Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần rút gọn và sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (thời gian, nơi, lí do). Tránh lặp từ và tiếng ồn (uh). Dùng danh từ số nhiều/đơn đúng (books), và giới từ chính xác (around my neighborhood → in my neighborhood).

Example: To be honest, I have several hobbies. I enjoy reading books and cycling in my neighborhood in the evenings because they help me relax after a hard day at work.

Suggestion: Cần sử dụng thì quá khứ cho sở thích thời thơ ấu (I liked / I used to). Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (climb → climbing; brings → brought). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn về cảm xúc hoặc kỷ niệm để câu tự nhiên và liên kết hơn.

Example: When I was a child, I used to climb trees a lot because I was very curious and adventurous. Climbing made me feel free and gave me a great place to explore and play.

Suggestion: Dùng thì phù hợp và nhất quán (I have enjoyed reading since childhood / it has helped me). Sửa danh từ và số (books; cultures or traditions; new countries). Nên nêu ví dụ cụ thể về loại sách để chứng minh tính cụ thể và phong phú từ vựng.

Example: I have enjoyed reading books since childhood because they helped me learn about other places and cultures. For example, I often read historical novels and travel essays that immerse me in different traditions around the world.

Suggestion: Cần câu mở ngắn gọn, sau đó nêu hoạt động cụ thể và tần suất. Sửa ngữ pháp (on weekends, we often go to the zoo) và cụm từ tự nhiên (to spend time together / to get closer to nature). Loại bỏ câu đệm không cần thiết như “You know what”.

Example: Yes, I share some hobbies with my family. On weekends we often go to the zoo to spend time together and get closer to nature.

× Well to be honest, I have several hobbies like climbing trees, reading book or cycling in around the around my neighborhood when around my neighborhoods in my free times to uh, to entertain myself after a hard work day.

✓ Well, to be honest, I have several hobbies like climbing trees, reading books, or cycling around my neighborhood in my free time to entertain myself after a hard work day.

Student omitted plural form for 'book' and used incorrect articles and prepositions. Use the plural 'books' for a general hobby. Use 'around my neighborhood' (singular) and 'in my free time' (uncountable phrase). Also add commas for clarity and remove repeated words. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general activities (reading books), use 'around my neighborhood', and 'in my free time'.

× Well, my hobby, my hobbies when I was a child is climb trees because I'm a mischievous girl who always finds something to something news to explores so and I'm very curious about everything in the around me so and climb trees bring me sense of freedoms.

✓ Well, my hobby when I was a child was climbing trees because I was a mischievous girl who always wanted to explore new things, and I was very curious about everything around me, so climbing trees gave me a sense of freedom.

Multiple subject-verb agreement and tense issues: 'hobbies... is' should match number and tense (singular 'hobby' with past tense 'was'); verb forms need -ing for gerunds ('climbing trees') and past simple for past habits ('was', 'gave'). Also incorrect word order and pluralization: 'sense of freedoms' should be 'sense of freedom'. Suggestions: match subject number with verb (was), use gerunds for activities (climbing), keep consistent past tense for childhood activities, and use 'sense of freedom'.

× To be honest, reading book is my hobby since childhood because it helped me to gain knowledge directly and I can immerse myself in something new like cultural or tradition of a new countries around the world.

✓ To be honest, reading books has been my hobby since childhood because it has helped me gain knowledge directly and I can immerse myself in new cultures and traditions of countries around the world.

Tense inconsistency and article/plural errors: for an action continuing from past to present use present perfect 'has been' and 'has helped'. Use plural 'books' and plural 'cultures and traditions' and correct article usage ('countries' not 'a new countries'). Suggestions: use present perfect for ongoing habits (has been, has helped), use plural nouns when generalizing (books, cultures, traditions), and simplify 'gain knowledge' without 'to'.

× To be honest, I have the same hobbies as my family members. You know what, in the weekend we because we have a lot of free time, so we often go to the zoos together to come closer with come closer and spend time with.

✓ To be honest, I have the same hobbies as my family members. On weekends, because we have a lot of free time, we often go to the zoo together to get closer and spend time together.

Incorrect use of definite article and pluralization ('in the weekend' -> 'on weekends'; 'zoos' should be 'the zoo' or 'zoos' depending but 'the zoo' is more natural here). Also awkward phrasing 'come closer with come closer' should be 'get closer' and repetition 'spend time with' needs an object; use 'spend time together'. Suggestions: use 'on weekends' for habitual actions, use 'the zoo' for a typical family outing or 'zoos' if referring to different ones, use 'get closer' and 'spend time together' for clarity.