Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu: dùng thì và dạng động từ đúng (ví dụ: "My hobby is playing sports"). Giảm lặp từ và làm câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng (tối đa 4-5 câu). Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể như loại thể thao, tần suất và lý do. Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý mạch lạc (e.g., "because", "so", "also").

Example: My main hobby is playing sports with my friends, especially in the morning. We usually play badminton or football three times a week because it helps us stay fit. It also gives me time to relax and unwind after studying. I enjoy the social aspect as well, since exercising together keeps us motivated.

Suggestion: Giảm tiếng ừm/ừ và sử dụng thì quá khứ phù hợp khi nói về quá khứ (ví dụ: "I liked going shopping"). Cải thiện từ vựng và ngữ pháp: dùng cụm động từ chuẩn ("hang out with my family"), sửa lỗi ngữ pháp ("strengthen our relationship" thay vì "string bond relations"). Trình bày 2-3 câu: câu chủ đề + 1 câu chi tiết cụ thể (đi đâu, tần suất, kỷ niệm).

Example: When I was a child, I enjoyed going shopping and hanging out with my family. We often visited markets and tourist spots on weekends, which made family time special. These trips helped strengthen our relationship because we always talked and laughed together.

Suggestion: Sử dụng thì rõ ràng (quá khứ cho thói quen thời thơ ấu, hiện tại cho thói quen hiện nay). Tránh lặp từ và dùng danh từ/động từ đúng ("neighbours" hoặc "neighborhood kids"). Viết câu ngắn gọn, có liên từ ("however", "now") để diễn đạt sự thay đổi theo thời gian và nêu tần suất cụ thể.

Example: Since I was a child, I enjoyed playing sports with the children in my neighbourhood. Back then, we played football almost every afternoon. Now I still enjoy sports but I mainly play badminton and football with my friends at the local court.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp ("young girl bother" unclear — use "younger sister" or "younger brother"). Dùng số ít/nhưng đúng ("has the same hobby as me"). Tránh câu dài lủng củng; tạo cấu trúc rõ: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể. Hạn chế lỗi đại từ và chia động từ.

Example: My younger sister has the same hobby as me: she likes playing sports, especially badminton. We often play together after studying to stay fit and have fun. Playing with her always cheers me up because she makes me laugh.

× My hobby is play sport with my friends, especially in the morning.

✓ My hobby is playing sports with my friends, especially in the morning.

The verb after 'is' should be in the -ing form to act as a noun (gerund). Also 'sport' should be plural as a general activity: 'sports'. Use 'playing sports' for idiomatic English.

× I think this opportunity to exercise and stay fit with my friends, I think is a way to relax and unwind after studying time.

✓ I think this opportunity to exercise and stay fit with my friends is a way to relax and unwind after study time.

The sentence has redundant elements and incorrect word order. Remove the repeated 'I think' and place the verb 'is' directly after the subject phrase. Use 'study time' or better 'studying' or 'after studying' for natural phrasing.

× Since my childhood, I think my hobby is umm, go shopping and hang out with my family.

✓ Since my childhood, I think my hobby has been going shopping and hanging out with my family.

When referring to a habitual activity from the past until now, use present perfect ('has been') and gerunds ('going', 'hanging'). 'Since my childhood' requires a point in time with a perfect tense.

× I very like umm, go to everywhere and travel with my family.

✓ I really like going everywhere and traveling with my family.

Use 'really' instead of 'very' with 'like'. After 'like' use gerunds ('going', 'traveling'). 'Go to everywhere' is ungrammatical; say 'going everywhere'.

× Uh, so I think this uh, way too string bond relations.

✓ Uh, so I think this is a good way to strengthen family bonds.

The original is ungrammatical and uses incorrect vocabulary. Use 'strengthen' (verb) and 'family bonds' (noun phrase). 'Way to strengthen family bonds' is a natural structure.

× Since I was a child, moreover, I also enjoyed playing sport with my neighborhood.

✓ Since I was a child, I have also enjoyed playing sports with my neighbors.

Use present perfect 'have enjoyed' for activities from past to present. 'Neighborhood' is a noun meaning area; use 'neighbors' for people. 'Playing sports' uses gerund and plural.

× I also play football with my neighborhood, but when I grow up, I also like play badminton and football with my friends.

✓ I also play football with my neighbors, but as I grew up, I also liked playing badminton and football with my friends.

Use 'with my neighbors' not 'with my neighborhood'. Match tense: 'when I grow up' should be past 'as I grew up' if speaking about change. After 'like' use gerund 'playing'. Alternatively use present perfect if still true.

× My young girl bother have the same hobby with me which is play sport especially play badminton.

✓ My younger sister has the same hobby as me, which is playing sports, especially badminton.

'Young girl bother' is incorrect; likely 'younger sister'. Subject-verb agreement: 'has' with singular. Use 'the same hobby as me' not 'with me'. After 'is' use gerund 'playing sports' and 'especially badminton' for clarity.

× We also play sport together after studying time to stay fit and to exercise and play with him is very funny and relax.

✓ We also play sports together after study to stay fit and exercising and playing with him is very fun and relaxing.

Use plural 'sports'. 'After studying time' is awkward; 'after study' or 'after studying' works. 'Play with him is very funny and relax' needs gerunds and correct adjectives: 'is very fun and relaxing' or 'is great fun and relaxing'.

× She always make me laugh and.

✓ She always makes me laugh.

The verb must agree with subject: 'She makes'. Remove the trailing 'and' which leaves the sentence incomplete.