Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 話が短く不自然な表現（“could can”などの誤り）があり、接続詞の使い方や文の流れを改善すると自然さが増します。具体的には主題文で直接答え、次に理由を一つか二つ述べ、最後に最近の具体例で締める構成にしてください。また、文法と語順（過去形・助動詞の使い方）に注意しましょう。

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy walking around my neighborhood because it helps me relax and notice small changes. For example, recently I discovered a popular bakery nearby that I hadn’t seen before, and I’ve been meaning to try its bread.

Suggestion: 文が冗長で不自然な繰り返し（'with my mother'が重複）や語順の誤りがあります。まず直接に答え、その後に理由や場所を簡潔に述べ、最後に一つの具体例を付け加えると良いです。冠詞や形容詞の使い方（a very huge → a huge / very large）にも注意しましょう。

Example: Yes. As a child I enjoyed playing badminton with my mother because there was a large park near our house. We often went there on weekends and played for an hour or two.

Suggestion: 答えは明確ですが、語法と流暢さを改善すると更に良くなります（“enjoyed to watch”は不自然）。まず主題文で現在も続いていることを示し、その後に具体例と感想をつなげると自然です。接続詞（for example, and）を使って論理的につなぎましょう。

Example: Yes, I have. I have loved watching films and animated shows since I was a child. For example, I used to watch Tom and Jerry and SpongeBob a lot, and I still enjoy animations because they are entertaining and uplifting.

Suggestion: 文法の誤り（likes like, can conversation converse）や語順の問題が目立ちます。まず短く肯定し、誰が同じ趣味かを明確に述べ、最後にその共通の趣味がどう影響するかを具体的に述べると良いです。動詞の一致（they like）や名詞・動詞の正しい形を使いましょう。

Example: Yes. My father and sister also enjoy watching animated shows, so we often talk about our favorite cartoons during dinner and recommend new ones to each other.

× Yes, I have. My hobby is walking around my house.

✓ Yes, I do. My hobby is walking around my neighborhood.

The student used 'I have' which is less natural for hobbies; native speakers usually ask/answer with 'do'. Also 'house' suggests inside; 'walking around my neighborhood' is clearer. Use present simple for habitual actions.'

× Because when I walk around my house I could can find new things.

✓ Because when I walk around my neighborhood I can find new things.

The sentence incorrectly uses two modal verbs 'could can'. Use a single appropriate modal. For present habitual ability use 'can'. Also replace 'house' with 'neighborhood' for clarity.'

× Recently I could find a bakery that sold famous bread.

✓ Recently I found a bakery that sells famous bread.

Use simple past 'found' for a recent completed action. 'Sold' is past tense but here 'sells' (present simple) describes an ongoing property of the bakery. Also avoid 'could' when simply stating discovery.'

× When I was a child, I liked to play badminton with my mother because near my house there was a very huge park, so I could play badminton with my mother and my.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to play badminton with my mother because there was a very large park near my house, so I could play badminton with my mother and my friends.

Use past tense consistently for childhood. 'Very huge' is unnatural; use 'very large' or 'huge'. 'Near my house' should follow verb or be placed 'near my house'. The sentence ends incomplete 'and my' — likely 'friends'. Maintain word order and complete the noun phrase.'

× Yes I have. This is watching movies or animations.

✓ Yes, I do. I like watching movies and animations.

Answer to 'Do you have' should use 'do'. 'This is watching' is incorrect; use 'I like watching' or 'My hobby is watching'. Use 'and' instead of 'or' for combining items.'

× When I was a child I enjoyed to watch a lot of animations such as Tom and Jerry and SpongeBob and it was very fun.

✓ When I was a child, I enjoyed watching many animations such as Tom and Jerry and SpongeBob; they were very fun.

After 'enjoy' use the -ing form, not the infinitive. Use 'many' with countable plural 'animations'. Use past tense 'were' to match 'was' corrected and separate ideas for clarity.'

× Yes I have, my sister and father also likes like to watch animations so when we eat dinner we can conversation converse about the animations.

✓ Yes, I do. My sister and father also like to watch animations, so when we eat dinner we can converse about them.

Answer should be 'do'. Subject 'my sister and father' is plural so verb should be 'like' not 'likes'. Remove duplicate 'likes like'. Use 'converse' as the verb, not 'conversation'. Replace 'the animations' with pronoun 'them' for naturalness.'