Hobby— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and shows several hobbies, but it is repetitive and a little disorganized. Keep sentences concise (max 5), use a clear topic sentence, and avoid repeating the same idea (watching films) twice. Add one specific detail about each hobby and use linking words (for example, 'also' or 'in addition') properly to connect ideas.

Example: I enjoy several hobbies. For example, I often go to the cinema to watch new releases because I like the big-screen experience, and at home I watch dramas to relax in the evenings. In addition, I usually draw during my free time to practice my skills and unwind.

Suggestion: Good direct answer with personal detail and cause-effect, but the sentence is slightly ungrammatical and a bit long. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly add specific supporting details. Use correct tense and smoother linking (e.g., 'which' or 'and this').

Example: Yes, I drew a lot as a child. I spent hours in my sketchbook to relax and to express my feelings, which eventually influenced my decision to study art at university.

Suggestion: You answer the question but repeat previous content and mix tenses. Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating phrases like 'as I said', and use consistent tense. Add a brief reason why you continue the hobby and one specific detail about your pride or achievement.

Example: Yes, I have continued drawing since childhood. I still sketch regularly because it helps me think creatively, and I'm proud that it led me to study art at university and improve my technique.

Suggestion: The idea is clear but there are errors and an unclear phrase ('your films'). Be more specific and concise: state difference, give a brief example of what your family enjoys, and explain one reason for the difference. Use natural phrasing.

Example: No, my family and I have different interests. While I enjoy drawing, most of them prefer watching films together at home because they like social activities and new releases.

× Yes, I have a lot of hobbies, for example I love watching films in the cinema and also I love to watch a drama or film in my house and also I usually draw when I have a free time.

✓ Yes, I have a lot of hobbies. For example, I love watching films at the cinema, and I also like to watch dramas or films at home. I usually draw when I have free time.

Errors: unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'cinema' and 'a' before 'free time'; run-on sentence. Suggestions: Use 'at the cinema' or simply 'at the cinema' (both acceptable; 'at the cinema' is standard), but remove 'the' only if speaking generally 'in cinema' is not correct; better to use 'at the cinema'. Use 'at home' instead of 'in my house' for natural phrasing. Use 'free time' without an article. Break into shorter sentences and replace repeated 'also I love' with 'I also like' to avoid redundancy.

× Yes, when I was young I usually draw in this my sketchbook to relax myself and express my feelings and also and it lead to be my major in university.

✓ Yes, when I was young I usually drew in my sketchbook to relax and express my feelings, and it later led to my university major.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('was young' past, but 'draw' present); awkward word order 'this my sketchbook'; incorrect passive phrasing 'lead to be my major'. Suggestions: Keep past tense throughout: 'drew'. Use natural noun phrase 'my sketchbook'. Use 'led to my university major' or 'led me to choose my university major' for clarity.

× As I said, I used to draw when I have free time so that it led to be my university major now and I'm proud of this.

✓ As I said, I used to draw when I had free time, which led to my university major, and I'm proud of that.

Errors: tense mismatch — 'used to' (past habit) followed by 'have' (present). Awkward phrase 'led to be my university major now'. Suggestions: Use past tense 'had free time' to match 'used to'. Use 'which led to my university major' or 'which led me to choose my university major'. Use 'that' rather than 'this' to refer back and improve naturalness.

× No, most of my family members do not enjoy drawing. They usually spend their time to watch your films.

✓ No, most of my family members do not enjoy drawing. They usually spend their time watching films.

Errors: incorrect verb construction 'spend their time to watch' should be 'spend their time watching'; inappropriate 'your films' instead of 'films' or 'movies'. Suggestions: Use 'spend their time' followed by gerund 'watching'. Remove 'your' unless addressing someone who owns the films; use 'films' or 'movies' for general statement.