Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), avoid filler words (uh, um) and grammar errors. Use linking words for clarity and provide one or two specific details about drawing (how you practise, what you hope to achieve). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I don't have many hobbies at the moment, but I'm trying to improve my drawing skills. I practice sketching for thirty minutes every day and follow online tutorials to learn shading techniques. In the future I hope to reach a higher level so I can illustrate my own stories.

Suggestion: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Remove repetitions and hesitations. Give a clear reason or example for one hobby (when you started, how often you practised, what you enjoyed). Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child, especially singing and dancing. I joined a dance class at age seven and practised twice a week because dancing made me feel confident. I enjoyed performing at school events, which motivated me to keep improving.

Suggestion: Be specific about the hobby and avoid awkward phrases. Use correct collocations ("reading" not "reading skills") and give concrete details: what you read, how often, and why it matters. Limit to 2–3 clear sentences with logical linking.

Example: Yes, I've been an avid reader since childhood. I usually read novels and biographies several times a week, because they expand my vocabulary and help me think creatively. Nowadays I enjoy contemporary fiction by well-known authors.

Suggestion: Give a clear, grammatical response and explain differences between you and your family with specific examples. Avoid repetition and unclear sentences. Use linking words (however, while) and correct grammar ("only I do" not "only me one").

Example: No, my hobbies are different from my family's. While my parents prefer watching films, I enjoy reading non-fiction books about history and science because they broaden my horizons and give me new knowledge. My sibling likes sports, so we rarely share the same interests.

× Well, actually, no, it is.

✓ Well, actually, no, I don't.

The original sentence 'no, it is' is ungrammatical in this context. The student intended to say they do not have hobbies. This is a sentence structure/subject-reference error; use 'I don't' or 'I don't have any' to clearly refer to the speaker. Suggestion: Say 'I don't' or 'I don't have any hobbies.'

× but all we want is uh, drawing skills.

✓ but what I want is to improve my drawing skills.

'Drawing skills' alone does not fit after 'all we want is' and 'want' is followed by an infinitive. Also pronoun 'we' conflicts with context. Use 'what I want is to improve my drawing skills.' This uses the infinitive 'to improve' correctly and clarifies the subject.

× I always want to develop my drawing skills by master or higher.

✓ I always want to develop my drawing skills to a master level or higher.

The phrase 'by master or higher' is incorrect. Use 'to a master level' to indicate desired proficiency. Maintain infinitive 'to develop' and correct prepositional phrase.

× Uh, I used to have a lot of hobbies in my childhood like dancing, singing and a lot of exercise to do.

✓ I used to have a lot of hobbies in my childhood, like dancing, singing and a lot of different exercises.

'Used to' correctly indicates past habitual actions, but 'a lot of exercise to do' is unnatural. Use plural 'exercises' and add 'different' for clarity. Also add a comma after 'childhood.'

× As I mentioned before, I used to have a lot of hobbies that I, uh, I did everyday life, which is, was very important for me, uh, like such as singing and dancing.

✓ As I mentioned before, I used to have a lot of hobbies that I did every day, which were very important to me, such as singing and dancing.

Problems: 'everyday life' vs 'every day' (adjective vs adverb), awkward repetition and tense mismatch 'is, was.' Use past 'were' to match 'used to have.' Remove filler words and use 'such as' for examples.

× I, I started dancing because it gives me, umm, comfortable thoughts and, uh, uh, eye-catching dancing I always inspired by.

✓ I started dancing because it gives me comfortable thoughts, and I am always inspired by eye-catching dancing.

Issues: tense and form ('gives me comfortable thoughts' is unusual but acceptable; better 'makes me feel comfortable'), missing subject 'I am' before 'always inspired by.' Rephrase to 'I am always inspired by eye-catching dancing' to form a complete clause.

× Yeah, definitely I do.

✓ Yes, I definitely do.

Word order: adverb 'definitely' usually follows the subject. 'Yes, I definitely do' is the natural order.

× I have a reading skills which is important for me.

✓ I have reading skills, which are important to me.

'Reading skills' is plural, so use plural verb 'are.' Also 'a' cannot be used with plural noun. Add comma before nonrestrictive clause.

× I always inspired by reading higher skill reading writers and nowadays are one of them.

✓ I am always inspired by skilled writers; some of them are my favorites nowadays.

Missing auxiliary verb 'am' for passive construction 'inspired by.' 'Higher skill reading writers' is unclear; 'skilled writers' is more natural. 'Nowadays are one of them' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'some of them are my favorites nowadays.'

× I can read any story by my skills, so.

✓ I can read any story because of my reading skills.

'By my skills' is unnatural; use 'because of my reading skills.' Avoid leaving sentence trailing with 'so.' Complete the sentence logically.

× And no, definitely no, none of them are like reading books.

✓ No, definitely not; none of them like reading books.

Original mixes 'no' responses awkwardly and uses 'are like reading books' which is incorrect. Use 'none of them like reading books' where 'none' refers to family members and plural verb 'like' matches plural implied subjects.

× Uh, only me one and I have a sibling as well.

✓ I'm the only one, and I also have a sibling.

'Only me one' is ungrammatical. Use 'I'm the only one' to indicate uniqueness. 'I also have a sibling' is natural.

× So I draw reading some non fiction books.

✓ So I enjoy reading some non-fiction books.

'I draw reading' is incorrect verb combination. Likely intended 'I enjoy reading.' Use correct verb 'enjoy' and hyphenate 'non-fiction.'

× It gives me it gives us broaden our horizons and the gain knowledge.

✓ It helps me broaden my horizons and gain knowledge.

The original repeats 'it gives me it gives us' and mixes pronouns. Use consistent subject 'it' and correct verb forms: 'helps me broaden' and 'gain knowledge.' Remove redundant parts.