Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Reduce fillers and correct small grammar (e.g., remove duplicate 'it is').

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk for over an hour a day because it’s an affordable and effective way to keep fit; for example, I walk around my neighborhood every morning to boost my energy and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Good content and clear explanation, but avoid absolute claims and unnecessary repetition ('video games' and 'PlayStation'). Use a linking phrase and one concise example to be more natural.

Example: Yes, I did. Besides walking, I often played outside with neighborhood children because we had fewer electronic games then; for example, we spent afternoons playing tag and football in the street.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and improve coherence with linking words. Use precise vocabulary and correct grammar (e.g., 'a very vibrant atmosphere' and 'you can meet people with the same purpose'). Limit to two supporting points with examples.

Example: I think people prefer parks because they offer green, peaceful surroundings that help them relax. Also, parks are social places where you can meet others with similar interests, such as joining a walking group.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and correct word choice and grammar ('prefer quiet places', not 'peripheral'). Give a direct answer stating a location, then explain why with one contrasting sentence. Avoid vague negatives.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a quiet nature reserve because I prefer peaceful places where I can think. Although I enjoy solitude, sometimes staying at home feels stale, so a long outdoor walk would be refreshing.

Suggestion: Be specific and correct past-tense agreement ('we were tired'). Avoid vague word 'another' unless context is clear. Include a brief detail about what you did there to enrich the answer.

Example: Recently my wife and I walked in Riverside Park, which was very green and scenic. We walked for over three hours, stopped for a picnic, and felt tired but happy afterward.

× Even when I stay at home, I prefer to walk for maybe more than an hour because I believe that it is a it is an affordable and effective way to stay fit.

✓ Even when I stay at home, I prefer to walk for maybe more than an hour because I believe that it is an affordable and effective way to stay fit.

Type 10: The original sentence included a duplicated phrase 'it is a it is an' which is a redundancy/repetition error rather than a present participle error. However, this list restricts corrections to listed types; the closest applicable category is 'Verb in the present participle form' (10) though the actual issue is repetition. Correction removes the repeated words. Suggestion: read sentences aloud to catch accidental repetitions and edit them out.

× Not only for walking but also for playing with others, because when I was a child there was no video games and there was no PlayStation, so we had to go out and play with our neighbors.

✓ Not only for walking but also for playing with others, because when I was a child there were no video games and there was no PlayStation, so we had to go out and play with our neighbors.

Type 3: 'There be' issue. Use 'there were' for plural countable noun 'video games' in past tense. Also keep 'there was no PlayStation' for the singular. Suggestion: match 'there is/there are' and 'there was/there were' with singular or plural nouns.

× Well, I believe that people like to walk in parks because, uh, parks, uh, offer a more green environment. So it's very vibrant atmosphere.

✓ Well, I believe that people like to walk in parks because parks offer a greener environment, so it's a very vibrant atmosphere.

Type 13: 'More green' is incorrect adjective form; use comparative adjective 'greener'. Also 'it's very vibrant atmosphere' misses the article 'a'. Suggestion: use comparative forms (greener) and include articles before singular countable nouns ('a very vibrant atmosphere').

× On the other hand, that you can see a lot of people with the same purpose on the, at the park, so you can make friends there.

✓ On the other hand, you can see a lot of people with the same purpose at the park, so you can make friends there.

Type 11: Incorrect preposition placement and extraneous words. 'On the, at the park' is incorrect; use 'at the park'. Also remove 'that' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: choose the correct preposition for locations ('at the park') and avoid filler words.

× Well, because I am an introverted person, I always peripheral quiet places and so I prefer to stay at home and work.

✓ Well, because I am an introverted person, I always prefer quiet, peripheral places, and so I prefer to stay at home and work.

Type 12: Original contained wrong word 'peripheral' placement and missing verb 'prefer' (word choice error). This is primarily a word choice/order error; mapped to pronouns per the provided list constraints. Correction inserts 'prefer' and orders adjectives properly. Suggestion: ensure correct verb is used and place adjectives before nouns ('quiet, peripheral places').

× Well, recently I went to another park with my wife and it was really green and beautiful and we walked for more than three hours and we was tired after that walking.

✓ Well, recently I went to another park with my wife and it was really green and beautiful, and we walked for more than three hours and we were tired after that walk.

Type 5: Past tense issue and subject-verb agreement: 'we was' is incorrect; use 'we were'. Also 'after that walking' is awkward; use 'after that walk'. Suggestion: in past narratives, use past tense verbs and ensure plural subjects take 'were' not 'was'; use noun forms ('walk') after time expressions.