Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, correct grammar and avoid awkward phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix collocations and word choice (e.g., “helps me unwind” not “helps me on win”) and remove duplicated words (“spending stepping”).

Example: I enjoy reading. It helps me unwind after a long day and broadens my knowledge. For example, fiction lets me escape into different worlds, while non-fiction teaches me about history and science.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, use correct nouns and verb forms, and be specific about activities. Correct odd phrases (“writing my bicycle” is incorrect) and check grammar and word order. Use linking words like “and” or “also” to connect ideas and provide a brief example or detail.

Example: Yes. As a child I loved drawing and writing short stories. I would spend hours sketching characters and creating imaginative tales, which helped my creativity improve and kept me entertained.

Suggestion: This answer is clear and relevant. To improve, vary vocabulary and add a specific brief example linking fiction and non-fiction to personal benefits. Use a linking word to contrast functions of genres (e.g., “whereas”).

Example: Yes — I have read since childhood. I developed a love of books early on: fiction helps me relax and empathize with characters, whereas non-fiction expands my knowledge about topics like psychology and history.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and correct awkward phrases (“interesting to compare genes” and “discover new others”). Provide a concise specific example of how you interact (e.g., a recent book discussed). Use linking words like “however” to show contrast when mentioning different tastes.

Example: To some extent, yes. My parents enjoy reading too, so we regularly recommend books to each other. For example, last month we discussed a historical novel and a science book, which led to a lively conversation despite our different tastes.

× Yes I do. I'm particularly passionate about reading because it not only helps me on win after a long day, but also broadens my intellectual horizons.

✓ Yes, I do. I'm particularly passionate about reading because it not only helps me unwind after a long day, but also broadens my intellectual horizons.

The phrase 'helps me on win' is ungrammatical. The intended verb is 'unwind' (present tense base form after 'helps me') meaning to relax. Use a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation. 'Helps me unwind' correctly uses the present simple to state a habitual effect of reading.

× Whenever I immerse myself into a good book, I feel as though I'm spending stepping into entirely different world.

✓ Whenever I immerse myself in a good book, I feel as though I'm stepping into an entirely different world.

Two issues: preposition and verb form. 'Immerse myself into' is nonstandard; use 'immerse myself in'. The phrase 'I'm spending stepping' is redundant and incorrect; choose 'I'm stepping' (present participle) to express the experience. Also add the indefinite article 'an' before 'entirely different world.'

× Yes, when I was a child, I was really into drawing and writing my bicycle.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I was really into drawing and writing, and I used to ride my bicycle.

The original mixes actions incorrectly: 'writing my bicycle' is nonsensical. Likely intended two hobbies: drawing and writing, and also riding a bicycle. Separate activities with commas and add 'used to ride my bicycle' to indicate a habitual past action. 'Used to' with the base verb expresses past habitual activities.

× I used to spend hours doing those activities which not only entertain me but also allow my creative to flourish.

✓ I used to spend hours doing those activities, which not only entertained me but also allowed my creativity to flourish.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'entertained' and 'allowed.' Also 'my creative' is incorrect noun form; use the noun 'creativity.' Add a comma before the relative clause for clarity.

× I developed a passion for books when I was young and I still read regularly because fiction helps me relax while non fiction broadens my knowledge and perspective.

✓ I developed a passion for books when I was young, and I still read regularly because fiction helps me relax while non-fiction broadens my knowledge and perspective.

Minor punctuation and formatting: add a comma before 'and' for compound sentence clarity, and use a hyphen in 'non-fiction' when used as a noun or adjective. The tense and meaning are otherwise correct.

× To some extent, yes. My parents are readers too, so we often exchange book recommendations and discuss what we've read, which I find enjoyable and intellectually stimulating.

✓ To some extent, yes. My parents are readers too, so we often exchange book recommendations and discuss what we've read, which I find enjoyable and intellectually stimulating.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. It uses present simple to describe habitual actions and a relative clause correctly.

× Sometimes we also have different tastes, so interesting to compare genes and discover new others.

✓ Sometimes we also have different tastes, so it's interesting to compare genres and discover new ones.

Multiple errors: 'so interesting to compare' lacks a subject and verb; add 'it's' to form a full clause. 'Compare genes' is a wrong word choice; the intended word is 'genres' (types of books). 'Discover new others' is ungrammatical — use 'discover new ones' to refer back to 'genres' or 'books.'