 'taught me'. 'How drawing correctly' is ungrammatical: use 'how to draw correctly'. Also 'always' with past habitual action works with simple past 'taught'. Suggestion: use 'She always taught me how to draw correctly.'

× Yes, when I was a child I started drawing and painting and I also enjoyed playing sports such as football, basketball or volleyball.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I started drawing and painting, and I also enjoyed playing sports such as football, basketball, and volleyball.

Original mostly correct but needs commas and 'and' before last item in a list for clarity. Past tense 'started' and 'enjoyed' are appropriate. Suggestion: include the conjunction before final list item and use commas for clarity.

× And I always try new things because it helped me discover what I enjoy most.

✓ And I always try new things because it helps me discover what I enjoy most.

Mixes present habitual 'I always try' with past 'helped'. Use present 'helps' to match 'always' and 'discover' in present. Suggestion: keep tense consistent; for habitual actions use present simple.

× Yes, I since childhood I draw.

✓ Yes, since childhood I have drawn.

Word order and tense are wrong. Place 'since childhood' before the verb phrase and use present perfect 'have drawn' for an action that started in the past and continues to present. Suggestion: 'Since childhood I have drawn' or 'I have been drawing since childhood.'

× I enjoyed drawing and painting because they help me relax and express my ideas.

✓ I enjoy drawing and painting because they help me relax and express my ideas.

Tense mismatch: 'I enjoyed' (past) conflicts with 'they help' (present). If the habit continues, use present 'I enjoy'. Also 'they' correctly refers to 'drawing and painting' (plural), so 'help' is correct. Suggestion: use present simple for ongoing preferences.

× And I also like sports game, playing sports game and chess because it's really interesting for me.

✓ I also like sports and chess because they are really interesting to me.

'Sports game' is unnatural; use 'sports'. Repetition 'playing sports game' removed. 'It's' singular conflicts with plural subjects; use 'they are' or rephrase 'it is really interesting to me' referring to each. Suggestion: 'I also like sports and chess because they are really interesting to me.'

× Yes, my grandmother drawing and painting and she always helps me with my artwork.

✓ Yes, my grandmother draws and paints, and she always helps me with my artwork.

Verb forms missing: use present simple 'draws and paints' for habitual actions. Added comma and conjunction for sentence flow. 'My grandmother drawing' is a fragment without verb. Suggestion: use proper verb forms for routines.

× When I do mistake she helps me to improve them and explain different techniques so I learn a lot from her.

✓ When I make mistakes she helps me improve them and explains different techniques, so I learn a lot from her.

'Do mistake' is incorrect; use 'make mistakes'. 'Helps me to improve them' is acceptable but 'helps me improve them' is more natural. 'Explain' should be 'explains' to agree with 'she'. Also add commas for clarity and maintain present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use correct collocations and subject-verb agreement.